Reviewer: june_berrin
Written by: herawritesxxx

Thank you so much for giving me the chance to review your story.

It was a great story and I enjoyed it.

❥ Title: The title ‘Breathe’ is a very suitable one for the story. It is appropriate for the storyline. And is not a common title that most people would use.

❥ Cover: The cover is beautiful and is simple. It doesn't have too many elements in it, the color scheme used goes well together. The title is in a good font. Overall, a beautiful cover that will surely attract readers.

❥ Blurb: The blurb was nice. It was intriguing to read and would attract a lot of readers. But I suggest that you read through it once more because it needs some editing and you don't need to use long gaps in-between the paragraphs. Also, grammar mistakes have been found.

Original: “Aurora feel like.”
Correct: “Aurora feels like.“

Original: Her parents fighting when they think she can't hear them.
Suggested: “Her parents constantly fighting thinking she can't hear them” or “Her parents fight when they think...”

Here the original sentence is a mix of two tenses, if you are writing in the present tense then you need to use the said tense forms. In the original one, you cant write there fighting and it should be a fight. But if you want to write fighting then seek the given option and modify it if you want.

❥ Storyline: A well-structured and properly written plot. Each chapter has great content and the story was written neither too fast nor too slow pace. The central idea was enthralling. Such kinds of plots are very common on Wattpad and you managed to execute them well.

❥ Characters: The development was gradual. At the beginning of the story, you made Adam seem like an angel who had no flaws but gradually you developed him. You portrayed the character Aurora the best. You have managed to give them different personalities and were good at capturing their feelings and emotions very well.

❥ Grammar and punctuations: Grammatical errors were not that common and were a bit rare. But the punctuation errors were almost everywhere. Missing commas, question marks, and many other punctuations lacks in a lot of areas. Wrong punctuation usage. I suggest that you proofread your story once more and also read the comments in your comments section, the readers have given a lot of good advice.
Also, your writing style needs improvement, especially in your description. Currently, you are doing good but sometimes your word choice does just fit or more like there could be other words that could be more appropriate.
I suggest using Grammarly while proofreading it will help you a lot especially with punctuations.

❥ Conclusions: Overall, the story was great romantic fiction. It was a beautiful story, I truly love the character Aurora. Your story had a lot of potential and you have done a very good job. Hope you have a good day.

Best Wishes