REVIEW - US. TOGETHER. ALONE. ( pipiwritesnonsense )

REVIEWER - DeathBlade__ 

Reviewed fully

Title: 10/10

Book: 5/5

The title fits with the book really well. I say this because every poem talked about a lost memory and the sadness behind it, which portrayed two people and what they used to have and what they lost. It shows them both when they were together and separate (alone) and that gives the title a lot of meaning. It also sounds very poetic and meaningful when said which is another nice touch.

Poem: 5/5

I like all the titles for the individual poems as well. They resonate with the specific poem and they sound amazing. I could go into more detail if there was something I viewed as a flaw, but I actually like all the titles

Overall, great job with the titles!

Cover: 3.5/5

I like the idea of using a pinterest aesthetic journal-type cover. I think it really suits any collection of poems, this being no different. What I didn't like, however, are the fonts. I like the simplicity of them, which again fits with the book. But, I can't read them clearly. The font is too small and it might go unnoticed. After zooming in, it appeared blurry which I did not like. You could change that and add more of a musical aspect (since you had many metaphors with music) and it will be perfect.

Blurb: 2/5

Immediately, I noticed the blurb was too long. But its length wasn't due to the blurb itself, it was due to the achievements. While publicizing them is not wrong, it could make the blurb look too lengthy. Another thing is that even the blurb itself is smaller than all the other information, which I did not like.

I like the quote at the beginning, it gives a sophisticated vibe to the book.

I didn't like the paragraph about it being 'just silly poems'. I mean sure, that's what they might have started off like but when doing an actual review, the whole paragraph seems like a letdown. Give us a glimpse of what the poems are about. In fact, you could have a poem in a few lines that pulls us in even more and have the final paragraph be something like what you wrote but with a bit more confidence in your own poems.

Meaning: 8/10

I loved the poems a lot. The first two poems were okay, I didn't feel like they were going anywhere. I say this because the 'Dead Roses' and 'Stay- Forever' seemed too straightforward. I would like to dig deeper for hidden meanings but there weren't any for me to do so.

After the third poem, things started looking up. 'Nephophilia's' 3rd stanza was when I was drawn in completely. I loved the wording. I liked how everything was related to musical things in 'Reminiscencia '. It also acted as a connection between poem 3 and poem 4 since in the third one, you talked about symphonies and the 4th was completely musical. It was at this point that I realized that the poems were connected to have a bigger and deeper meaning and I was blown away. Everything seemed to connect so well and the emotions given out were so pure.

I loved the title of 'Miami Blues and Prismatic Hues'. The inclusion of flowers made it look very colorful. I say look because I could picture every word, every sentence of the poem and I loved it a lot. The ending wrapped it up perfectly and could not have been executed better.

Now to my favorite poems. 'Forgotten' and 'Us. Together. Alone.' They were simply beautiful. I loved how everything (Wildness, Carelessness, Sweetness, etc) was personified by relating it with something in the real world. The tying to the love part of the poem was done so seamlessly. The ending was simply marvelous (I was amazed).

Us. Together. Alone. Just wrapped everything up so well. The contrast between how they used to be and what they became was truly heartbreaking but portrayed beautifully nonetheless. It was the perfect ending to the collection of poems, it just left me awestruck.

Poetic Devices: 7/10

Poetic devices aren't necessary for a poem, but it's a criterion nonetheless. I felt that the poems would have flowed better if there were some fun poetic devices in between. It doesn't even have to be something major like heavy metaphors and similes, just a little something here and there.

I won't say there are no devices, since imagery and enjambment were used in every poem (imageries make everything better) but there were a few missing.

For one, there was no rhyming scheme. This is common when it comes to enjambment but still, it would have made the poem more engaging.

Secondly, you could have had alliterations, consonance, or assonance in the middle. It would make the wordplay seem well thought about, all the while holding the integrity of the poems.

I won't say these are necessary but there is always room for improvement. The poems have fared well in my opinion.

Overall Impression: 9/10

Although I wasn't fully impressed by the first two poems, everything else more than made up for it. There were very few poetic devices but that did not bother me since you painted such a beautiful picture in my heart. I loved every sentence of the poems, they all held such great meaning and I thoroughly enjoyed them.

Good luck with any future writing endeavors.

Total: 39.5/50