The Sky Bandits- A Lands of Ralosia & Rannulo Story by Sanch250

Reviewer: xFall3nang3lx

A big thank you to Sanch250 for asking me to review his book, I enjoyed it immensely, it was such a good read, so once again thank you for that!

Cover:
I’m really into astrology so the cover is really beautiful to me, however I can’t help thinking that maybe you should put a title on it, because I feel like it looks a bit empty as the cover is the first thing someone would look at, a idea I had is that maybe you could spell the tile out in the sky by using stars, making it look like a constellation, it’s just a thought I had but other than that, I think it’s a good picture.

Description:
I just spotted one tiny little tense mistake and  it’s the line “If you’re interesting in the learning more about”  it should be ‘interested’ instead of ‘interesting’ but it’s just a minor problem. You’ve written a very good description it’s packed full of information yet not revealing too much of the story, and it still leaves the reader in the shadow of not knowing the full story, so good job, well done!!

Storyline:
I like how the beginning of the story was in the present time and then later for the majority of it, became about the past and was focused on the backstories of Diva and Vos and then once again returned back to the present. The story begins with Valr managing to destroy the barrier and reuniting with his parents, it brought a tear to my eye, family reunions are so sweet, and his parents later meeting Corri (who’s the daughter of Razan and Bonnie) also accompanied Valr to get to his parents, once they find out who she is they become noticeably irritated prodding Corri to ask what happened between the parents to cause a falling out, throughout the story Vos and Diva revealed that the other 4 couples managed to escape but left them behind, stuck in the horrible world. Also, I understand why Valr’s parents would hold a grudge against Lucar, Michta (who passed away), Bonnie (who’s no longer with Razan and left) and Razan for leaving them behind and that only they could escape, however reading on when I later found out that Razan was given a ultimatum by Bonnie and had to pick between his son and his friends and decided to choose his boy, that part I understand why he chose to go what he did, a parent will always do anything for their child to ensure that they have a good life, I’m glad later on the issues between Vos, Diva, Lucas and Razan are later resolved. I thought that this was a really good book and I really enjoyed the storyline!

Characters:
Thank you for the very clear descriptions of the appearances of the characters it makes it easier to imagine what they look like. Diva and Vos are good parents, it was a tough choice making the decision to let their son go and still having to be stuck in the Lands of Rannulo, but it was to give him a better chance at life, and that’s a great thing about parents, and that is that they just want what’s best for you and want to see you happy. It’s also obvious that they would hold a undying grudge against Razan, Lucar, Bonnie and Michta, seeing as they abandoned them behind, and that hate was very obvious when they started fighting with Lucar and Razan, however later on once they realise what actually happened they let it go and then all 4 of them once again became friends. I also respect Razan for despite having to make a tough choice he picked his child because at that moment he needed to put Aero’s needs above everything else, there wasn’t any other choice, you’ve created some really good characters, really well done!

Grammar/Spelling:
I’m happy to say that I haven’t found any mistakes at all, your story was pretty much word perfect, you’ve described what’s happening without droning on for too long and resulting in the reader losing interest, you’ve done a really good job on this section. You’re written a really good book, you should be really proud of yourself!

Engagement of the reader:
Overall, I though this was a good book, I was so immersed in the storyline. I will definitely be checking out the other books in the series, that’s how much I enjoyed the story, you’ve worked really hard on this story, you should be proud of yourself, like really proud!