Author: @Piggy-chan01

Cover:

The cover is nice, but that's about it. The title is difficult to read, the red used blurs. Perhaps using another colour and font may work wonders.

Blurb:

Pretty nice blurb, I enjoyed it while reading it, but it does not linger.

Prologue:

The first three paragraphs of the prologue make up for the cover and the blurb, especially the first paragraph which leaves you wide-eyed. It's visual with a nice pinch of morbid and sad.

'Somehow, the ends of his long silver hair is visible beneath his large cloak'. I don't particularly enjoy the vagueness of 'somehow', I want to know how the strands of silver (love this) hair is visible.

We come to the second figure (the woman). 'Her physical structure is screaming...', 'her body is screaming...' too much screaming going on and I felt it took away from the paragraphs. I think another word here would give this paragraph more oomph. At the end of this paragraph, you state that 'It's as though she doesn't even exist', this contradicts with the 'screaming' and the 'walking like royalty'. By you saying those things, I felt as though the woman was really visible, then you go and take that away... It's contradicting like I said before, and not in a fun way. If you want to make her an enigma (I like enigmas), then make me feel like she's a mystery from the start.

I like the Greek you added, but you should have a mention of what it means in English, too, or else your non-Greek speaking readers may get confused. Also, this makes me think that these folks are a) of Greek decent b) taught by a Greek mentor/master c) the story takes place in Greece (which I will want you, as the writer, to show me later on in the story).

The words in bold detract me, you don't need to have your conversations in bold.

A few grammar mistakes, but nothing tragic (though they should be fixed).

It was an enjoyable read.

Good luck, darkling!