Reviewer: xFall3nang3lx

A Second Chance by xxuglylovexx

I enjoyed reading your book xxuglylovexx, I can’t believe that you’ve only just started writing it, I can’t wait to be able to read more.

Cover:
First of all, I like how you just made it simple instead of making it unnecessarily over the top or complicated I may be completely wrong here but I noticed that you covered up the brand of the shirt as well, I think you should actually try to cover it fully to make sure there aren’t any traces of it, however this was subtle, so well done on that.

Description:
For me the lines “one of my many exes”, should have the word ‘is’ before ‘one’ as I feel like it’ll make more sense with the next sentence. Another sentence i feel that could use a bit of tweaking is “as her ex Tyler Gray is a leader of a new band” i think you should just get rid of the ‘as’ (this is just what I think). Other than that, great blurb, it’s got all the necessities for one.

Storyline:
The gist of the storyline is that Addison Pitt has to do this thing called “Boyfriend’s Day” which is where people are matched up to be couples and you have to make the guy feel like a real boyfriend, the reason for this is to teach some love apparently, at first Addison refused to do it but had no choice and ended up being paired with a guy named Tyler Gray who is also her ex as well, so it may be a bit sealants. I like how you write in different a characters’s POV instead of it just being one so we can be able to get to know more about the different characters/ their backstories and what’s been happening with them that we wouldn’t be able to know.

Characters:
Addison seems to be a bit of a rebel and she only just joined her current school last year and already hates a lot of people, which honestly is the same with me, it’s a bit upsetting that she can’t remember who Tyler is. It’s fair to say that Tyler has changed a lot from a curly fair haired guy with braces to a tattooed man that’s intimidating, Tyler’s home life seems to be hard so I feel sorry about that and I think I may be wrong here but I think Tyler has been to jail before but I don’t know what crime he has committed, I can’t wait to see the relationship between these two grow.

Grammar/Spelling:
I noticed that there were some places where you’re missing words such as in chapter 1 in the line “she’s the only person at knows me.” You’re just missing the word “school” here, always be sure to proofread , however this is just a very small mistake and isn’t something that needs a lot of corrections on.

Engagement of the reader:
Even though you just started writing it, I think it’s pretty good. It’s got a good story plot and interesting characters as well, I can’t wait to see how you develop the story and where you take it from there, and I’m sure more people will start reading it soon!