Reviewer: june_berrin
Written by: Moonwrites_11

Thank you so much for giving me the chance to review your story.

It was a great story and I enjoyed it.

❥ Title: The title is really simple but attention-grabbing.

❥ Cover: The cover is very wholesome and beautiful. I love the colour scheme and the title is written in a very beautiful font. I loved the cover!

❥ Blurb: The blurb gives out just the right amount from the plot and hooks the reader very well.

❥ Storyline: The storey plot is really common and many different versions of it are already available. So you need to find something to make your story stand out!
From the beginning of the chapter itself I have noticed that you have broken the fourth wall by directly talking to the readers, it was a bit of a turn-off for me. I don’t think a lot of people prefer it and it might be a turn for them too. And from the beginning of the story itself, the female character was talking about herself for a while but I think maybe you could show it to the readers through flashbacks or so.

I guess if you try to write it without breaking the fourth wall the chapter would have been even better and enticing and interesting.

❥ Characters: I love the way you have portrayed the characters. Even though their past stories are all common, I have to say you have done an amazing job with their emotions. You have managed to capture their emotions perfectly and reading it did make me sad, I like how you used shark attacks for the death of Nick’s parents rather than divorce or any vehicle accidents.

You have developed and portrayed both your characters in a quite different ways and I appreciate it highly. Great job. (this story is affecting me emotionally)

❥ Grammar and Punctuations: Your grammar was on point and I have not spotted a lot of mistakes. Beautifully written and great word choices.

❥ Conclusions: The story was beautiful and has great potential. I have loved it very much as of now. I have read the story and have laid out my suggestions, but I want to remind you that everyone has different opinions and at the end of the day it is your story and it is your choice. I also apologise for the slight delay that has occurred, I was a bit busy. Hope you have a great day!

Best Wishes