The Heart of Music written by: BlakePR5

Reviewer: AnatsukiAuthor

Clarity 2.5 of 5

I'm judging Clarity first because it leaks out into my Engagement. There were many parts of the book that were kind of vague for me. I didn't really know what was happening until I reread the chapter, but this wasn't throughout the whole book. I could understand it for the most part, but it could have been written a little more clearly. Of course, some of this could be on purpose so it's clearly explained further in the book, but when it comes to the present, I would prefer a little bit more detail, so I can get a better picture ad understanding in my mind.

Engagement 4 of 5

The book itself is pretty interesting, and I did enjoy reading it, though the problem with the Clarity did mess me up a bit. When reading a book, you want to know exactly what's happening, if you can't understand it then you eventually lose interest. Of course, this doesn't ruin how much I enjoyed reading your book. I do enjoy it and hope to see more chapters out soon.

Timeline 4 of 5

The timeline wasn't completely clear, but I'm assuming the book is written in the future. Seeing as it's the future, I can't really judge it based on accuracy, but it does make sense, which is important. I like the idea of adding four individual sectors, it was a very smart idea. It adds more suspense to the book in case of any wars breaking out between sectors.

Writing Style 3 of 5

Your writing style has a beautiful way of being poetic, I enjoy seeing the different poem like metaphors you add to your story.  I hope that this stays throughout the chapters. I also, again, recommend that you use more detail in your writing. What I mean is, in what's happening, not the environment, you've done a beautiful job in portraying what Ara sees around her, but your a lot less detailed in what's happening right in front of her. This improves as the book goes and, and I'm able to understand what's happening in the story as I continue to read it. I also wish the chapters were a little bit longer. The usual range of words for a nicely lengthed chapter is 1000 to 1300 words. If you don't think you're able to write that many words, that's beyond okay, it's just a small suggestion

Characters 3.5 of 5

Only two characters are made clear, Jack and Ara. Jack's character has a unique way of communicating, though I have a question. Was Jack born deaf, or did he lose his hearing overtime? For him to speak so intricately, I have to assume that it happened over time, since being born deaf does make it so that a person has to take even longer to learn to speak than the average person. Of course, this may be cleared up later in the book, but this is just based on my current information.

Ara, who has a beautiful name by the way, is a very unique character. I wish I knew a bit more about her, but of course, that's probably due to you revealing more information further in the book. It's made unclear when, nor why, she became mute. Also, this characteristic is not seen in most books, not any other, characters, so this only adds to her uniqueness.

Other characters in the book are not named nor made clear if they will return further into the book. The characters' ages aren't available to the reader yet, so this limits what I'm able to judge, but also gives the reader's imagination to wander farther into the book.

Plot 3 of 5

I can't rate the plot very high, nor low, due to my limited knowledge of the book. The book is only at the beginning, and the chapters are quite short, so not much is very clear to me on the plot, though I have high hopes for this book, and everything so far looks wonderful, and beautiful.

An overall rating of the book would be 20 of 30 points, if this rating disappoints you, don't worry. I still love your book and would be happy to help point you in the right direction Your book is only just beginning, so it can change as you go along. Good luck on your writing journey!

This was meant to be published at an earlier time, though when reviewed the reviewer had accidentally drafted it. I apologize for the delay.