Reviewer: DeathBlade__

REVIEW - THE DAYDREAMERS CLUB: CLASS OF 2001 (RookWri78) 

The first 4 chapters were reviewed.

Title: 3/5   

- The low score is mainly because I don't see any of the title in the plot so far. It's hard to judge within four chapters but since they were all introductory, I didn't see anything that had the potential to become a club.

- Referring to the blurb, it seems to be about a sci-fi quest. Even in the blurb, however, there's no mention of daydreamers or a class of 2001. I'd suggest having a more accurate title that matches slightly with the blurb, if not in the first few chapters of the book.

- Also, it's too lengthy. This isn't necessarily a bad thing but it makes the title hard to remember. Maybe opt for either 'The Daydreamers Club' or 'Class of 2001' (but if doing, either, give hints related to the title in the blurb).

Cover: 2/5

- There isn't much going on in the cover. It's simply a background image with the title in the front. Even the background image doesn't really give any hints related to the plot since it's very plain. To me, it just looks like a starry night and that doesn't seem to fit the theme of the book very much.

- I'd say to have a background that has more details. Perhaps you can have a club or silhouettes of people discussing something. Or, you could touch into the sci-fi parts of the story to make an intense background.

- The font, in my opinion, isn't very eye-catching. It's very simple and it doesn't pull me into the book. You could use bolder fonts and use brighter shades in order to make it look appealing.

- I'd say the whole drawback of the cover is that it isn't eye-catching, and nor does it fit the plot since it doesn't have too many details. Working on those aspects could really increase the first impression.

Blurb: 3/5

- The blurb is written incredibly well! It's short, but it's more than enough to pull me into the book. The first line is an excellent way to pull a reader into a book and the succeeding paragraph is perfectly written.

- The only drawback, that I mentioned in the title as well, is that it doesn't give any hints related to the title. Since the first few chapters don't, I think it would be helpful to add hints about why the title is so in the blurb at least.

- Other than this though, I really liked the blurb. If I were to read the blurb alone, it would have got a full score but tying it in with the other aspects needs a little work.

Writing Style: 5/10

This would be easier if I were to break it down into chapters, so I will be doing just that.

Chapter 1

> The first line was amazing. The description of the beaten-up man was written really well and it felt like we were diving right into the action which I really liked.

> What I noticed immediately was that there were quite many characters with long names. Since it's only the first chapter, and there were already a relatively larger number of characters, I found it hard to follow when you kept switching from their first and last names. I had to reread scenes multiple times to realize who was who. This is something I faced in all the chapters I read.

> Young-ja talks to those gang members and in my very blunt opinion, they didn't seem cool enough to be gang members. I understand that Young-ja being a detective had to be much cooler than them but I didn't like how they were kind of dumbed down. Perhaps you can work more on that scene in such a way that both parties look bold in their own ways and Young-ja is just better.

> A particular sentence - it's here somewhere - Aha - felt like it was written in first person POV, rather than third, which your book follows. The tone sounds very conversational as if Young-ja is talking to herself and that doesn't match with the rest of the chapter.

Chapter 2

> I was very confused from the get-go. I expected to know more about the gang members but we were talking about a movie star in this chapter. Although, I understood halfway through that you were switching POVs so from there it was perfectly understandable.

> Something I mentioned earlier, but the names. In this chapter, we have even more characters and again, you keep switching between first and last names and it was very hard to follow.

- With chapters 3 and 4, I understood the pattern the book was following so I was able to flow along with it better. Still, the names were a huge issue for me. I'm sorry for bringing it up so many times, but I was having a hard time following the plot because of the way their names kept switching.

- The problem is that in the span of 4 chapters, we have completely different storylines running parallelly and each storyline has multiple characters. That, added to the fact that you switched between first and last names (and in my complete honesty, these are names I've never heard before) it was very hard to follow.

- Other than that though, I like the pattern of the book. I like how you'll probably show different stories merging together.

- The surroundings are also described very nicely. I had no problem visualizing where the characters were and I really enjoyed that aspect of the book.

