Reviewer: _Swaralee_
A'rata by kalistawriteslol

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Cover: 09/10
I'm a fan of your covers! Truly. This one as well is beautiful. The image, and the font, are great choices. However, my only suggestion would be the font size. Increasing it a bit will make the title more readable when the cover shows up in suggestions.

Title: 10/10
Giving the main character's name as a title is always a brilliant choice. I always say that. But it's true. And when the story is part of a series, it becomes so much easier to navigate through it.

Blurb: 08/10
The blurb introduces the characters and presents the storyline. The writing of it is very clear and nicely written. Though the reason why they can't be together or what's stopping them from being together isn't mentioned. When reading a romance, the only conflict of the story is that one particular thing or person or a condition stops the main characters from being together, but here it isn't specified. It's a little vague. So add that and then the blurb will be perfect.

Opening/first impression: 09/10
I absolutely love when writers jump straight into the story. It's the ultimate solution to grab the reader's attention with little to no effort. We can feel the innocence and naivety, not to mention the attitude, in A'raya right off the bat. Also, the attractive man she is betrothed to, mind you, has this certain presence from the start of the story. That's good writing.

Plot: 08/10
An eighteen-year-old girl betrothed to a wealthy man where her only job, apparently, is to have his children, but eventually, through the course of time, they fall in love.

Though it's not the most original piece of trope and storytelling out there, you have managed to add your personal touch to it. Before reading the story, I was wondering how you must have gone about it, given the fact that there are many books featuring this storyline. I'm impressed with how you have written it, the pacing, and everything. It's just the right amount of dark themes and light.

Dialogues: 08/10
For me, dialogues do a lot when presenting a character's voice. They need to be handled nicely or else the voices get jumbled and there's nothing we can do to make them memorable. For Zane, the dialogue structure and his voice conveyed through it is quite obvious. That's a plus point when we write characters like Zane's. For A'raya as well, you have done a good job.

Grammar and Punctuation wise there were very few errors, but they still need to be addressed and corrected. Nothing that a quick scan can't fix.

Characters: 07/10
A'raya is a young girl and not really involved with people of high and wealthy lifestyles from what I gathered, but she doesn't feel like an individual character to me yet. Yes, she's just eighteen, has defined features, and has a strong background story, but there's still something missing in her personality. I would suggest using a Character Profile checklist.

Cocky and wealthy male protagonists are always sought by dark romance readers. It's my kinda guilty pleasure too. Brooding and grumpy men in books are enough to convince people to read, so there's that. However, Zane is a dense character and probably has a past we don't know about, at least I don't from what I read for a few chapters.

A'raya and Zane's chemistry is pretty believable. Both of them don't want to be together yet they have to be. This creates an interesting dynamic between them.
Quality of conflict: 06/10

There aren't any high stakes, big risks, or life-and-death situations happening here, so there isn't much for us to root for other than A'raya and Zane ending up together and being happy. Of course, it isn't a necessity but just an observation.

Writing skills: 09/10
From what I read in A'roya, A'raya is much, much better in terms of writing. Very few mistakes, great vocabulary, fine choice of descriptions. As I said, we can't always perfect the grammar and punctuation in such a long piece of writing, so a little editing can get them correct. Apart from that, it was perfect.

Reader enjoyment: 08/10
In my opinion, I completely enjoyed reading the few chapters that I got to read. I loved A'raya and Zane's bickering, they make a funny duo at times, and the tension between them was just sizzling hot! I'm sure many people will love their story as well.

Total: 82/100
Other suggestions: As I said, A'raya could use a little more finer detailing to her character. Also, there were a lot of side characters, it was pretty hard to keep up with them. So maybe try reducing some of them? Apart from that, I don't have much to criticize about the story. I'm definitely going back and reading all those spicy chapters.

Dark romances are and will always be a little jarring for many people, but those who enjoy that darkness will absolutely love your book.