Reviewer: june_berrin
Written by: SassySunday

Thank you so much for giving me the chance to review your story.

It was a great story and I enjoyed it.

❥ Title: The title was a very unique one and was very much a creative one. It matched well with the story.

❥ Cover: The cover is good but in the
the letter which has the letter 'C' labeled on, the color used on it doesn't quite go well with the entire cover. The cover has a red and black scheme and when the light blue-like shade comes in between it just doesn't work well. The heading is written clearly and is readable but the same can't be said with the author's name, the author's name is difficult to find since it is written in red and I also recommend that you change the font you used too. Everything else is great.

❥ Blurb: When I read the blurb for the first time, to be frank, I was very confused and didn't understand anything especially in the last where you mention the characters and so. I had to read a few more times to understand what you meant there which could turn of some readers. So, whole writing a blurb like the one you have written I suggest that when you are saying about each character. You need to break it down into different sentences, how small the sentence is you should still break it down for better understanding. And also, I have to point that there is a lot of punctuations missing.

Apart from these, the blurb is written very well and could spark readers' interest when they read it if you modify it. The beginning part where you talked about Cecil and Kassandra (sorry if I spelled it wrong) was written very well giving an insight to the readers about the characters while creating suspense at the same time. Good job!

❥ Storyline: When you write a story, you need to remember that the readers don't know what you do, so while writing, you have to write it from their perspective so that the reader can understand easier. Because as each chapter passes it starts to get a bit confusing.

Also, I do think that you shouldn't write about a  lot of characters' points of view. It is better to have two or three-point-of-view characters so that the reader can easily understand the plot. And when you started writing the past of Cecil in Kassandra's point of view you mentioned in the top saying that this the past written in present form. And in the next chapter of Cecil's point of view, you continued it. So, I suggest that you also write in that chapter too, and/or when the flashback ends you can give a small author's note saying it has ended.

Out of all chapters, the first one is the best, I was turned on after reading that one and immediately loved the Cecil character.

❥ Characters: So far the characters Cecil, and her trustful bodyguard is the most well-developed and portrayed characters. All the others are great too but still, need a lot of work.

❥ Grammar and punctuations: Your grammar was so far on point and no typos were found. But there is a lot of lack of punctuation here and there which can be corrected with some proofreading.

❥ Writing Style: Your writing style needs a lot of work. The chapter names could be more creative than just the POV characters name and you can write the POV characters name like:

Cecil

Which looks good and most of the writers and published books follow this method. And you can give creative chapter names too. The pov characters should range from 1 to 3. Only important characters' pic, is needed, so the readers could have a better connection with the characters. And will make it easier to read. Overall suggest that you read a chapter from the view of a reader and also proofread each before publishing.

❥ Conclusions: I have written this review with the pure intention of helping your story to improve, and if any of my words have hurtled you then I am extremely sorry for that. And the writing style ideas I suggested is just a suggestion, and you have the entire right to write your story the way you want. And I am also sorry for the delay in the review, my Wattpad account had some problems. Hoping that you will find my review helpful, and now I will take my leave.

Best Wishes