Client: Amaira_52k

Reviewer: Owls1221

Title: 9/10

Interesting title.

Cover: 10/10

The cover is pretty and simple of a polaroid. Although you should make the title bigger so I can easily see it.

Summary: 10/10

The summary was short but brilliant. It introduced the main characters and the main plot without revealing too much. Nice job.

Grammar: 10/10

The grammar was so good. Everything was crystal clear.

Vocabulary: 9/10

There was a lot of amazing vocabulary that tangled with my emotions and you did really well. However, I noticed that in certain chapters there were repetitions of certain words like 'grappled', 'beyond', and 'boundaries' too. I understand that you want to show that these characters surpassed the limit, but try avoiding repeating some of the words and use synonyms whenever you can.

Spelling: 10/10

No errors

Hook: 10/10

It wasn't just the word-play that hooked my interest, it was also the events that played in the very beginning of the story. The little plot twists you left at the end of each chapter, they made me question some characters about their pasts and motives etc.

Character Development: 9/10

I liked the characters and their attributes. They were interesting indeed. Although I agree with some of the feedback presented (in the comment section) that some of the characters' speeches were a bit more poetic?

I understand the melodrama present in the book, but with all due respect, I don't think the dialogue between the characters were realistic for they were poetic. People could use common phrases and idioms but they wouldn't go that far when they speak to one another in real life. (*whispers* but it would be okay if this was set in the Victorian era. I began to read Victorian literature for uni and noticed a pattern there)

Plot Development: 10/10

The plot progressed well.

Personal Enjoyment: 10/10

Again, I really enjoyed the book due to the writing and the simple plot twists left in the chapters. The interactions of the characters also played with my heart and I felt bad for the trio ;(

Punctuation: 10/10

I don't think there any errors

Pacing: 10/10

The story moved at a steady speed. It wasn't fast nor slow.

Writing: 9/10

The writing was fantastic. The word choices were phenomenal and I understood what was happening. I also sympathised with the characters, especially the first chapter, they made me feel bad for what was happening to them and what had happened to them in the past.

However, and again, I agree with the others regarding the style. There was mostly telling rather than showing readers what was happening. But that doesn't mean the book was bad. With your talent, it's a minor thing really. I think all you have to focus on is lowering the poetic level when the characters speak with one another and add more showing.

Overall, the story was actually a fun read.