WEASLEY TWINS - LOVE ME LIKE YOU DO

Shiya-always

TITLE 8/10: the title is alright and fits with the story

COVER 10/10: your cover is really pretty and eye-catching

DESCRIPTION 5/10: your description is very short and doesn't really explain what your story is about. Though in your prologue and author's note thing become clearer.

FACE CLAIMS 0/10: you don't have any face claims so I'll just skip this part

STORYLINE 5/10: Your storyline is okay, there aren't any big major events. From what I've gathered you chose to write a story about relationships (mainly Fred and the OC). Outside of the relationship storyline, I haven't really found if there is another storyline (with drama or mysteries).

BONUS 1/5, grammar: you still have to work on punctuation and your grammar. There are a lot of easy errors to change. But I got to give you some points to the fact that in the last chapters you described well Fred and the OC's feeling for the other.

NOTES/ REVIEW: There are some loose ends in your book such as an eleven years old girl who is left alone with two twelve years old strangers is very unusual. An hour after meeting Remus for the first time, she calls him uncle Remus and hugs him. You could include flashbacks of the start of her first year instead of writing two chapters about her first year then continuing on her seventh year. There needs to be more description in your book and having more than two different POVs confused me a bit.

TOTAL: 28/40 + 1

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( rated by kit )