Welcome to the results of the First round of Survival of the Fittest. Sadly not everyone submitted their scene. Here's who did.

AnemoneMarino      Kalliope Aiodós
[28 points] Through to the next round ✅

Hi, I loved reading your scene. The little bits of humour and the funny Dr Who references really made me laugh. I enjoyed seeing hints of your characters personality with the choice of words you've used.
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SheWroteHisRuin Kai Knight Blackwood
[0 points] Eliminated ❌
Kai's portal opened at the Sahara Desert. They didn't have any water with them and died of heatstroke.

morfusmax1 Tsu'Na Hyurcat
[22 points] Through to the next round ✅

"Well, this is your first time participating in ""Survival Of The Fittest"", so you might have directed your focus on aspects that are unnecessary for the survival of the character. First of all: This does not need to be reminiscent of your own book. It does not have to be the same style. It is recommendable that you are trying to keep in your diary style, but it has some huge disadvantages and might become your downfall later on in the contest.

Second: You do have a word count limit, so you need to choose carefully what to put into your submission and what to leave out. Your Judge's Notes stated a lot of information about Tsu'Na Hyurcat's background and abilities - this whole thing with the search for her husband should have been a part of that, in my opinion at least. (The Judge's Notes chapter is a matter on its own - I know that Jessica gave her OK to do that, though I think that adding an appendix to the book that is longer than the actual submission defeats the purpose of the contest and might even be considered cheating by some.) Your focus on the background of these two characters takes away a lot of words that should have been used on the specifics on the time period at hand."

SuspenseScream Kwik
[0 points] Eliminated ❌
Kwik walked through the portal and landed head first in the Atlantic Ocean where they drowned.

uschibear Lorelei
[28 points] Through to the next round ✅

I like it - for the most part. There are some minor issues that I mentioned in detail in the other parts, like the plot hole that Olaf and Lorelei can speak to each other in the same language. But the style is quick and to the point, gives enough information and lets the reader follow along. The trip through the portal was well dealt with, quickly and without any superfluous description, getting the story where it needs to be. I am however missing the invasion aspect of the prompt - Lorelei dealing with just one lone Viking feels a bit too easy.

StephanieProchaska Zev
[27 points] Through to the next round ✅

Your scene was very well written and you stayed nicely within the word count. I didn't see any obvious spelling mistakes. Be careful when you're writing thoughts. They're usually written in the first person, present tense and I noticed yours were third person past. I also would have liked to see more use of your characters senses, what can he hear? What can he smell?

lisakshara Jung
[29 points] Through to the next round ✅

I enjoyed reading your scene. However, I struggled to paint a picture in my mind of Seoul. I felt the characters' thoughts and feelings were well written, but the scene lacked any hint of his senses. I've never been to Seoul and as this is where your scene is set, I was expecting to get an idea of what it's like there. What does it look like? What does it smell like? What's the weather like? Is it hot? Is it cold? What's he wearing? What does he look like? These may seem like minor things but they are so important to help your readers paint a picture of your setting and your character.

v1ol3tscr1be Johanna
[18 points] Through to the next round ✅

After reading your scene I found myself curious about your interpretation of the prompt. It seemed a bit challenging to connect it with the original guidelines provided for this round. The setting felt unclear, and I wasn't able to identify the specific historical era you intended to convey from the options shared by the moderators. Additionally, I believe that adding more detail and description could enhance the richness of the scene.

SkullantacySmith Lord Brennan Ryder
[30 points] Through to the next round ✅

I don't think I can add or give any valuable advice at that point. The scene is well done, engaging, follows the prompt closely and accomplishes with few words to create atmosphere, give all the necessary information and immerse the reader into the action. Good work!

Well done to everyone who progressed to the next round. Keep your eye on Discord as the second prompt will be posted today.