Book name: Fox Of Greed
Fandom: Nanatsu no Taizai
Genre: Action, Fantasy
Author: DragonGirl_97
POV: First person view
Content: 24 chapters
Status: Ongoing

Remarks: "I am confident and I am proud. This book literally came into existence while I was sitting in a lecture and I just rolled with it from there, and it's gotten so far. When i first wanted to make a Fanfiction from this series, it was more so I wanted to make one and establish my claim over Ban, like all x readers who love their baes. But when Fox of Greed came into existence, it became so much more than that."

- Saggitarius

A) Cover - D (6.3)
...1) Image [ E ]
...2) Font [ C+ ]
...3) Color scheme [ B-]
...4) Resolution [ A+ ]
...5) Implicative Aspect [ F ]
...6) Impact [ F ]
...7) Meaning [ D ]

B) Description - A+ (9.5)
...1) Style [ A+ ]
...2) Relevance [ A+ ]
...3) Mysticism [ A+ ]
...4) Neatness [ A+ ]

C) Storyline - C (7.4)
...1) Chapter length [ D ]
...2) Prioritization [ B ]
...3) Spotlights [ B ]
...4) Composition/Style [ E ]
...5) Presence of Plotline [ B+ ]
...6) Originality [ E ]
...7) Efficiency [ F ]

D) Characters - B (8.2)
...1) Accuracy [ A- ]
...2) Description [ E ]
......a) Style
......b) Vividness
......c) Impact
......d) Originality (only OC characters)
...3) Presence [ A+ ]
......1) Scene distribution
......2) Contribution to story

E) Dialogue - B (8.1)
...1) Accuracy [ A+ ]
...2) Density/Weight [ C+ ]
...3) Language [ A+ ]
...4) Richness [ D ]
......a) Description of actions
......b) Linear to scene
......c) Creativity
...5) Length [ D ]
...6) Delivery [ B+ ]
...7) Neatness [ A+ ]

F) Setting - C- (6.94)
...1) Direction [ F ]
...2) Number of locations [ A+ ]
...3) Vividness [ F ]
...4) Scenario [ C+ ]
...5) Names [ B+ ]
......a) Locations
......b) Characters
......c) Others

G) Technicals - A- (9.2)
...1) Errors [ A+ ]
......a) Grammar
......b) Punctuation
......c) Typo
...2) Arrangement [ B ]
...3) Encapsulation of idea [ A+ ]
...4) Mood [ B ]
...5) Book title [ A+ ]
...6) Genre relevance and accuracy [ A+ ]

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Verdict :
Book rating: 7.9/10.0 (B-)
Potential: 45%

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A) Cover
I was a little disappointed on the cover because it doesn't really motivate people to read it. It wasn't done with much effort, although it seems like you weren't the one who made it anyway, hehe. But unlike the other book, The Darkness In Our Hearts which had a simple cover, this one had three pictures mashed up together the wrong way. Although it focused on the aspect of the fox, which had both a fox and the Sin of Greed insignia. It had meaning though, so I'll credit you for that.

But like the other fanfics I review, I always make an alternative cover, you don't have to take it if you want to keep the original ;)

B) Description
I loved the description. Though as short as the description was, it was enough to give the readers an insight of the story you had laid out for them. 

C) Storyline
Just like how you did in your other book, you did a great job in writing your fanfic. Although, I'm surprised that you wrote this a little differently compared to your other book. Because in your previous book, it was more original in the sense that you didn't completely follow the anime plot. 

There are two kinds of anime fanfic writers, those who make a completely make a different plot of the story, that includes AU fanfics and those fanfics that use the original anime/game/light novel/manga plot as a basis for their story but they could freely disregard the existence of the original, meaning that they harness their basis as their own. Then the second writer type are those who rewrite the story, meaning the write nearly the same story as the original and they simply alter until some length. In this case,you're the latter. It isn't a bad thing, because everyone is free to do what they want.

Haha, but I'm impressed once again with how you wrote the story. The pacing was good, as you did use the anime plot as basis. The character development was great, too! Although there is a down-sider. The chapters weren't as long and descriptive as did your previous work. It's pretty obvious that you're in a hurry to write the chapters, but I advice you that you take it slow. Remember that a good story always takes time. And I recommend that you write longer chapters and avoid dividing them needlessly. Don't worry about your readers, even I took months to update, thanks to school.

D) Characters
I expected the Esra to have a similar personality to that of Rory Mercury from the anime GATE: Thus the JSDF Fought There, honestly, haha. But I guess those were simply expectations. Esra had a good character development, although the character seemed more mortal-like than I had expected. As the Sin of Greed, I expected the girl to be more god-like than human, thus she has a various set of skills which might include combat skills that happen to be versatile and unorthodox, along with wit and smarts. But as I read along the story, I was disappointed to how novice she was, telling how weak she was against Meliodas, and how she was more of a little girl than a Spirit. I know that she's a fox originally, but isn't she supposed to be the Fox of Greed?

Chapter 21 was a scary chapter because of what happened to Esra, although I still didn't get what had happened. I thought she would turn into a demon fox for drinking the blood of a demon rather than simply losing her memories. But I don't know, you still haven't continued yet so I can't conclude anything for sure.

The other characters though were constant and they retained their attitudes from the anime and manga. You did a good job there! A lot of writers have a hard time keeping the original characters in check, so keep up the good work! Leraj is a sort of a mystery to me though. He was fast with his character development, so if you're ever going to edit, make him a little more denial to his feelings because remember that he's a demon and she's a fox spirit. Falling in love should seem a little far-fetched.

E) Dialogue
You did great with the dialogues! It was well-written, and I loved how the characters responded to each other. By the way, Esra and Leraj are my otp, as of now unless some other dude comes along, or something. I don't know how else you could improve except to make the conversation more long and deep, especially when needed. Add some mystification to your story ;)

F) Setting
This is one of the parts you need to improve on, but you did a little better than your previous one, but still. Since Esra is a fox, she should be better at describing her surroundings as she is an ancient being.

Then once again, since I've already said this in my previous book, I have a strong preference for vivid books like how some writers I personally admire like MadameAndiSenpai (she's passed away unfortunately), and several others. Be imaginative, broaden your horizon, tell us how the OC feels, smells, and sees. Although first POVs aren't keen on descriptions of surroundings because they focus more on how the OC feels.

But overall, you did a good job.

G) Technicals
The technicals are the least you should worry about, haha. There was barely any errors like spelling or grammar honestly. Only a couple of errors like combined words. But other than that, you did a fantastic job on this one. Although I recommend that you fix your tags on the story, better if you write the genres like drama, action, etc. 

So, it got the technical part of your story got the highest rating, and there's not much more I can say on this.

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Concluding remarks:

Great job on writing the story! I could sense how much you loved the story, especially from the remark you gave me on your story. In that sense I feel you so much. Like I love the stories I come up with that even if they aren't so popular, I wouldn't mind. Because I'm confident of how I write it and what plot I came up with. The same goes for you. I could feel you passion for this story, so I hope that despite the criticism I gave, it would serve as a motivation for you to improve the story you have written.

Don't worry, I could see what you have got in mind for the story, and I have to say that it'll be great! That I'm sure of! I look forward to see how the story goes. And don't be discouraged as you still have the time and skills to improve the story you love so much. I'm cheering for you!

And I'm really sorry for taking so long to finish this review! It took more than I year, and I'm really sorry for that!

- R