Client: TheReal_Khusi

Reviewer: Kailucy

Note: So sorry for the wait!!

Cover: 7/10

The cover is okay. It's not great but not completely awful. I think making the fonts clearer would be the best thing to start with. it would help it a lot.

Title: 9/10

I actually like the title. It's short and sweet. It fits well with the genre and the plot.

Blurb: 9/10

The blurb is good. It's a good length and introduces the characters.

Character: 8/10

First off, I don't like Abhimanyu. I don't know if he'll fix his attitude later or not but right now I wanna kick him. Maybe it's just me though. You did a good job writing his description. It gives a good idea of the person he is. In chapter two, I liked that you gave him a little more of a backstory and made him a little more sympathetic. I personally still don't like him but maybe I will eventually.

Meera is well written. I felt bad for her and yelled at her to run a few times. I also liked how you wrote her internal monologue.

Overall, I think the characters are interesting, but I do think it's a little hard to connect to them right now. It's most likely due to it being so early into the story, though. I'm only mentioning it so you know to make sure they're a little easier to connect with as the story goes on. You may have already done that and if so ignore this. But if you are feeling like something is missing, maybe try that.

Plot: 17/20

The plot itself isn't bad. It's just not something I would typically read on my own. The pacing is good. I was a little confused at first at the way the chapters were structured until I realized that the first part is more of a prologue-type thing.

The plot stayed engaging and did keep me reading so considering it's not my favorite plot, you did write it well.

Writing style: 17/20

I enjoyed your writing style quite a bit. A few things felt a little off. (mainly some of the dialogue. It didn't feel very natural in some parts.) I enjoyed it when you added descriptions. They were very detailed and a delight to read. Some that stood out were in chapter 2.

There is a scene that is written in all italics. I don't really understand the reasoning of that, it wasn't a flashback or anything that would usually require italics so maybe see about fixing that?

Grammar/spelling/vocabulary: 7/10

There were some spelling and grammar mistakes. I wrote down a few but I probably missed some.

In the first paragraph "meltes" it wrong. It should be "melts" and actually it should be "melted" to make it grammatically correct.

"So as I said, "I have COME to" should be come not came.

There are also several parts where you would start in the past tense and abruptly switch to the present.

Enjoyment: 8/10

I did enjoy most of it. I found the guy really irritating but otherwise it was enjoyable.

Overall: 82/100

Overall, you have a good start. The characters are decent, the plot is engaging and the writing is good. I think if you fixed some of the mistakes first it would improve the book drastically. Keep writing!