Reviewer: -taeyze-
Client: itz_army_bish
Title: Him

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[PS: Reviewed all chapters.]

Cover: 2/5
The color combination and contrast is appealing. The minimal and simple look makes the cover pretty too. Though, apart from the title, other texts are not clear. But the cover doesn't go with the story at all. I don't understand why you gave it a dark filter. You should've chosen a bright cover instead.

Title: 2/5
I'm not quite sure if this is an appropriate title, because personally, I think it's kinda lame. At first I thought it would involve some mystery as such about the ML, but it didn't. And considering that, I don't think the title is very good.

Blurb: 3/5
The content seems fine, and enough to hook a reader, though the description of the story part could be changed and made better; you may change the narrative a little bit or frame it better. You may change the font style of the text as well. It isn't very pretty. Also, you might as well try to use better text aesthetics to beautify the text. The divider is out of place as well. But, I couldn't seem to find the relation between the blurb and the story.

Plot: 2/5
Common. Cliché. In short I'd describe the plot with these words. The plot had nothing unique. A simple crush romance, with cliché misunderstandings, common happenings; dreams, bullying. You outstretched the things that didn't have to and shrunk what had to be dragged.

Execution of the plot: 2/5
It wasn't that great, but okayish. You could've done a better job at that. Using some of your own plot twists and events to make it fun and unique would've been great. You didn't create enough events to connect the plot firmly, rather just put in the incomplete fragments.

The idea of the story: 1/5
It's very common. It's only romance-centered. Apart from romance, and the cliché high school drama for love, you could've added some ambitious elements which could've driven the story in a better way, definitely involving the love.

Originality: 1/5
This storyline is very common and I've read a ton of books like this so things were very predictable without any original plot twists to create interest.

Writing Style: 2/5
It's fascinating how you start your books with an intro, as I've noticed in your previous book as well. Though, the style is all same. You might try keeping something different everytime. Next thing, do not leave so much space that feels endless between two scenarios. Rather, use some text divider or simply adapt the writing style accordingly. To scroll this much gets annoying. Also, the speech is very confusing. You need to fix that. Also, the writing style isn't very appealing and doesn't really hook the reader to it; it isn't really boring but not interesting either. The transition to the next statements, or topics, or scenarios aren't well written. You should connect the statements to each other and create the momento of reading rather than just putting in the direct statements. The sentences are out of places too sometimes. Also, you switch from writing in side alignment to center alignment, it's better to simply right in left alignment. Don't write in centre alignment.

Grammar & Vocabulary: 2/10
There are quite many grammatical errors throughout the book. Common errors like capitalisation, ellipsis, sentence formation, and such are there. Vocabulary isn't that great either. Wrong phrases have been used, at wrong times. There also seems to be misunderstanding about the meaning of certain words and phrases in your mind. There are places where you have used wrong voacbulary. You might want to proofread the whole book thoroughly to get rid of these errors. Also, I have seen that you have used slangs and written very casually, though it was better by the end of the book, the first half of the book contains very casual language. Abbreviations are also overly used in the first few chapters. It's recommended not to use casual writing style and frame proper sentences with proper references, unless it's a text fic because others might not understand the abbreviations and slangs that yu are using. It's better to be professional in your writing. There's some issue with the povs as well. You mentioned third person pov but the text is in first person, then back to third person; it keeps switching without mention at times. You would have to fix that too.

Presentation: 1/5
Starting with visual presentation, you have used some random pictures of Namjoon at the chapter header image. It would be better to use some relevant images according to the chapter or banners if you'd like. You can put up dividers as well to improve the visuals of your book. Then about the textual presentation, it really needs to be worked up on. You can use some intriguing phrases to start or end the chapters, or something like that maybe. It would be prettier.

