Betrayal for love by Kadian Erskine kadian_erskine

Reviewed by judithprieto2020

*Title*
The title got me attracted to open the book. It had this subtle meaning attached to it that would make you wanna know who betrayed who and for what cause was the betrayal. Good title.

*Cover/Blurb*
The cover did no justice to the book and I think you could work more on it. I mean, that book is a very hot one with explicitly written smut, therefore, I think the cover should depict that, well to some extent. Also, the blurb was good, but I think you may the last few lines at the end as the first one the readers will read when they go through the blurb. I mean that part where you wrote "can you make love to me?" "I don't make love, I fuck hard!" Yeah, that part should be first I think.

*Character Development*
The characters were well developed. The necessary and rightful emotions were given to the characters and the way you introduced all the characters in the book was really good.

*Pace of story*
The pace was just as steady and smooth as necessary. The relationship between Megan Francis and Anthony Rhones were not fast-paced, the death of Sashane Helgins was not as well fast-paced, blah blah blah, it was all perfect.

*Plot*
The plot was really fascinating. I was going to read only a few chapters for the purpose of reviewing, but I got so engrossed with the book that I read every chapter till the end. I love the relationship between Anthony and Megan and if you ask me, i'd just say Stevie is just a loser.
The matured scenes were excellent and *whispers* I was wet all through the scene, lol. I love how smooth everything was and I was more than stunned to know about Helgins' death. In fact, I had first believed that Anthony did kill her when he told Megan he had told Jace to take care of her. Natalie, Natalie is more than a bitch and the badass part of me didn't want her to just die. I wanted her to suffer a little before she died. She's such a low-life bitch.
In summary, all I'm saying is that I love the plot a lot than I was so hooked to the point that I finished the whole book within few hours.

*Description*
You did tried with the description and how intense you wrote everything. It made me feel like I was there with the characters or perhaps I could see everything they were doing. Especially the mature scenes, I had this picture in my head that I envisioned how huge Anthony's dick was when Natalie deep throat. Haha

*Grammar*
There was a terrible issue I had here. The grammar was off-putting. It disturbed the flow of the book a lot that the only was I was able to enjoy the amazing story was adding imaginary correct words to replace the wrong ones. The first ten chapters or so was bad(i'm being honest) The paragraphing, the punctuations and the grammar. I noticed you made some changes in the following chapters. These were a few mistakes that I noticed;
-You started the names with small letters e.g megan instead of Megan, god instead of God, anthony instead of Anthony...
-You didn't break the paragraphs down. The whole sentences were piled up in just one paragraph.
-You used dont instead of don't, wont instead of won't, wouldnt instead of wouldn't...
There were other misspelled words but I can't point it all out. If you edit the book, I'm sure you'll get to correct most mistakes since the book is a complete book. I have always recommended this app "Grammarly" it's a very good app that will help out in the course of editing.

*Additional note*
I love the story a lot and since the book two is out, i'd just continue reading. Also, I live the Jamaican Creole and I hope you can teach me some *wink wink*