Grammar: 10/10

- I had no problem with the grammar. It was seamless for the most part and it was very easy to follow. I may have missed some issues but the point is, it's not blatantly visible, which made the reading a lot better.

- I'd suggest working on the vocabulary. There's nothing wrong with it per se but many a time I felt you could have used better, more advanced words to enhance the reading. This isn't a compulsory matter, but there is always something to improve, and working on the vocab might just be it.

- In chapter 1, you wrote a sentence from when the minute they were caught. I'd suggest omitting when from the sentence since it's rather unwanted and makes the sentence length.

- Overall, great job with the grammar! I was completely impressed by it!

Plot: 6/10

- The future of the plot seems to hold great potential. I always like it when different storylines clash at once and from there, chaos ensues. It's a great premise to make the readers excited for the further chapters.

- However, I think the pace should be worked on. So far, we've only seen their day-to-day life, which isn't a very great hook.

- I was excited to read the first chapter since it seemed like there was a lot going on. However, the gang members were forgotten really quickly. If you had stuck to that point in Young-ja's storyline, it would have been a lot more interesting than a regular day.

- The other chapters were also just the daily routine/day for the characters (Jae-seong, Dae-ho and Ha-neul) but since it wasn't the first chapter, it didn't affect the hook.

- What I noticed quickly was that the first 4 chapters were about 4 of the characters' lives. Considering the blurb, it means two more characters are yet to be shown and that's what the next two chapters will contain. However, reading the daily routines of 6 different people for 6 consecutive chapters seems rather lengthy. You could focus on intense moments happening in their lives and have them arriving at the bank as the last scene. That way, the readers will be very engaged in what is happening and you can simultaneously bring them all to the start of the plot.

- The problem (that I felt) with your current format is that the pacing feels very slow. Although they are different characters, we can expect that it will be a normal day before all the chaos and that predictability made the initial chapters much less intense. Increasing the speed of your plot would pull away from all storylines merging together so instead of doing that, you could have more intense scenes (as I've mentioned).

- Other than that, the other issue I faced is something that I mentioned in the writing style. Because of the names (again, so sorry for bringing it up all the time), I couldn't follow the plot. So what might have been very interesting ended up being something I was rather confused at.

- I liked how you showed that Young-ja and Dae-ho knew each other in chapter 1.3. It hinted at possible character dynamics when they do go on the quest and I liked that you left that out for us.

- Other than the major issues I mentioned, I do believe that the plot has amazing potential. The execution needs a little work though. The number of problems is limited, however, its magnitude is a little large. However, I have faith that it can be fixed.

- Overall, I find myself excited for the further chapters although the current ones could use some work.

Characters: 3/10

- The real issue is that the only chapters I reviewed were all introductory. That means, you didn't have time to focus on the characters since you needed to push your plot forward. While I completely understand this, there's also the problem that I can't really judge it accurately.

- So far, we know the basics of the characters; Young-ja is cool and bold, Jae-seong gets angry easily, Dae-ho is a nice brother and very considerate and Ha-neul is a rich guy. This base is great for building the character, although not a lot of time has been put into it.

- In fact, if you decide to retain the first few chapters showcasing their daily life, I'd suggest you add more clues about their character. You could show their behavior through actions to firmly solidify what type of people they are.

- I do not have much to criticize or praise here since I haven't got an in-depth view of the characters. However, if you put focus on developing them, I believe they can be real human beings to who the characters can relate to. Their dynamics during the quest would be very interesting to read so I wish you luck with the character development.

Overall Enjoyment: 3/5

- As I've mentioned, the plot has amazing potential. I can just tell that after they enter the quest (and whatever happens at the bank) is going to be super interesting. The main focus of the plot has amazing potential!

- However, the start needs improvement. I want this book to grow and flourish, and I really believe it can. Just look into all the points I've mentioned and feel free to reach out to me anytime regarding the book.

- Do not let the score discourage you; this is just one person and there might be other people who were able to follow along with the names (hence enjoying the book a lot more). However, I wrote the review with my understanding in mind and I believe that it would be helpful overall to work on the writing style a bit.

- Other than that though, I have nothing more to say.

- I wish you the very best of luck with continuing this book!

Total: 35/60