Broken by Areeba019

Reviewer: xFall3nang3lx

Thank you to Areeba019, for giving me such a great read, btw it’s such a really good story, you did a very good job well done!!

Cover:
The cover is good, I like the art, the girl in the picture reminds me of a porcelain doll, fragile and delicate. Now this is more of a me thing but I was wondering if maybe the girl in the picture could have more cracks to show how she’s really broken, and maybe you could add some blood smears on her as well, but this is just my personal preference, either way it’s still a really good cover.

Description:
The description is very well written, very detailed without revealing too much of the storyline. The only problem is that in the last sentence after the ellipsis, the word “is” doesn’t have a capital letter, another area with the same problem is in the first paragraph, line 2. The word while doesn’t have a capital letter as well, other than that it’s perfect.

Storyline:
The storyline is so gripping, I swear Morgan can never catch a break can she? However this means that Morgan always got something going on which means that the plot will never go down hill. Also the plot twist… I honestly didn’t see it coming… The complete utter betrayal, and now Morgan is on the run for being a apparent “murderer”, god this girl really can not catch a break, oh yeah… When Jess got hit by a car… Didn’t see that coming as well, you just keep surprising me, very very good storyline, can’t wait to read more of it!

Characters:
Abuse of any kind is something no one should ever have to go through, the way you portrayed the characters perfectly I.e. I would never have thought that Lydia was actually such a wicked girl, and i certainly did not think that she was actually capable of killing someone. The fact that Morgan was at her wit’s end and then just finally had enough and stood up for herself I find really admirable, she’s so strong to have been able to endure all this abuse for so long, but when that sense of pride had diminished I felt such sympathy as it felt like she was back at square 1, but yet when she got it back again I felt such a huge wave of pride wash over me. Good job on the character profiles very well done!!

Grammar/Spelling:
There are some minor little grammar errors such as at the beginning of sentences or when it’s someone’s name you sometimes forget to use a capital letter, an example of this is “ok let’s get going now. Come on jess”, you should proofread your work, but besides this your work is pretty much perfect, it’s just these little mistakes.

Engagement of Reader:
I gotta admit you did justice for my favourite genre, very good job you had me at ever word I on the edge of my seat. So… You gotta keep writing ok?