Reviewer: june_berrin
Written by: crimson_lipsxx

Thank you so much for giving me the chance to review your story.

It was a great story and I enjoyed it.

❥ Title: The title does have a connection to your story as it is the band name. I think the title can be used for a lot of different genres. But it does fit your story well so I guess it’s great as long as you fine with it. But if you feel like a change I only recommend rephrasing it.

❥ Cover: Well, Hello there. The cover fits the story perfectly, it does gives me band vibes and also helps with the character visualisation in my case. I haven’t really read a lot of books in this genres but i do feel like vector cover type would also suit your story.

❥ Blurb: The blurb was simple and well written. From reading it alone It felt like a story about band where the main girl or the front girl fells in love with a star. To make your blurb more exciting I suggest that you also say something about the other members too, like their struggles or any other.

❥ Storyline: Well, if I am being honest I am not a fan of long chapters so after reading the prologue I was expecting a very long chapter which I would most likely skim through. But your amazing writing skills didn’t make it feel like it was a long one. So I would say scratch that part where you tell the readers about the long chapters.

Now onto the real topic, your plot. As I have already mentioned, I am not big fan of this genre but does read it sometimes. So, the plot was a bit common and I haven’t read a lot of chapters to know whether you have added a little touch of your own. But till the part I’ve read, I have to say I loved it!!

It was well written and went on a medium pace. Each chapter did have a lot of content and I loved your writing style a lot.

❥ Characters: I guess the characterization was a problem. First off, the names Cora and Nora was a bit confusing even though they are sisters I struggle a bit with differentiating them.

Second problem was that you introduced them all together at once which was a major issue because each time I had to scroll to up to see who is who. So I highly recommend you give them a special trait of their own so the readers won’t get confused. And you should have spread their descriptions like the girl who did that was Cora or rather show and not tell like that.
I suggest you use the flashback scenes for that like the girl who said you need the auditioning was Cora, that was just an example but I hope you got the idea.

❥ Grammar and punctuations: I think you need to edit your story, proofread them once more and correct the mistakes you find and then after few days gap, check again. (This is the way I edit my stories)

I have also noticed the change of the narrative person and felt like it was switching from first person narrative to third person sometimes. Also some of the paragraphs were a bit confusing especially the scene were they walk in to Cora’s black painted room. I also recommend breaking down off the long paragraphs to shorter once for smooth reading.

Change of tenses were also there. This is also one of my biggest problem too. Sometimes you have accidentally jumped from past to present tense.

❥ Conclusions: First off I am extremely sorry for such a long delay for your review. I was in a bad place and couldn’t get myself to do anything. I almost thought of quitting it but now I’m trying to suck it up and start again. I don’t know if this review is useful but I am extremely sorry.

Second, your book has a lot of potential so I really think if you could do some modifications here and there it would make it even better. Hope your satisfied.

Best Wishes!