THE CONNECTED
Lunarreine

TITLE 7/10: although it is brought up in the story, I feel like you could probably choose something a lot more interesting

COVER 10/10: wow, it's really cool!

DESCRIPTION 8/10: it's a bit long, so I might recommend taking out the part describing each character. if you still feel the need to have it, maybe you can put it in the book in an introduction/prologue

FACE CLAIMS 10/10: they look perfect to me

STORYLINE 8/10: I'm enjoying it so far, but I think you need to add a bit of uniqueness. give your characters some personal struggles and some flaws that they need to work through because these will serve as little pieces of the subplot. however, I like the whole alien idea because I think that will escalate the story

BONUS 3/5, grammar: there were some issues with punctuation, sentence structure, and other grammatical errors that could impact a reader's understanding

NOTES/ REVIEW: I'd recommend going back and editing some of the errors, but the rest is for future improvement. I'm hoping the plot will shape up into something unique with twists, and also don't forget to develop your characters further!

TOTAL: 43/50 + 3 bonus points

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( rated by sett )