AUTHOR: @MadKea

REVIEWER: Lirusen

Cool cover - very fiery, though I suggest you change the font, as I feel like it clashes a little with the background. Your summary is good as well, but you've given me a whole lot of info - perhaps condense it a little?

Your beginning is great - unique, sets the mood, and immediately I'm getting a sense of Airdromeda's personality. Those little actions she does absent-mindedly also help, and I'm often left wondering about her backstory (you introduce it nicely).

Your grammar is good, but there are problems with using a correct term, such as using the correct form of past tense ('lay' as opposed to 'lied' for example) or sometimes your sentences and dialogue look like they could be worded a little better - I sometimes got confused. Other than that, your description is on point (but do vary your vocabulary - you sometimes repeat words that could be easily switched out for others, and sometimes it reads awkwardly).

In the beginning of Chapter 2, I see you intentionally used repetition with 'expensive' - a good tactic, but seeing it six times is an eyesore and tiring to read. It also disrupts the pacing, as the reader would just be reading 'expensive-looking' over and over again, and if I were to read this out, my mouth would get just tired quickly due to the pronunciation of the phrase. Limit how many times you repeat a word to get the effect you want - you can't go wrong with three! (Further on in the chapter, you've used 'expensive-looking' again a few times - this would be more effective had the first use of the repetition was done successfully. I felt the use of the technique had worn off at this point.)

Reading on, I can infer the obsession Airdromeda has with Aaron - you've voiced her thoughts well, and it's a little humourous as the reader to see how she overthinks and assumed the wrong thing. She's also quite bold and appears insensitive to others (poor Alex) - I'm worried for what kind of relationship with Aaron she really has.

Though when Alex finally explains her backstory, include some more detail of her body language, because if she was so hesitant to tell Air and then suddenly says "Yes, if you care to listen", it's a little abrupt. Maybe show how hesitant she is - if what Air had said earlier made her cry, that means she's somewhat sensitive about the matter. Describe some more body language, perhaps, and your characters more consistent (you do this really well with Airdromeda, but when a character has two somewhat contradicting traits, like Aaron and his strange mood swings, it seems a little abrupt; try to transition them more smoothly).

Plot-wise, great. You're feeding us info bit by bit without making it an info dump, leaving many questions. Different dimensions/universes and mythologies (I hope this doesn't get too complicated in future chapters), characters seemingly stuck in different places (hell?! Count me in!). Character-wise, everyone seems a little out of their minds, which I think is wonderful in the way that they aren't your usual conventional characters seen everywhere (that being said, the originality is great). They are introduced nicely. I thought that at least Aaron would have some sanity, but I guess the siblings are as crazy as each other. Im excited to see more of their backstory.

Airdromeda's character development, though I've only read the first five chapters, is really well shown, especially within the changes of her thoughts towards Aaron.

Overall, an awesome book that was interesting to read.