Review 37 // Beta Austreya
A character for an original universe by Sepulchre13
My comments will be in bold
Basics and grounding
This sounds pretty interesting
Character information
This character seems interesting, all I can really recommend is add more detail, like adding more positive personality traits and more hobbies to really add to the character and develop her further.
Relationships
These relationships are fine, just make sure that if you write about this character that the relationships are well presented and shown. Developing these relationships further will make your character feel more real and connect to the reader more.
Backstory
This sounds like a unique backstory, but when introducing so many new topics, make sure to explain them gradually in order not to confuse the reader. You need to display this well and thoroughly in order for the reader to connect and understand with her past.
Other
I understand that being overpowered is common in this universe, but as far as being overpowered goes, this is a lot. Maybe tone her down slightly? Having this many powers and abilities makes her beyond OP.
Stats
Again, I understand that being op is a thing in this world but, that would mean that there would be a different average of strength in this world, not to mention that there is no reference that these beings are more intelligent in any way. I recommend having one incredibly high stat at most and at least one very low one to balance it out.
Final thoughts
This character could be very good, but you really just need to work on making sure she is balanced and works well in the universe. Some few changes and she could be an incredibly good character.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
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