REVIEWER: _Swaralee_

CLIENT: SubhankiIndia

Thank you for choosing me to review your poetry!

Please know that poetry is a highly personal and creative form of expression. It is an individual reflection of thoughts, views, or perceptions when the initial point of inspiration wasn't its market value. While judging, I have solely focused on the technical aspects; rhythmic flow, poetic devices, meters, and the emotional impact it had on me.

Title: 07/10

'Fragile' is an interesting title. It captures a sense of vulnerability, sensitivity, and the delicate nature of emotions and experiences that are explored further in the collection. However, 'Fragile' may make sense for some poems, but it might not perfectly encapsulate the six. Some of the poems express different emotions like longing, anticipation, and mystery, which may not directly align with the notion of fragility. I would suggest a title change.

Consider something like:

'Echoes of Emotions'

'Whispers of the Soul'

'Journey of Mind'

I could suggest some more if you would like. These titles have an umbrella voice for every poem in the collection.

Cover: 03/05

Beautiful image choice. Although the image doesn't necessarily convey that the book is about poetry. The current cover gives the vibe of a short story collection of self-discovery. Go for more fitting images and choose the fonts according to the image. Maybe something a little more dark (given the themes of the poems) but not too dark. Too dark will ruin the experience. Opt for blue colors as you have done with the current cover.

Blurb: 03/05

Now what I got from the Blurb is; you have described yourself, you told the potential readers that they may or may not understand your poems, and you have told them what they should experience with regard to the poem.

A blurb is supposed to talk about what's inside the book, what the essence is, what ideas are explored, what message the writer is trying to convey. I would suggest rewriting the blurb. Show the readers what they can expect from the book, use the similar writing style you have used for the poems, and make it poetic.

Creativity/flow/emotional impact: 09/10

The first poem: WHEN I DIE

This poem conveys a profound yearning for understanding and acceptance. It's touching in its plea for connection and remembrance. The repetition of "When I die" creates a structured and contemplative tone. The imagery of being held and the desire for a meaningful end adds emotional depth to the poem. Overall, it conveys a strong message about the universal human need for love, forgiveness, and recognition.

However, I would say establish a consistent meter throughout the poem. It can improve the rhythmic flow and quality. Read it aloud to recognize the stagnant parts and work on them.

The second poem: TONIGHT

This poem creates a vivid atmosphere centred around the concept of 'Tonight' and the emphasis of that word works so well in terms of rhythm. The poem explores themes of serenity, love, beauty and persistence. It brilliantly portrays the idea that even within the 'hardships', 'tonight' presents a haven and solace. The poem has a sense of appreciation for the present and the brief nature of time.

The third poem: ESCAPE

It's a personal reflection. But the shift from personal reflection to addressing someone can be made more seamless. Even the imagery could be improved with more vivid descriptions. The tense shifted towards the end of the poem as well. The consistent voice and perspective throughout the poem wasn't maintained.

The grammar and punctuation, though compromisable sometimes, weren't on point. Maybe it was an artistic choice, but still, it didn't work well for this one.

However, some of the good things about this particular poem cannot be ignored. Such as it delves into deep emotions, adding a profound layer to the narrative. It explores themes of longing, escape, and love, which always resonate with readers.

The fourth poem: BELOW

This poem shapes a poignant and evocative ambience, there's a sense of loss and longing for the loss at the same time. The "look in her eyes" and the imagery of the dimmed candlelight contributes to an earnest and pensive mood. The imagery used plays a crucial role in setting the scene here. The candlelight, the names etched on stones, and the silver name in the midnight's glow all show such a brilliant picture in front of the eyes.

The fifth poem: SEARCH FOR LOVE

Search for Love explores a thought-provoking concept related to the idea of distant and unreachable worlds. It touches on themes of curiosity, the human desire for voyage, and the limitations of our perception. It says that there are realms beyond our comprehension, yet we are drawn to envision and explore them. Excellent concept and excellent execution.

The sixth poem: SILENCE

This poem creates a mysterious setting through its descriptions of silence, darkness, and the potential for countless untold stories. It skillfully juxtaposes contrasting elements, like beauty and horror, light and darkness, which is quite intriguing. The poem follows a structured pattern with consistent lengths, making it visually appealing and easy to follow along. It has the potential to be impactful and enjoyable for readers who appreciate its ambiguous qualities.

Poetic devices: 08/10

I realize that I mentioned and went through the majority of the poetic devices while going through each poem in the section above. Like the imagery, structure, repetition and as such. For the rest that I didn't mention above, I will say it here.

Various metaphors are present in all of the poems, for example, comparing a person to a painter of their life or describing love as "freedom." These metaphors add depth and layers of meaning to these poems.

Some poems incorporate dialogue, bringing a personal and conversational touch to the narrative. This will make readers connect with the characters and their emotions.

Symbolics are one of my favorite poetic devices. And your poems make use of it effectively, like the candlelight in one poem representing a sense of loss or the names etched on stones symbolizing destiny and such. It makes the poem more complex but still comprehensible.

Quite a few poems are written in free verse, which is difficult to pull off. They rely on the natural flow of language. You did a decent job of it, though not the best. The flexibility of the meter was compromised. I would suggest working on that. Decide on a certain syllable count, you don't have to follow it strictly, it can fluctuate a little but not too much. Doing that will make the poems flow more smoothly.

Reader enjoyment: 07/10

Lowkey my favorite poem has to be the second one. The general pattern I observed is that you take a phrase and repeat it to create a smooth flow and it works beautifully. All the poems incorporate a range of themes and emotions. For example in the first poem, there is yearning whereas in the fourth poem you embrace the present. Their impact depends on each reader's interpretations and personal experiences, but they do offer a unique perspective.

Total: 37/50

Other suggestions: I would suggest revising each poem once again. Finer refining will benefit them. Revise punctuation and grammar, and provide a concluding line at the end of each poem. Right now, some of the poems don't end in a conclusion. Other than that, I thoroughly enjoyed my time reading all of them. You have great potential.