Reviewer: Unloveable_Night

Story by LilPegz19

Beyond the barrier

Title 10/10
-   It works well inside of the story, and also the title is very aesthetically uniquely to read.

Cover 7/10
- the cover is nice and the fonts too but some how it doesn’t connect with the title nor the story. But it’s kinda fine tho, cause I can see there is a princess on the cover right? So it makes sense as the story is all about kingdoms and some prince/princesses like that. So good job! The cover is little bit aesthetic in my opinion. I like the fonts and the way they’ve placed.

Blurb: 15/15
- the blurb gives me excitement! The author did a great job to give attractions to the readers. It’s so describable and understanding blurb. It’s way more intriguing to a reader and it gives curiousity to the reader to make it read more and find out what’s behind in this masterpiece story. This will make your readers wonder and it won’t throw off the rhythm of your blurb either. Its absolutely made me want to read your story. I actually really like the blurb you’ve written because it gives the basic background.

Storyline: 15/15
- first of all, The story starts off with a really good scene, my mind was already imagining some things that happened on that story. I like the opening scene as I can see your writing style is indeed cool. After two paragraphs of reading, I was already exciting to read your story more! and did not want to put it down. The plot of this story is just fabulous, it’s so exciting, and engaging. The pacing of this story is immaculate. There are multiple fast-paced moments that are very masterfully written.

Characters: 10/10
-  first of all, damn! I like your character/s names, it’s so aesthetic to read and it gives me old vibes around 80s nor 90s? But so then Characters were developed and portrayed well in the story. All of them were very describable realistic, and some were relatable. But your characters should be further developed as they are often so realistic and frequently offer a lot of advice to the great main characters, but they were so indeed unique kind of characters.

Grammar and punctuation: 13/15
- I didn’t found any much grammar errors, and I also didn't find any typos, which is a good thing because many writers make this mistake, well everyone makes mistake and that’s fine. But only one thing that you must check your commas carefully. Some of your commas are so many that can’t fit on the sentence and make it uncomfortable.

Enjoyment: 10/10
- I have nothing to say about this, but yeah I did enjoyed your wonderful masterpiece story, Even it’s still ongoing. And I would love to read it more!

Overall 14/15
- I read the whole book even though its just a 15+ chapters and it’s so exciting to read the next chapter of it. The reader is enthralled by the end of every chapter in your book. You have described every single moment in such an amazing way that makes it easier for the readers to feel every single moment of it. I really loved the way it’s written, and described every action of the story. You have a potential!

Total: 94