Argent | Child of Storm & Arrow by ShyGuySamurai

Reviewer: xFall3nang3lx

I really enjoyed reading this story a lot by ShyGuySamurai, it’s a very good story, I really enjoyed the storyline, I hope you update it soon as I want to find out what happens next, but no rush take your time!

Cover:
A little detail I noticed is that there’s a light that goes through the centre of the cover which reminds me of a arrow which coincidentally goes through a strike of lightning which you normally associate with a thunderstorm hence the connection to Storm and Arrow and to go on further there’s a symbol that is in the middle of both of these things, which is the colour silver and that is why Argent means, and the fact that all of these things touch, kinda reminds me of a kinda family connection.

Description:
Nice use of a semi-colon instead of a conjunction, you mostly just see writers use full stops and the occasional commas for punctuation, also good use of a colon as well, I really like this blurb, you summarised the story without revealing too much of the storyline, I couldn’t find any mistakes at all, so you and alesha have done a very good job with the blurb, well done to both of you!!

Storyline:
I honestly love how much effort you put into this story, the fact that you drew a map and added so much detail to it as well is phenomenal. Also I like the inclusion of maths as well (Don’t worry I did the maths and it’s correct), I think this is a really promising storyline. I really like how you mention so many different mythical creatures so you kept true to the fantasy part of the story, and also the fact that they’re on a journey as well so you’ve also kept true to the adventure part, something I would like to see the story be told from different points of view i.e. from Argent’s point of view as I feel like it would really make the story more developed and make it more interesting to know other characters’ (besides Darin) feelings or thoughts on a matter, but other than that, this is a really good story so far.

Characters:
The relationship between Darin and Argent is honestly so sweet, even though they haven’t known each other for a long time, they care about each other so much, and I love that they’re such a class act together like they are so funny together, I also like how sassy Argent gets with Darin, but yet he trusts him so much seeing as he is the one who’s pretty much protecting him and keeping him alive, so Argent’s life is pretty much in Darin’s hands, I really like these characters, something I would like is to have physical descriptions of the characters, but this is just my opinion.

Grammar/Spelling:
There was just one little grammatical error which is in chapter 13, and it’s in the line “The swordsmen sputtered and coughed as the strong-smelling scent”, I think you should replace the ‘as’ with ‘at’, for me it would make much more sense. But other than this, you’ve done a very good job on the grammar/spelling part, so good job, well done!!

Engagement of the reader:
I honestly think that this book should have  more people reading it, it’s so good and it’s evident that the writer has put so much effort into this story, which I absolutely adore, keep going ok, you’ve done such a good job so far you can’t stop!