Reviewer: _Swaralee_

Client: LOOVER22

Thank you for choosing me to review your book!

Cover: 06/10

Given the intense nature and extreme high-stakes narrative, the current cover fails to match that level of gravity. It's very basic. The image doesn't tell us anything we might want to know from a book cover before deciding to read the Blurb and eventually dive into the story. The title placement doesn't go well with the image. I would suggest a cover change. Go for darker colors as that's the central theme. Choose an image that will tell us something about the story or the characters. The cover is the first impression of the book, so it needs to be perfect. If you aren't sure you can design one yourself, there are many people here on Wattpad who can help you with that.

Title: 07/10

It's a bold title. Just like the main characters' personalities. Readers are going to assume that it's a love story from the title. But as you mentioned in the form, the genre is a psychological thriller and the subgenre is a dark romance. Now that's throwing me off and will definitely throw off the potential readers. From the title, readers are going to expect the majority of the plot to revolve around the romantic conflict. So I would say consider a title change. Think of something fitting the genre.

Blurb: 08/10

We get to meet both the main characters, we get to know their personalities a bit, what they are like, and how different they are from each other. It's quite good. However, my only suggestion will be to add more of the storyline to it. We don't get to know what the story is exactly, what's the main conflict. How are Charmey and Fleur related to each other, how are they connected in any way? Do they know each other already, or if something occurs that forces them to meet? We don't get to see the main story.

Opening/first impression: 10/10

What a killing start! (Pun totally intended). The prologue and its first few paragraphs were so intriguing. Who was this girl? Who did she kill? Why did she kill? Why is she so relaxed about it? So many questions and to get the answers readers will definitely keep on reading further. It's a brilliant choice to start off the prologue as it is one of the most ignored and tough parts of the book for people to read. You have made it quite interesting. Charmey, or should I say C, is confident and unfazed and badass and intelligent and strong and I can go on about her for another few paragraphs. I love the introduction you gave to her in the prologue.

The opening chapter takes an unexpected twist, from thrusting us right into the heart of a crime scene to a surprisingly unhurried introduction to another character. And to be honest, it was perfect. A slow, steady-flowing flowing and simple chapter. Within this, we're introduced to Fleur, and the narrative gently unfurls a glimpse into her relationship with her father. Overall, it's a truly exceptional start, setting the stage for what promises to be a captivating journey.

Plot: 10/10

From what I read in the blurb and a few chapters, I can say confidently that it's a genius plotline. The execution is masterful, to the point that it has me planning to return and devour the entire story. The storyline is intense and complicated. What truly stands out is the artfully crafted world-building; it's a delicate balance that avoids overwhelming readers with excessive information dumps, allowing the story to unfold organically. You took your time with it and let the narrative explain it which made it flow more naturally. It's an engaging form of writing too. I'm a fan of this plot.

Dialogues: 09/10

I say this every time; dialogues act like a bridge connecting characters with readers. The way a character talks or responds gives readers a glimpse into their personality traits that might not be very obvious in the story. In this particular situation, your portrayal has been incredibly well-done, showcasing your writing skills. I could actually differentiate each character apart from the other. Every dialogue gives the characters individual voices. Fleur has a different speaking tone/voice, so does her father and Charmey as well. So good job there!

Characters: 10/10

Charmey has got to be my favorite character. She is not smug about her power. She is proud, yes but not smug. She knows her ability to bend reality to however she wants it, she knows she is in control of herself and no one can change that. The way you have written her character is so interesting. Like I'm scared of her but I also love her...? That doesn't make any sense but also, it does.

Fleur, on the other hand, is a very relatable character I must say. Studying to land a decent-paying job or studying something that doesn't necessarily interest her. She gets thrust into this dangerous world with such a brutal twist. Her relationship with her father is so sweet and I genuinely feel so bad for her.

My mind was constantly wandering and thinking about how Charmey and Fleur would meet. They had to cross paths, given the fact that Fleur's father was planning to expose Charmey's boss/the gang she works for. I'm not justifying Charmey's actions but she had to eliminate the threat that was Fleur's father. I can only imagine what must be going through Fleur's mind. What will she do now? Will she go after Charmey? Will she get her revenge? I can't wait to go back and find out!

Quality of conflict: 10/10

As I said before, the storyline is complicated. The stakes are high. There's no room for slacking off for the characters or the readers. Just when you think it can't get messy anymore, it does. Charmey's life and job are controversial and non-conventionally desirable. She can't let herself show any weakness. And from what I gathered, Charmey and Fleur are going to develop a connection later on which is going to make it ten times harder for Charmey to do her job.

The conflict keeps the reader curious and keeps them on the edge of their seats. I can't stress this enough but I love the storyline! Excellent choice of themes as well. The atmosphere around the characters and the world they live in is explained efficiently.

Writing skills: 10/10

Now, as you said that the story is translated from Swedish, I believed I might find grammatical errors or spelling mistakes somewhere but I was pleasantly surprised when I found none! I do not mean it in a condescending way or anything. But I genuinely love the writing style. As the story is about a strong female character, I have seen many writers trying too hard to tell us she is strong. However, you showed us that she is strong. Both the characters actually. Charmey and Fleur. We can feel Charmey's confidence through her actions, her words. We can feel Fleur's heartbreak, her emotional state through the writing.

Reader enjoyment: 10/10

This story is something I can see myself enjoying the life out of. I live for these plotlines and complex characters. The writing is quite simple yet stylistic enough to not come off as amateur. Queer stories featuring such intricate detailing to every aspect of dialogues, writing, and character work are rare on Wattpad. Every time I come across them, it's always a refreshing read. I had such a great time reading the story and I can guarantee that others will too.

Total: 90/100

Other suggestions: Just as I mentioned before, the cover and the title could use some work. Brainstorm ideas for the title. Go through the story once more, and search for key factors, turning points, or plot twists. Maybe make them as the title. Apart from that, the narrative as a whole is perfect. You are an interesting writer and I'm looking forward to more work from you.