Written by: astrophiiles

Reviewer: AnatsukiAuthor

Engagement 4/5

The book is very engaging. You have a brilliant way of creating suspense and building up the book. When something happens I'm unable to put the book down and look away, because I have an urge to know exactly what's happening next. I love that you're able to do that and it's very important. You've made it so that there's never a dull moment in your work.

Clarity 3.5/5

I want to say a four, but you use a lot of really big words in your writing. I know that this is generally a good thing, but I want to be able to understand what I'm reading without needing to google a word every so often. Besides that, I know exactly what's happening in the story and the book is perfectly clear, only breaking the clarity every once in a while. Just remember to cut back on some of the bigger words, a unique word placed here and there isn't bad, but not all throughout the book. 

Timeline 5/5

The timeline seems to be in the middle ages, and you've shown that brilliantly. You've combined fantasy with a real era in history and made it fictional yet it feels real. You used the elements from that timeline and incorporated them into the environment. This allows me to clearly visualize the book in that timeline.

Writing Style 4/5

You have a very creative and descriptive writing style. You know exactly how to use imagery to give the reader a good visualization or idea of what's happening in the story. When I read your book, it's almost like watching a movie take place through words. You know exactly what's happening and perfectly put it into words.

Characters 4/5

Adelia is a very well-written character. She's smart, cautious, and seems to second guess herself sometimes. I've only made it to 003 The Emporer, (By the way, I love that you used tarot card names for your chapters, I love astrology so I was a little excited when I saw it.) so I only know of Adelia, Eleanor, and Emilio.

Eleanor seems to have more to her than she shows and hasn't shown a lot of her personality, but I do know that she knows how to hold a grudge. She seems to be the type that does whatever she can to survive. I do like her character and so far she's a favorite of mine.

Emilio seems to be a little bit manipulative, at least that's what I saw when I first met him. He knows how to get a person to trust him. I believe that he'll probably take even more of an antagonistic turn than he already has, but those are just my theories.

Plot 4/5

The plot is still being formed and so far it seems that the suspense is still being built up. Where I left off I was at a well-placed cliffhanger, and I can't wait to read the next chapter. The plot is clearly there so far, and I'm excited to see how it lays out.

My overall rating is a 4/5, and it certainly deserves it. Your book is full of potential and I hope you take this review to help you continue your writing journey. I love how you've portrayed your book, and I can't wait to see it grow.