Reviewer: Mortals_are_dumb
Written by: beckaml

Title and cover: 3/5

Title is unique, not something that I've come across so far. It kind of gives off teen highschool story vibes which is apt. Nothing wrong with it but, you can come up with something more interesting. 

However, the cover page could be improvised. I understand if your intention was to keep the cover simple but a different picture could be chosen. Also, clarity wise, it could be improvised. The Color combination is appreciable and the font is okayish. It suits but you could come up with something that's better. 

Description: 4/10

Okay, first off, it's too short. Minimum of hundred words would make a good Description. A blurb is supposed to give off an idea regarding what the story is without giving spoilers. Usually it's around 150 to 200 words. Try adding a bit more details. Maybe an excerpt of the book; or just third person narration of the story without giving away the whole plot. Along with the title and cover page, Description is what attracts a reader. The description in your book is not even enough to judge properly, please increase it. 

Opening chapter: 4/5

Content wise, the opening chapter is pretty good. Characters have been introduced properly. It's setting off the scene, good job with this one. I'll talk more about what exactly needs to be done in the 'writing style' part. 

Plot development: 4/5

Since the chapters are less, I cannot not really talk much on this one. Currently, your chapters do not look like filler chapters. Although here and there, there are a bit of unnecessary details. It's not harming the pace of the story, so i guess it's alright. 

Character development: 6/10

Again, since chapters are less, it's hard to say anything about this. 
In the opening chapter, I like how Hasan and Everly were introduced. In the second chapter, I loved the way side characters were introduced. As of now, that's the only chapter where readers get to see everly's friends. The characters sound mature, especially Hasan and Everly. Peter sounds like he has some of his own traumas; I hope we get to see the main conflict soon in upcoming chapters. 

Grammar aspects and vocabulary: 9.5/10
(5+5)

I have nothing much to say on grammar aspects. There aren't many grammatical mistakes, most of them are minor ones that could be easily corrected if double checked. Using commas or punctuations properly and dialogue narration is done well. Vocabulary is quite good as well. 

Writing style: 3/5

Now this part needs a lot of improvement. 

- a lot of phrases or descriptive words used instead of names and Pronouns is unnecessary. For instance, 

"A sixteen year old male"
"Cognac brown eyes"
"Nut brown eyes"

Repeating such words will only leave the readers confused. I was annoyed right in the first chapter by the amount of times someone's eye color or hair has been mentioned. Using pronouns and names is not necessarily a bad thing. Whenever you say fifteen year old male or female or whatsoever, it can easily confuse the reader. Also, you don't have to mention eye color and stuff every time you describe something. 

One random mistake or overdoing something shouldn't make a reader close your book and move on to next one. 

- The "fun facts" part, I don't think it's necessary. Since the story is written in third person anyway, you can add them in between the storyline. 

Certain things that I appreciate: 

- The third person narration is appreciable. A lot of things get covered. We get to see how Peter, Hasan and Everly think simultaneously in a chapter. 

- the plot sounds like a slow burn. Henceforth adding small things like the whole petting the cat or buying things for the cat helps you to create moments between the main characters. You also are adding what's necessary to build up the plot, so good job with this one. 

Overall: 33.5/50

Majorly, the description part and the repetitive phrases part can easily turn off the reader. The plot has potential to be a good one and characters have room for improvement. As I mentioned earlier, it's hard to judge. A bit more effort and correction is all that is required. Except the ones I referred to here, it was fun to read.