Flow & Pace: 1/5
The pace seems rushed. They just met and let's say Y/N has a crush on him, firstly she shouldn't realise that so soon and secondly Namjoon shouldn't so quickly reciprocate the feeling. The storyline is fine but the way you put it is extremely rushed. You skip through the description too; they just started doing something and without much happening, which almost seems incomplete and left in-between, the action ends and again comes rushed feelings, that are overy repeated. Then when they confessed, their bond how it grew wasn't at all portrayed. You should've shown a series of events to let them know each other more and bond with each other before abruptly confessing. Even after that, they started dating too soon and grew so close in just a few days as if they had known each other for years. You could've shown how they became close adding some events in between. After that, the pace dropped down. It went so slow, then it would suddenly be fast. You need to manage that throughout.

Structure: 2/5
Like the flow and pace, the structure of the story is very fast and rushed too. The events are very typical and extremely illogical, to be honest. Noting them down, Jung Hoseok's character is 19 years old, but he is an ENT? That's very funny because at that age people are usually getting into colleges and he completed his medical studies? Next, the fights. Namjoon fought V; it was extremely unnecessary because he could have sorted it another way that could've been way better. Then Y/N fought him too, and then that was offensive. You wrote that V slapped her, and even punched her face multiple times while holding her down. This is legally offensive. And, logically speaking, someone must have tried to stop the fight between the two and helped Y/N. Then you also but a slightly perverted scene in the school. All these events don't add up well. The structure of the book overall is very fluctuating as well. You need to give space to the events.

Literary Skills: 4/10
There aren't much literary devices used in the story, and at some places some devices are even wrongly used. For example, you have used metaphors but they are very vague at some places. Make them seem catchy, unique and interesting to relate to. Also, it lacks exposition. During the dialogues, you've simply written the dialogues in a series without explaining the actions alongside which also caused confusion about which character is it. You didn't create the atmosphere either, which needs to be there. Also, you mentioned third person pov but written in first person, fix the speech.

Characters: 1/5
There are quite many characters here, but not all hold significance. In a story, characters are the most important because they make the story, but here most of them are just thrown in. The characters in the story are very common too, there's nothing different about them. Plus, their personalities are fickle. Let's talk about the FL, Y/N. She is strong, sassy, okay, but she doesn't have to just snap at anyone who says something to her; that doesn't show her smartness and bravery at all. That's annoying, honestly. This isn't realistic at all. I understand that you wanted to give strong personalities to each of your character but just the characters saying that themself or mentioning it repetitively over small things, and acting out over nothing doesn't give the character a strong personality. Same goes with other characters, not just Y/N. The characters in all are very cliché and extremely typical, and to add, super cringe. Let's talk about Y/N's mom; she was sweet throughout and suddenly is a bad mother just because Y/N is dating? I understand the rage and worries, but you went overboard with that thing. You really need to signify the characters.

Emotions & Development: 3/10
You've mentioned that Y/N has never had a crush before, but she instantly understands that she has a crush on the guy. This is a bit unsettling. Someone who never had a crush before, doesn't know what exactly it feels shouldn't realise their feelings so quickly. So it would have been better if you dragged the scene a bit and showed her uncertainity regarding her feelings. Then other characters' emotions weren't well shown either. You should focus on every character in the story. Then about V, it was very incomplete. Maybe you should revise the story.

Reader's Enjoyment: 4/10
At the starting, it was fine. But as the chapters passed, I was getting less and less interested. And I won't lie, by the end of it, I was just skimming through because I really lost every ounce of interest in the book.

Total: 33/100

Strengths and Weakness:
Maybe because you wrote this a while ago, there seems to be so many faults. But I think correcting the grammar, vocabulary and working on the characters would make the book a lot better.

Final Note: Overall, the book is kinda okay. It does entertain a little bit, but making amends would really bring about a positive change to it; more audience will be attracted as well. I've reviewed another one of your book, Peiskos, and well, that is quite better than this one. Probably because the plot is somewhat different and not very common. You need to revise a lot of things in this one, I suggest. I hope that my words didn't offend you, they might sound harsh but I wanted to be honest and I hope I was able to help you. I hope you can improve and do great in future, good luck! Thank you!