Genesis by marshaa1306

Reviewer: xFall3nang3lx

Well marshaa1306 this was a very good read, I enjoyed it immensely I can honestly tell you that I’ve never read a science fiction book like this before.

Cover:
I really like how you’ve included the dome in the background in the cover. Also I really like the reference of a desert in the cover  to your story because deserts are known for being empty and that people don’t really live there which is what ties it to your story as the people who live in the dome aren’t allowed in the outside world and that if there were things outside, that would tempt them to break the rules and escape which is probably why the One decided to build the dome in a desert as there would be nothing for miles. So that’s a cool connection.

Description:
Very descriptive, I like how even though it’s brief you’ve still managed to pack it full of information, however there is just one little mistake and it’s in the line “Kaze Alio lives in this way until, one night,” should be “Kaze Alio lived this way until one night,” it just had some tense problems and I felt that it didn’t make sense to put a comma before one and felt it made better sense after in my opinion. Other than this, you’ve written a perfect description, well done!!

Storyline: 
I love how you describe the setting, you make it so much more easier to imagine what the scent looks like, that’s a very good quality to a book. So, a little thing I noticed is that you like to end your chapters on cliffhangers which always makes me think’ “Noooo, I have to know what happens next”. I really like this storyline, and I swear .I’m sorry if this is picky of me but I would like to see some parts of the story be told from another character’s point of view, for example I would really like to see a flashback memory of Kaze’s mum from when she was still part of the dome and was close to the One.

Characters:
I swear Kaze can’t catch a break can he, I mean something pretty much always goes wrong for him, I mean he almost gets killed by a man with his evil rabbits (which by the way, very creative thinking, I would never think to add that) and his brother kissing the girl he likes, the utter betrayal, his brother dating his crush, still I’m happy that Kaze managed to find someone I really like how you give each character personalities of their own and their own little background stories and that they are their own person, that was a very nice touch.

Grammar/Spelling:
Something I really like about your writing is the fact that you continuously keep us on our toes and surprise us with plot twists and wondering what’s going to happen next, I couldn’t find any mistakes at all, it was word perfect, so really good job on this section!!

Engagement of the reader:
This was a very fast paced book and was such a good read, it never had a dull moment, I can’t wait for you to update it soon!!