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Book: The Heaven's Edge

Author: Tadaoki

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Title (5/5): The title is relevant to the story and catches readers' attention. I was definitely intrigued to learn more and I like that you mentioned it within the first chapter and explained its relevancy to the story.

Cover (5/5): The cover is simple, clean and it definitely catches my eye! The font and the placement of the title are perfect.

Summary (9/10): The summary is short, but the length works well because you do a good job of explaining the basis of the plot without giving too much away. It was very concise and it made me want to read the story to find out more! The only issues I noticed were some grammatical errors. I would recommend omitting the period after "life" and combining the two sentences. I would also recommend changing the period after "Empire" to a comma. If you do that, it should be good to go!

Plot (12/15): Since there were only two chapters it was difficult for me to rate this section but I think you've got a really good start. Your pacing is perfect and you do a great job of hooking readers in and setting up the plot. The only thing I wish I knew more about was the world your characters lived in. You mention several different places and groups in the story and I think it would be helpful for readers if you delved a little more into the history and set-up of your world. You've still got time to do this, but I would recommend doing so sooner rather than later to help readers picture and understand the story better. Otherwise, I was consistently intrigued by the story and by the time I finished the second chapter I really wanted to know what was going to happen next!

Characters (9/10): I didn't get to learn a lot about the characters since there was only two chapters, but I already love all of them! I especially loved the dialogue, I chuckled pretty consistently throughout the story. The characters all seem to interact well and I'm excited to see how Caedan gets along with his new team! The only thing I was confused about was who Mawry was. I'm assuming she's Caedan's mom, but I think it would be beneficial to specify. Otherwise, the only other recommendation I have is to use more dialogue tags. There were a few parts where you had back-to-back-to-back dialogue and I got a little confused about who was speaking, but it didn't take me too long to figure it out.

Organization (4/5): Your chapters are clean and you do a good job of using dividers to indicate changes in the setting. I noticed some grammar and spelling errors, but otherwise it seems like you were pretty thorough. The only recommendation I have is to include chapter numbers because I find that they make it easier for readers to remember where they are in a story, but that's a personal choice.

Overall (44/50): I don't know if this is what you had in mind, but I think this would make an incredible anime. I would definitely watch it! I need more chapters to do a more thorough review, but like I said earlier, you've got an awesome start! You did a really good job hooking readers in and you have great descriptive skills. My biggest recommendations would be to explain more about the world your story takes place in and to define the relationship between Mawry and Caedan. Otherwise, great job and I'm excited for you to post more chapters!

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