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Book: The Wanted

Author: ImTheGirl

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Title (3/5): I like the title, although I'm a little unsure as to how it relates to the story. Is it to do with other people wanting to be like them since they're famous? I think it would be beneficial for readers if you alluded to the reason for the title early on within the story.

Cover (5/5): The cover really catches my attention and I like the colors. I'm not sure who is supposed to be on the cover (maybe Alyson?), but it gives the right vibes for the story!

Summary (9/10): The summary is a good length and captivating enough without giving too much away. The only issue I noticed is that there are two grammatical errors. First, it should be "UTurn is" instead of "UTurn are" because even though UTurn is comprised of several people, it is a singular noun. The second grammatical error I noticed was that you're missing a "was" after "What she didn't realize". If you fix those then you should be good to go!

Plot (9/15): The concept for the plot is intriguing, although overall I think it's a little too rushed. I would have liked to have seen some key moments stretched out a little more; like UTurn trying to find two new band members, the Pushers dissolving, and Amanda and Derrick joining UTurn. These are some great plot points, but I think their potential could have been maximized if you allowed some more time for the tension to build. There were also a few things that I was confused about. Why was Sophia so willing to break up her band for Ethan? Perhaps it's explained in the previous book, but a refresher might be nice for readers. I was also confused about why Alyson wanted Amanda and Derrick to join UTurn despite having completely different styles. Was this because she knew she didn't have much time and she didn't want to give Marcel the power to choose? And lastly, how did Andrew figure out that Amanda and Derrick were forced to join UTurn by Ethan? And knowing that, why would they want to keep Amanda and Derrick in the band? I think if you clarify these points a little more it will help the plot. Otherwise, I like how you emphasize the clash of styles and how they need to work together in order to be a successful band. I think that's a strong underlying plot and if you continue to emphasize it it will be great for character development. Like I've mentioned in comments for "Addictive Lies", I also really like how you address sexuality, especially during such a vulnerable time in most people's lives. Bisexuality is not commonly portrayed in books, films, or TV shows, and when it is it's rarely portrayed correctly. I'm not bisexual myself, but I think you do a good job of showing the inner conflict that Andrew deals with regarding something he's still learning about himself during a time when it's still fairly stigmatized and misunderstood. The added pressure of him being a popstar and having the world watching him while he deals with this is also interesting and really aids the plot.

Characters (9/10): For how many characters you have, I think you do a great job of introducing them and giving readers a sense for them in only ten chapters. I think part of this is because you do a good job of alternating between perspectives to allow readers a little more intimacy with each individual character. Perhaps it's because I already know them from reading "Addictive Lies", but I think each of their personalities are fairly distinct and the relationships between them add a lot to the plot. I think the overall tension between Alyson, Andrew, Amanda, and Derrick is particularly strong and really helps to keep readers intrigued. The dialogue seems natural for their ages and for the setting and seems to flow well overall.

Organization (3/5): The chapters are clean and a good length and the book is easy to navigate. I like the use of the chapter titles, however I did notice that there are no spaces between "Chapter" and the chapter numbers, but that's just me being nit-picky. The biggest issue I noticed was that there were quite a few spelling/grammar errors, but that's an easy fix.

Overall (38/50): It was really interesting reading this story after having read "Addictive Lies", but I feel like I learned a lot that has helped me to form a better understanding of everything! I think you've got a great world built and I'm impressed by how many stories you have within it. Your dedication to writing is really inspiring! My biggest recommendations are to slow down the plot, expand more on some of the questions I addressed, and to go through and fix spelling/grammar errors. Otherwise, great job and I'm excited to keep learning more about UTurn in "Dangerous Scandals"!

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