Reviewer: -taeyze-
Written by:itz_army_bish

[PS: Reviewed till Chapter 6]

Cover: 4/5
The editing is amazing. It's catchy and attractive. The font styles used are pretty too, but the size of the small text at the left isn't visible. It just looks like some scribbling, it's better to fix that. The vibe created by the cover is also somewhat relevant to the story. Good work with this!

Title: 3/5
I'm not quite sure if the title is suitable. But since it's just the beginning of the story, I believe it's gonna make sense later on. The title is catchy and unique, and has the potential to drive the curiosity within the reader.

Blurb: 3/5
It's good, I'd say. But you might have to work on the visual presentation. Remove the first set of lines, and the arrows aren't needed either. Frame the sentences in a better way. Fix these little things, and the blurb will be just fine.

Plot: 3/5
Enticing; that's the first feeling I got when I started reading the book. The numerous thoughts of what the story is going to be like flooded my mind. The intro hooked me well. But that aura was gone when the chapters began. What exactly is the plot... I couldn't figure out. I was thinking that it would be something like dark romance with maybe some fluff, or maybe not. It does revolve around romance but I could see that there is another aspect as well.

Execution of the plot: 2/5
Since it's just the start, there's not really much to say. But in my opinion, this could be a dark, complex kind of romance. Pardon me if I am taking it all wrong, but that's what seems till now. And if this is the case, then I'd say the start wasn't really great but towards the last chapters i.e. 5 and 6, they were better.

The idea of the story: 2/5
Romance, I guess. I kinda like the idea of romance between the best friends, but the way that you are putting it comes off a bit strange. It gets sexual at times, which kinda goes off the track. The flow keeps getting disrupted.

Originality: 3/5
It's not very common, I'd say. It is something different from the others, but not very different. Of course, there are so many books, and so many authors out there that it's almost impossible to have a 100% original idea, but every repeated idea must have a touch of its own. And I think yours has that touch.

Writing Style: 2/5
Now, the kind of story that you are writing, and the vibe and aura you have created at the start, I think, that needs to be maintained, but isn't. Like I've said before, the story gives somewhat dark vibes. And with this kind of stories, a complex writing style is required. Suspense, mystery, use of complex and confusing phrases, and indirect way of expressing things and feelings is required. Considering that there is some fluff, some humor could be used as well.

Grammar & Vocabulary: 4/10
There are quite some grammatical errors such as punctuation, tenses, verb forms and a few others. A proofread can fix these. The sentence formation is also faulty at places. I've noticed that after commas you have used capital letters. There is no need for capitals after a comma. Also, when writing a dialogue, a comma is used before the final quotation marks if the sentence is continued; that comma is missing in your writing. The vocabulary isn't very good either. At some places, it is amazingly written, at some it's just fine, and at some places it's faulty. At some places, wrong words are used. They sure are understandable but wrongly used. For instance, "Yoongi stepped out of his nap...", instead of 'stepped', 'stirred up out of his nap' would be a rather better phrase. Also, at some places it is hard to understand what you are trying to convey, make sure to choose appropriate words. The vocabulary needs to be wide with some catchy phrases as well. Like I earlier mentioned, the vocabulary goes up and down, so keep it even throughout; with a great vocabulary, since this kind of writing requires a complex one.

Presentation: 1/5
There isn't any visual presentation to the story. Maybe some banners, or perhaps some text art would be better if added. Presentation of words and textual aspect isn't great either. You might have to work on the presentation of the book, since readers might find it boring.

Flow & Pace: 3/5
The flow and pace seem pretty fine. But I think, the start of the story i.e. the part in the school, that could be shortened since that isn't a very significant part. Just a little portion of exposure to the character's personality would be good enough in the starting chapter instead of giving 2-3 chapters to it. Apart from that, refrain from just giving away the data about the scenes that happened in the past. Use it as a mysterious element to be used later in the story.

Structure: 3/5
I can't really comment on the structure because the book has very few chapters to say anything about the structure. But so far, the structure is a little out of place. Like, first they are in their school, then the setting changes to a lab, and then suddenly back to the initial setting to the club i.e. the continuation to the first setting. This creates a gap between the visualization and flow of the story. You can simple label the chapter with a different style, or connect the settings somehow, to indicate the change of setting.

Literary Skills: 5/10
There aren't any literary devices used. Like mentioned above, use dark and complex speech; not too much though, since there is fluff in the story as well. Metaphors, symbolization and exposition are some things that I think you may use. Also, imagery needs to be used with betterment; because I can visualise, but I can't feel the story. Also, don't use too many abusive words.

Characters: 3/5
The characters are not very unique, to be honest. They do have some qualities that make them different but overall, they seem similar to other characters in some stories with rebellious acts. You might have to create more significance for their roles; not just the protagonists, but the others as well.

Emotions & Development: 6/10
You put in the effort to portray their emotions, but not everything worked out. It's like I'm reading the emotions but can't really feel it. You need to drive those emotions into a reader. How you do it? Words. Your words have to do that magic. Similarly, the development of their emotions keeps feeling out of place because there isn't a connect between the reader and the character.

Reader's Enjoyment: 7/10
Nevertheless, I did enjoy reading the book. You left it on a cliffhanger, and honestly that's driving me insane. I want to know what happens next. And this feeling shows that you've done a fairly good job at hooking the readers regardless of the flaws in your work.

Total: 54/100

Strengths and Weakness: So far, I've noticed that you aren't clear with the punctuations and their precise use, so you might as well take a look at the use of different punctuation marks; their use, where and when, along with the exceptional cases. Also, you might have to work on your writing style. Still, you've done a nice job at maintaining the curiosity within the reader's mind.

Final Note: The review might have felt a little harsh to you, with some repetitive points mentioned again and again, but considering the fact that you've been writing for an year now, I would expect a rather improvised writing style from you. I hope that my words didn't offend you, and in any case they did, I sincerely apologize, because that wasn't my intention at all. Also, if I misinterpreted anything, anywhere in the story, pardon me, and feel free to correct me. I hope that my review helps you. Thank you!