Reviewer: therosepoetk

The Gunner and the Florist by Crystallia (CrystalCallistral)

I like your title, although it’s not the most authentic I’ve ever heard. Don’t get me wrong, I really like it, but I think it sounds more similar to “Guns and Roses” than anything else. I know it’s your story, so you can choose what to do with the title. But it is, along with the stunning cover, relative to the story - so that’s great. I feel that the blurb could use some work, as you did introduce the two different sides of the perspectives that you’re exploring, much a little grammatical work could be done. But I love how you chose an opening where it just introduced the characters in an everyday life scenario, which I thought was cool. Even the part where someone said, “How do you passively-aggressively tell someone to f*ck off in flowers” was very snarky, but isn’t it from a dialogue prompt? I’m not saying that your dialogue is weak, but if you’re using a prompt, you might want to try your best to mask it. I like the direction the plot is going so far, so I really do see the emotional appeal of your story and where it could go. The characters all seem very interesting, and I like how their relationships right now are very dynamic and open to change. Superb work. The flow is also great, as well as your grammar, which is flawless. Overall, I really like your story, and I’m looking forward to where it’s heading. Keep up the smashing work Crystal!