By TwistedNym

BOOK COVER

Great job on the cover first. It looks very mystical and has an aura of art around it. It immediately draws attention because of its quiet, sophisticated appearance, unlike other book covers that scream for attention. I noticed that you stated the cover was temporary. A bit of advice- DON'T CHANGE IT! It looks really cool and attractive and adds a bit of mystery to the story. I would also suggest that the name of the author be made a little darker and clearer because, in the desktop view, the author's name isn't clear.

CHAPTER ONE

Beautiful opening. I absolutely love the poetic feel those opening lines give to the chapter. The images projected are very vivid and the reader can visualise those images very clearly due to the great descriptions. A couple of grammatical errors I found and corrected-

"I have seen the bright rain-drenched forests..." (the hyphen has been omitted)

"...nothing comes close to the first time you look at (not 'to') the wide, open..."

A slight confusion I had towards the end of the chapter- it's mentioned that the passage is an excerpt from a book. This can be slightly confusing to readers because they might not know whether it's a part of your book or a part of another book.

But apart from that, I loved this chapter.

CHAPTER TWO

Again, a great beginning. The visuals you project in the story are very vivid and it's not hard to imagine the scene. The name 'Flen Lachlann' is pretty unique and I always admire an author who plays around with new names.

In the sentence "The wings flap in the high two suns...", the clarity is lost. What is the meaning of 'two suns'?
But later we find out that there are indeed two suns so I wouldn't call that a big confusion.

The fact that the chapter has been written in the present tense brings a fresh perspective to the reader's mind, moving away from cliched writing methods of following past tense.

A correction to be made- a person practising necromancy is termed as a 'necromancer' and not a 'necromant'.

The storyline is very engaging and Flen Lachlann gives me an impression of a pirate. I like how the roads with the wagons and carts have been described and how her thoughts and feelings are shown in detail. There is also a slight element of humour when she talks about the nobility.

CHAPTER THREE

Now I realise how organised and efficient it is to divide chapters and name them according to who the chapter is about.

The song of the land, the song of the water and Niko Beldradi's emotions have all been extremely well-written about. Again, you succeed in bringing out visuals in the reader's mind. The narration is poetic to an extent and as I said earlier, the present tense makes all the difference. There weren't any noticeable grammatical errors either and it was a great chapter. It really got me hooked on!

CHAPTER FOUR

A new person is introduced here and the way the worlds of the previous Beldradi and Naum cross is fascinating to read about. The 'feathers' of Norra confused me at first but then there was a detailed explanation, so again, no detail has been missed.

The beginning of the chapter, where the needle and thread have been described, is more poetic than ever. You give two seemingly unimportant items a life of their own. This chapter was also beautifully written. A corrected error- "...bigger in her vine-covered (not 'cowered') dress than she truly is..."

This was the best chapter so far for me. The writing improves part after part.

CHAPTER FIVE

Another character emerges! The transition from person to person in different chapters has been done smoothly and there is a calm flow of writing.

In the sentences "The boy has long fallen into....dust on his tongue", there is a slight confusion. When you talk about Dru first, the line about the boy seems sudden and jerky. The boy hasn't bee mentioned before so if it is a detail of not much importance, 'the' boy has to be changed to 'a' boy.

The introduction of Dru is very descriptive again and the writing style of creating images has maintained its quality.

FINAL NOTE

'One Of A Kind' is a very interesting book about four different people from different backgrounds and how their lives meet. It is entertaining to read, owing to the smooth writing, the poetic narration and the unique method of writing in present tense. If you are looking for an engrossing and highly interesting book to read, 'One Of A Kind' is a great book. I'm sure there are tons of people out there who would love this book and read it over and over again.