Prisoners of Love by MiniMoxx

Reviewer: writes_love01

This was a really great book with many twists and I loved it actually even when I am a person who doesn't find romance between straight people that much interesting. But, I totally loved it, but there are a few things for me to say. So, here it goes

Cover: 4
I totally loved the cover and the way it represented the content. But, maybe you can change the color of the text to something even more golden and not just a hint of yellow and white. Just a suggestion!

Title: 5

The title was chef's kiss. I really loved the way it connected with the book and the way it replicated the story's some parts like how Aiden is in the prison and his brother with Juniper.

Blurb- 8

The blurb could be a bit more longer or maybe you can try to give some more information like adding a doubt of herself feeling in between Aiden and Ethan. But just a bit of extra information would be enough to catch people's attention more. Amnesia is a topic or kind of plot that's been in use in Wattpad's stories a lot and I personally felt a bit hesitant when I first read the amnesia part. It is just my personal opinion, so....

Plot- 18

As I said earlier, amnesia is kind of like an overused topic, but you've made good use of it. I was a bit uninterested in the beginning, but later it felt good. The way you disclosed every secret chapter by chapter and also made sudden twists in between the story was great. Maybe you could've taken a while in between the character to fall in love with. Like, Ethen is just a friend to Juniper and also she already has got feelings for Mr. A and also she does have amnesia which erases the whole part where she fell in love with Ethen. But, also in another way it makes too. Just maybe you could've elongated their path to being together. Apart from this, I loved the way you made the changes in the story from a friend to her "ex's brother who loves her"
You have done a great job but maybe you could've taken small leaps while going into their relationship. But, otherwise, it is totally magnificent!

Character Development- 7

The characters were really good, but just that they just did things rapidly and also that there were moments when I felt the story's and the character's pace was a bit too rapid and quick. You can try to make it go slowly which will try to make the reader hooked onto the book. Just a tiny suggestion since the characters went too fast and also with Aiden. He just fell in love with a stranger so soon which is kind of hard to believe, but since he's alone, maybe, but it felt kind of a bit unrealistic to me.

Originality- 4

A point less because I couldn't feel the love in between the characters and you can try to develop there. Just giving time between the characters can bring up some originality and also in Aiden.

Grammar/Spelling- 19

There were tiny mistakes here and there, but they were avoidable in a way. I totally liked it and it was just perfect! I mostly feel terrible when I read books with grammar mistakes and spelling errors, but I found barely any here! But, there too I found a mistake. You can try to reduce the number of times you use a particular word in one sentence or paragraph. And I had seen the word "hell" a lot that it felt a bit awkward.

Style- 9

The style of your writing is really good and I appreciate it. It was just perfect, except for the pace in your writing. You can slow the characters' feelings for others down and also try to bring their feelings not just through talking, but also showing. You've done that, but sometimes, you've missed it too.

Engagement- 10

I was totally engaged within the book and I really loved it tho. It felt really interesting to find out the memories of Juniper and that was enough lol.

Presentation- 4

You can try to write down the dates or time rather than just using it on the banners. I'd mostly prefer you to write them in the beginning and not just in the graphic since it'll be easier for the reader!

Total: 88

Overall, I loved your book and yes, your book did have it's own blows, but you can try to improve them a bit more! By the way, I haven't read the whole story, but only till the 10th chapter. I don't know who is going to get June, but I do feel that the story is truly amazing and that it is a very interesting one. Keep going and your works are totally awesome.

Yours,

MJ

This was done so I can relate it to your story XD