By BLT

BOOK COVER

The book cover certainly gives the impression of a fighter, someone who is of a secluded, quiet nature. I would suggest changing the way the title is written because currently, it lacks the capacity to attract readers. The title is suitable but you could try stylising the font, maybe increase the size as well.

Since the prologue is pretty short and it's considered as the first chapter, I'll be combining the prologue and the second chapter as the first chapter here.

CHAPTER ONE

The prologue really is a good beginning. It's a proper introduction and piques one's curiosity. It's a short prologue, the way a prologue must be and had me hooked on.

The first line of the first chapter, I must say, is beautiful. It's the perfect starting and really creates the atmosphere for the story. A few grammatical errors that I corrected-

"There was no serious fighter who hadn't (not hasn't) dreamed of participating at..."

"I had won (not won) every fight so far and..."

The fact that it's been written in the first person really makes a difference. You've helped the reader get immersed in the life of the character and the serious tone in which the narration happens is something I congratulate you on. The closing lines of chapter two were as intense as the opening lines, really making me look forward to the next chapter.

CHAPTER TWO

Again, a different atmosphere altogether. In contrast to the previous chapter, there exists more tension between our fighter and his opponent. The sharp insults provided by him involves the reader in the chilly atmosphere, with the mounting tension. A grammatical error I found-

"...we all know how it (the word 'it' has been omitted) is with dogs that bark aloud..."

I love the way the fighters play it cool and calm and you can almost sense the ice in each other's words. You have a way of creating an immersive experience for the reader, as I've mentioned, which is a strong quality every author must possess.

CHAPTER THREE

A complete turn of events. The way you skip from the press conference to after the big fight is pretty abrupt but surprisingly, it doesn't seem jerky. That's the way the story seems appealing so don't go change a thing!

A couple of corrected sentences-

"...After I missed, so miserably, my once in a lifetime chance..."

"I pretended I could not speak although my jaw had already healed..."

Apart from this, the descriptions of his thoughts, feelings and behaviour are vivid and enthral the reader with a feeling of watching a movie on-screen. That's a job well done.

CHAPTER FOUR

The narrative keeps improving chapter after chapter. The dialogues are perfectly natural and so is the scenario. Realistic fiction could be your speciality. In the part where he sends a mail to his sister, I suggest you use bold letters or italics to denote the part of the mail. Even the mail is so naturally composed, one can easily imagine him sitting at the pub, his jacket hood up, typing a short and precise mail.

You certainly have a way of ending each chapter with a group of sentences that force your hand to press on the 'Read next' button automatically. Definitely an entertaining chapter this was.

CHAPTER FIVE

Okay. This was definitely my favourite chapter! The descriptions improve again and again and the part where his habit of shifting his lower jaw to the side has been described...just left me speechless at the smoothness of writing. I absolutely loved the descriptive style of narration and honestly, there's not much for me to critique, with the story being near-perfect. One grammatical error I corrected-

"As I stepped out of the airport, warm air hit my face." (A comma had been omitted)

FINAL NOTE

'Diaries of a Fighter' is an amazing book with a storyline that'll surely hook anyone on. Descriptions are really well done and at times they seem professional. Given a chance to buy this book at a bookstore somewhere, I'd buy it, without question! I really enjoyed this work so far and reckon there are several other people out there who will.