Fearless by ImagineWriter07

Reviewer: xFall3nang3lx

My book review of Fearless.
First of all, I would like to thank ImagineWriter07 for giving me he opportunity to review her amazing book! And I really recommend it.

Cover:
The cover… Where do I begin with it. I don’t know if you were aiming for this, but the way I see it, the picture and the title are linked together, the picture shows a clear picture of a girl feeling trapped whilst the title references to the picture as hope fading away of every escaping, which has something to do with your story, btw very very imaginative.

Storyline:
This is a very promising storyline so far I really like how detailed Kelsie’s escape was. I think that you should add in different point of views from different characters (e.g. Woody and Dr. Drake) to show different perspectives and thoughts and feelings. This is just a personal preference for me, but I think if you showed Kelsie having some flashbacks to being tortured by the experimenters and having her show some signs of distrust to people, it would add a lot to the storyline, as you would be able to write more about how Woody had to gain her trust and show that not every person is cruel and malicious, this would be such a huge build up of character development for Kelsie. This is a very good plot so far, I can’t wait to read more of it!

Characters:
I love Kelsie’s determination to escape after 6 years, I also love how she hasn’t given up hope. I think the fact that after being tortured for so long and yet still being kind and sweet, goes to show that what a strong character Kelsie is. I also love how Woody and Kelsie have some things in common (escaping from a place they hate), this shows very good character bonding and shows the start of a beautiful friendship (and potentially maybe something more wink ). I love the way woody thinks, putting rocket jets on a car (Genius!), also his caring nature is such a sweet attribute . I also like how you psychically describe the character I.e. Woody being 6 inches taller than Kelsie and many more. Something that I really hope you think about is having a description of the experimenters as we have never been told anything about their appearances at all, and how to Kelsie they would look like monsters in her mind.  Other than that really good characters!

Grammar/Spelling:
At the beginning of the first chapter, I think it would be more effective to use quotation marks when Kelsie says “Today is the day Kelsie. No more lab experiments, no more disgusting green dress, no more uncomfortable bed and itchy blanket, no more soggy mashed potatoes…” because I think it would be a massive impact on the reader to show Kelsie’s internal thoughts seeing as she’s a girl with no one to talk to but herself, another example of where I think quotation marks would be effective would be at the line “Come on Kelsie. The air vent is right there.” To make it more obvious when she’s talking to herself, I don’t think the line, “it’s for your freedom” could be in bold to show how important it is to Kelsie and that this is the key to getting everything she’s ever wanted. Besides all of this, it was pretty much word perfect.

Engagement of the reader:
Overall, I was pretty much sucked into the story because of how action packed it was. It’s a very good read, I’ve read all of the chapters you’ve posted so far and  you’ve done a very good job, keep it up!!