Welcome to the results of Survival of the Fittest Round Two.

Round Two: A Local Lunch

uschibear Lorelei
[26 points] Through to Next Round ✅

I found your scene captivating, and I truly enjoyed reading it. That said, I believe it could benefit from more vivid descriptions in certain areas. Incorporating a richer use of the characters' senses—sight, sound, touch, taste, and smell—would deepen the reader's experience. Additionally, delving into the character's thoughts and emotions could add layers of complexity and connection, making the narrative even more engaging.

AnemoneMarino      Kalliope Aiodós
[30 points] Through to Next Round ✅

Your piece offers an interesting glimpse into the historical era you've chosen, though I initially found it a bit challenging to pinpoint the exact time. The first scene provided some helpful context, but I thought it could benefit from additional sensory details. For instance, including descriptions of the church's aroma or highlighting how stained glass windows illuminate the ancient structure might enhance the atmosphere. I really appreciated your subtitle; it paired well with your writing. The hints of humor, along with the characters' relatable stomach rumblings, added a touch of normality to the scene.

morfusmax1  Tsu'Na Hyurcat
[20 points] Through to the next round ✅

You've got a clear grasp of structure and world logic, which is a great foundation—but the piece leans heavily on exposition rather than immersive storytelling. The internal voice is functional but emotionally detached, which undercuts the prompt's focus on sensory experience and internal struggle. I'd encourage you to slow down in moments that matter—let the scene breathe, and give us more than just what happens. Show us how it feels. Also, push yourself to develop dialogue that reveals character rather than just advancing the plot. You've got the bones, just needs a bit of muscle and skin.

StephanieProchaska Zev
[0 points] Eliminated ❌
Sadly as no scenes was submitted

lisakshara Jung
[27 points] Through to the next round ✅

Your voice is your strength—there's wit, charm, and clarity in your writing. Cultural dissonance is handled with humor rather than over-explaining, which makes it feel grounded. I know the word count is limiting, but I'd challenge you to push a little deeper on emotional stakes and atmosphere.

v1ol3tscr1be Johanna
[0 points] no scene submitted Eliminated ❌

SkullantacySmith Lord Brennan Ryder
[23 points] Through to the next round ✅

You've got a nice instinct for pacing and scene structure, this reads like a complete arc within the word limit. You could push harder past surface-level description and emotional cues. Give us more of the why behind the feelings. The food moment landed well—visceral and specific—but the rest of the world feels fuzzy. Tune in the setting more, try letting your character's inner world color how they perceive what's around them.