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Review 24 // Lucia Juno

We've got another character from the universe by Utatane_Piko_V2

My comments will be in bold

Basics and grounding

I've reviewed this universe before so I don't have anything to say here.

Character information

I honestly really like the sound of this character, I think she'll work well in this universe. The only thing I can really say is give her more negative personality traits to balance out the positive ones but I don't think it's really needed.

Relationships

These relationships are very well thought out and I think they could be interesting to see. Just make sure that you show their relationships through the characters actions and words, not just blatantly telling the audience. These relationships are pretty complicated though, so try and make sure the way you present it is clear.

Backstory




This is a long and thought out backstory, but having incredibly long back stories for all your characters, you have to be careful to space out the plots and make sure not to get them mixed up. Also be careful having so many characters especially with names the reader will be uncommon with. It might get confusing and messy, but as long as it's all written in a way that's understandable, it should be fine.

Other



I really like the abilities you've come up with for these characters, I don't see much like them so really good job with this powers!

Stats

These stats are fine, though I do recommend having one stat that is a lot lower than the rest to show that the character does have a weakness, but since there's no incredibly high stats, this is fine. It's already pretty balanced.

Extra

I always appreciate extra information because it shows a lot of thought has been put into the character.

Final thoughts
I've already reviewed a character from this universe and I'll say it again, it's a story I would genuinely read. I'm sorry that this review is kinda short but there wasn't many areas for me to say you can improve on because it's pretty well done, my only worry is how it would come across in a story because there's a lot of new concepts, but I mentioned that last time. Overall, this is a very well thought out character, so good job!

*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you of course do not have to listen to what I've said. This us all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*

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