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uthor: NiyatiChaurasia

Reviewer: Violette 

Cover: The cover of the book is just amazing! The font matched the genre and so does the choice of picture. 

Description: The descriptions is too small and not very appealing. The writer can try adding a little bit of more details and make it attractive.

Plot: The name of every chapter is nicely thought and also the fact that you added humour and sarcasm in your book makes it even more enjoyable. Now, coming onto the length part, the length of the chapter is really very short and honestly, I like books with short chapters. But, where the problem comes in is when the readers are trying to interpret something. They cannot put a theory on the chapter since it is too short.

Cliffhangers. Cliffhangers are very important as it makes the readers want to jump onto another chapter. But, the writer hasn’t given any such cliffhangers. One of the chapters was ended by “And it was....” which is a wrong ending. The readers know that they are reading a vampire book, so it has to be blood. So, the writer could change it a little bit, like: “I was very thirsty, Alan gave me a glass of water which he had in one hand and I couldn’t quite see what was in the other as that hand of behind his back. But, I had a picture of something in the back of my mind, something that I never thought that I would consider drinking.” Now, this would seem more attractive and is a nice cliffhanger.

The pace of the book is going too fast. Like by the third chapter the character is already a vampire. The writer can write one whole chapter where the main protagonist introduces the readers to her family and can end the chapter saying that she isn’t too fond of her parents. Then, the next chapter can show the whole accident happening. 

The way the whole text is written also seems weird and bland. The character was transformed from a human to a vampire, they are bound to go in a shock. But, the way Adele handled the whole situation seemed very unreal. The writer can change it into something more like, “My whole life I wondered what it would feel like to be a vampire as I had an unhealthy obsession researching about them. But, now since I was one, something felt very unsettling. Nonetheless, I have always learned to adjust since I have a 10 year old younger brother and that is what I’ll do now. I’ll adjust into my new lifestyle as a vampire.” This seems more appealing and realistic.

Character development: This part is most important and is ignored while writing. We don’t know the nature of Adelle very well. We aren’t even aware of how she looks and what her appearance is. Same goes to every character. The writer can try describing their features such as hair colour, texture, eyes, nose and maybe the shape of their face. It’s very important as readers can easily imagine the characters being in that situation if they know how they look.

Grammar: There were a few typos which could be overlooked easily. But, the writer is jumping between the tenses. From what I interpret, the writer wants to write the whole text in the past tense, but at some sentences the tense is changed into present. It’s very confusing and the writer should work on that.

Other than that, the plot of the story is well thought but it still needs a lot of work and improvements.

Sorry for the delay in the review and I hoped this helped.

I would rate this a three on five.