Beyond Reasonable Doubt by MiniMoxx      
Reviewer: june_berrin

Thank you so much for giving me the chance and the trust to review your story. I enjoyed it.

❥ Cover/Title: The cover was not the very best but was still good and beautiful. I think you need to change the font style and the hand in the background wasn't visible. I felt like the cover pairs with the blurb more than it does with the title . The title was quite good and would catch a lot of attention. It perfectly insights the reader into the story and draws them in.

❥ Blurb: The blurb has the perfect balance standing in the middle without giving too much or too little, I admire that. But the blurb felt too simple and could use some more suitable words that will entice the reader as you had done in your first chapter. I think you need to use a better thesaurus to add some spice to it, like making it a bit fancier.

❥ Storyline: The storyline was well-thought and unique. The first chapter began well striking curiosity within the reader. I would suggest using a bit more poetic devices like metaphors and similes for example. It could fit with it and the story flows even better. Usually, the memory-type storylines are quite common but I can see that you have powdered your sway and touch of magic into it making it stand apart from those cliche typical books, and that's great quality. Not only having a good storyline but you have also managed to portray it to the reader effectively.

❥ Content: Your plot was quite fast-paced. I liked the way that every single chapter always had something important going on. The way you build suspense was also enthralling and I was seriously creeped out by that Holden guy. I think you need to work on the flow of your words a bit more.

❥ Characters: All characters had very contrasting personalities. At first, I thought Holden might be one of those sweetheart guys and I liked him until he switched up real fast and began to gaslight her. The character Montana was well written, really portraying the aftermath of amnesia, the cluelessness as if you're lost in the middle and the way she was manipulated and gaslighted by Holden yet she still accepted it. The fear and lack of trust due to domestic violence it was all well portrayed. The River guy was a completely different story. All of these characters felt realistic as you slowly develop their characters. The character development was well done!

❥ Vocabulary/ Grammar: You have used great vocabulary throughout the story but I think it could be improved a bit more by using some more fancy words to flow. The grammar was on spot with no major issues but sometimes you seem to overcomplicate some of the sentences that appear a bit off and difficult to process. I think you should use more full stops and commas.

❥ Reader's Enjoyment: As a reader, I would say I have enjoyed the story. It did make me feel that suspense and anticipation crawling over me as I read through your story. Having read a lot of chapters I can see the way the title matched your storyline perfectly. Just the right piece!

❥ Conclusions: A great story with a lot of potential. The emotions and feelings felt raw and have been portrayed well. The story flow was quite disrupted due to jumbled and complicated sentences at times. I would suggest working on the cover and the blurb a bit more. Furthermore, I would like to apologize for the long delay as I am dealing with my boards now. Overall, I wish luck and hope that my review has helped you better your story. Remember, I may have given you a lot of suggestions but that is from my point of you and as you may be aware everyone has a different point of view so please don't take any of these to your heart. If I have hurt you with my words then I apologize. Hope you have a great day.

Best Wishes!