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NerdOfEnder

TITLE 10/10: I absolutely love the title! it makes sense because your story is about luna lovegood's sister. I also expect that as the story progresses it will begin to tie in even more

COVER 9/10: it's a gorgeous cover. the only thing I can say is the font at the top where it has your name and the graphics author's name is pretty small and a bit hard to see

DESCRIPTION 7/10: it does a good job of explaining the story, it's not too long, and it's not too short. however, I see a few grammar and spelling errors. I'd suggest revising it because I know that can be off-putting to some readers

FACE CLAIMS X/10: this will not be deducted from your total since you have no face claims

STORYLINE 6/10: the book is clean and straightforward so far, leaving no room for confusion. however, it's not too unique of a storyline. I've seen many fanfictions where a student goes to Hogwarts and is sorted into Slytherin, shocking their family and friends who are all in one common house

BONUS 3/5, grammar: there were some consistent punctuation mistakes, but that's probably just lack of knowledge rather than poor editing

NOTES/ REVIEW: not a badly written story at all! for the storyline, as I said, it isn't too unique but I hope that'll change as the story progresses. I'd also suggest trying to make the main character more of a character if that makes any sense. at the moment, I feel like she's just spectating what's happening rather than living the story. I can't always sense what she's feeling or what's she's thinking

TOTAL: 32/40 + 3 bonus points

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