By Sohlll

BOOK COVER

I have to give you credit for the beautiful book cover. Just have to. The cover is very attractive and I'm a 100% sure that half of your readers gravitated towards your book for this simple reason. The cover is a perfect reflection of the contents of the book. It's magical.

One issue, the only issue with the cover is that there is no author's name on it. With a book as interesting as yours, it would be such a shame if people didn't know who was behind the creative work. So I'd recommend writing the author's name on the cover in a visibly clear font.

CHAPTER ONE

Grammatically, this was a perfect chapter. The storyline was highly engaging and the dialogues had the perfect blend of humour and intensity. So one word to describe this chapter is PERFECT.

I loved it and as I said, you're forced to read every small detail because the writing style prompts you to. It was amusing to figure out that when she referred to 'Luci', she meant Lucifer. That was very entertaining. There isn't much for me to critique in this chapter because everything was of an above-satisfactory level. Great job!

CHAPTER TWO

Another fabulous chapter! Let's get to an issue first, before I can give you my praise.

In the sentence "The irony of me- one of  God's most loved creations: the second human woman- sitting on the Throne of Hell is not lost one me", the excess of punctuation marks like the hyphen and colon create a confusion. To make the sentence sound shorter and less complicated, I would suggest rewriting it like "The irony of it- one of God's most loved creations, the second human and first woman sitting on the Throne of Hell- is not lost.

The line states that Eve was the second human woman. It has to be changed to state that she was the second human and first woman. A comma can make all the difference.

Apart from that, this was another well-written cha[ter. To bring in humour between such an intense storyline is difficult and you've done it effortlessly. 

CHAPTER THREE

The fact that the previous chapter ended with a dramatic line ushered in the perfect start to this next chapter.

It's hilarious how Eve experiences the feeling just like the girl described it. The humour just keeps improving and I'll say again that you've expertly mixed two feelings-humour and seriousness- that usually don't go together. The storyline here was interesting as usual and the story sounds unique and has a sense of freshness because it's been written in the present tense. Grammatically, this chapter was satisfactory and I enjoyed it just as much as the previous chapters.

CHAPTER FOUR

Great chapter name. Just like the other chapters, the chapter name is really appropriate and gives you a good idea about what's about to happen. This chapter was, again, hilarious. The dialogues were very well-written and seemed natural, like anybody on the road could say it and it would seem normal. The plot here was highly engaging too. The way you describe the surroundings has a lot of useful details so the reader can easily imagine the story playing in front of them. There's not much to critique here either. The grammar was perfect as well.

CHAPTER FIVE

A couple of grammatical errors corrected-

"...taking a sip from it, she faces the crowd, her back to the bar."

"...obsidian eyes have a hard glint to them."

"...and with that, all three of the baby Hydra's head simultaneously burp up a ball of fire."

Just a couple of issues with articles that can be fixed.

This was another great chapter I immensely enjoyed reading. The humour was even better and the drama actually started to build up a bit here. Apart from the errors in grammar, I can deem this chapter highly entertaining and well-written. Great going again!

FINAL NOTE

'Eve of Eden' is a book for anyone who wants to read something unique, get out of the mundane and cliched ways of writing and have a good read. The parts I have read so far are near perfect and the book deserves those 900+ views and much more.