Love Beyond Universes by Livin2Write

Reviewer: june_berrin

Thank you so much for giving me the chance and for trusting me to review your story.

It was a well-written story.

❥ Title/Cover: The title is unique and well connected to the plot. The title alone can tell a story of its own and is somewhat attention-grabbing. The Cover is beautiful and precious, the way the hands were outstretched, and the galaxy theme really went well with the title. The title on the cover was well readable but the same cannot be said for the subtitle, if not for the blurb then I couldn't have understood what it meant.

❥ Blurb: The blurb was well written. Giving off just the right amount from the plot enough to entice the reader and spark curiosity. Also, the question at the end is thought-provoking for your readers. And I loved the quote at the beginning of the blurb. The blurb gave out a very mysterious aura.

❥ Storyline: The storyline was quite unique and promising, and because of that I read till the end. I haven't read a book like this before and it doesn't seem to be a common type in Wattpad. The blurb and the intro felt in contrast, the intro did not really hook me in like the blurb. The story moved along pretty although it felt a bit fast-paced at times. Each chapter had proper content that ended with good cliffhangers to keep the readers in. Despite the beginning of the story, there were a lot of unexpected twists that actually surprised me and compelled me to read till the end.

❥ Writing style: I felt that the story was mainly carried out by dialogues, especially in the beginning. I think you need to add a bit more detail and outline the story than a casual story-telling style. At times the writing style felt a bit awkward. Some sentences were not structured well. And also rather than just writing down the dialogue maybe explain the scene a bit more. As the story is written in the first person, I think that gives you the perfect opportunity to write about the main character's feelings. Sometimes the descriptions are a bit too vague., but there are times when they are written beautifully. Concentrate on body language, and write about them as they have the perfect ability to create tension. Not only romantic but fear and many other emotions will help you to keep your readers at the edge of their seats.

❥ Characters: The characters were developed nicely, but need a bit of polishing. For example, Claudia, the character is the one that needs most of the work. She doesn't seem as threatening as she should be. Her appearance is very well done but her behaviour and the way she is portrayed need more attention. The rest of the characters seem fine to me.

❥ Grammar and Vocabulary: The grammar needs a bit of work. In the last line of the blurb, 'all he knew was he could neither reverse his fate nor could love Sienna again' I suggest that you add 'that' after all he knew was. And add 'he' after 'nor could' in that sentence. And, you are writing the story in the past tense, but sometimes I have spotted a few mixups of the present tense in it which can be corrected with some proofreading. There is a good use of vocabulary in the story, great job on that.

❥ Conclusions: I enjoyed the story despite all the blunders. Also, I apologise greatly for the long delay that has occurred. I have actually already read the story but forget to prepare a review for it. I liked the story and have read the entire story because of the beautiful plot, I loved it a lot. The story has a lot of potential in it but is just in need of some polishing. And if any of my words hurt you or if I have misinterpreted anything then I apologise sincerely, that was never my intention. Remember that no author gets a beautiful perfect draft the first time writing it, they edited it over and over again the more they learn. So hope you have/had a great day.

Best Wishes🌻