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Book: To Be A God

Author: limernce

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Title (5/5): Fits perfectly for the story because it references a song that represents Valentina's individuality and encapsulates the dystopian world she lives in as a celebrity. I like that you referenced the title early on in the story so that readers could see the connection right away, and that you continued to relate her life to the gods throughout the story.

Cover (4/5): The cover is simple and clean and I really like the way the font overlaps in the title. It's definitely eye-catching, although I'm a little unsure how the picture relates to the story.

Summary (6/10): I'm sure it's an aesthetic thing but personally I'm not a fan of using all lowercase letters, especially since the summary seems to be the only time you do it in the book (aside from some lyrics I think). The first sentence catches your attention but it doesn't seem entirely relevant to the plot because Valentina mentions several times that she doesn't want to kill herself, but rather make the pain go away. The summary also makes it seem like the plot is going to focus more on the partnership between Valentina and Morgan but from where it left off at the tenth chapter this doesn't seem to be the case. If I read on further, perhaps I'd see otherwise, but from what I read the summary is slightly misleading. Aside from that, I definitely think it's intriguing and makes me want to read more. It's also a good length and doesn't give too much away, but it almost seems like it doesn't provide you with enough information to understand what the story is about either.

Plot (4/15): The pace of the story was very fast which resulted in a lot happening within a short amount of time. Within five chapters, Valentina gets saved by Morgan, agrees to record an album with her, develops some feelings, and then gets betrayed by her. It didn't feel like there was enough time for the reader to fully comprehend Morgan and Valentina's relationship so it didn't really faze me when it was revealed that Morgan might be lying to Valentina. It also became confusing when Lisa negated the fact that Morgan was in on it and then a chapter or two later we learn that Morgan is actually in on it. This led it to feel like the story was flip-flopping because of how quickly things unfolded. Maybe I missed something or maybe I just didn't get it, but I was confused about Lisa's intentions with Morgan and what her goal was regarding Valentina. She wanted Valentina to record an album with Morgan to extend her contract but she also wanted to drop Valentina from the label and replace her with Morgan? I don't quite understand how one would lead to the other. I also struggled with identifying what the driving plot was. Initially, it seemed like the main plot would be about Valentina being forced to record an album with Morgan but now it seems like it will be about Valentina going against Lisa? Which was another thing that felt very rushed. It just kind of seemed to come out of nowhere that Valentina had the bravery to go up on stage and out Lisa in front of everyone. I know she had Serena supporting her, but Serena is still a stranger and up until this point it seemed like Valentina was too scared to disobey Lisa. I did think the pacing for revealing information about Julian was perfect though. The little flashbacks here and there divulged just enough to keep readers interested without giving too much away. I like that you pointed out his subtle possessive behaviors from the beginning, even if Valentina hadn't seen them at the time.

Characters (6/10): The characters seem real and relatable, and you do a good job of providing physical descriptions, however the relationships between them are a little confusing; mostly the relationships between Valentina and Morgan, Valentina and Lisa, and Valentina and Serena. It was a little confusing as to whether Valentina had feelings for Morgan or not and while Morgan seemed to have feelings for Valentina, the reveal of her betrayal happened so quickly that it was hard to determine whether she was fueled by those feelings or doing whatever it takes to boost her celebrity status. It's fairly obvious that Lisa is an antagonist, but since Lisa's true intentions with Valentina are confusing (at least to me), it's hard to determine the exact role she plays in the plot. And it's still too early to say, but it seems like Serena is another potential love interest for Valentina, which seems a bit too soon after Morgan. I fear that she may betray Valentina as well, and if that's the case, the story may become a bit repetitive. Aside from that, I thought your dialogue was natural and flowed well.

Organization (4/5): The story was easy to navigate and I only noticed a couple spelling/grammar errors. The biggest thing I noticed was that the chapters were all fairly short compared to most other stories on Wattpad. This isn't necessarily a bad thing, but I think it might help to slow the pace of the story if you expanded more on some of the scenes.

Overall (29/50): You've got great writing skills, there's no doubt about it! Your words flowed effortlessly and made it very easy to picture the story as it unfolded. You provided just the right amount of detail where it balanced out the dialogue, and overall there seemed to be an almost hazy-like quality to the writing that added to the atmosphere. My biggest recommendations would be to slow down the pace and make the plot and character relationships more obvious to the reader. You've got a great story, I just think it needs to be filled-in a little more to prevent readers from getting confused. Otherwise, great job and I'm interested to see where you take it!

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