Hello, everyone! Welcome to the results for the Best Pop Solo Performance category!

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For an additional prize of 10 votes on any book of your choice, guess the word count of the reviews (excluding the intro and outro notes; just the raw review word count).

Leave your guesses here --->

Please use only whole numbers and not ranges, so instead of 10k-11k, please put either 10k or 11k.

Last category, the word count was 22,195 words, or 65.1 pages. Screenshot below! The word and page count are in the bottom right hand corner.

That means the person who guessed it the closest was kemorgan65 with a guess of 18,000! Very close! Great guess! The second-closest was emilypoole977 with a guess of 12k. Both of these guesses were within a 10k range of the actual, so both get the votes!

To the two of you, I will be giving ten votes to any story of your choosing. You can tell me which book here or wherever you'd like on my profile.

Categories being judged: Rock, Disco, and Experimental

Categories to be judged soon: K-pop and Pop

Now, let's get into the results. There will be third place, second place, first place, and three honorable mentions (there was a tie). Congratulations, everyone!

3rd Place

Chimera by JikookCielo

Review:

Title: 10/10. The title is Chimera, which is a pretty title. The one word works for this story and rolls off the tongue well. I don't know, maybe it's just me, but Chimera just feels like... right for the story. I can't explain it in any super cool reviewer way, but there's just something about it that fits, y'know? Like it feels like this is the title and no other words can replace it. Does that make any sense? I don't know, but it just sets the vibes, that's all. It's capitalized and spelled correctly as well, adding the cherry on top. For those reasons, I have no criticisms of the title.

Blurb: 5/10. The blurb is as follows:

"Glitter, Glitter, Glitter. That's who I am, and that's who I always will be."
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Muffled cries. Glimmering clubs. Golden eyes. Secretive scars.

Gorgeous faces. Dancing wild. All the colors on my eyes.
***

Being the centre of attraction is more difficult than it's made to sound―especially when all of your worth is determined merely by your face and body.

The constant attention can make you lose your mind.

Quite literally too, sometimes.

The blurb has a neat element going on with the glitter part, as it fits in with the cover and sparks intrigue. It's a quotation, so likely an excerpt from the story, and I appreciate that you kept the quote small and nothing too distracting or long. For those reasons, I think the opening of the blurb is nice!

Suggestion-wise, I think you already know what I'm going to say, lol, as you spoke of it before: the blurb is very vague. I wouldn't really call this a blurb since it doesn't tell us what the story is. If anything, I know less about the story now than I did prior to clicking on it. I would recommend a more comprehensive description of what the story is actually going to be about. Based on solely the blurb, I can assume "Glitter" is like the main character and that dancing is part of it, and it'll touch on themes of being a body, though otherwise, there isn't much detail about what time period this takes place, who the concrete main character will be (since Glitter could also refer to other things), what the plot is, and why readers should read. There is a hint of that with the final line, though more stakes, adjectives, and vividness with how the story is described could be beneficial.

This part in particular is very vague:

Muffled cries. Glimmering clubs. Golden eyes. Secretive scars.

Gorgeous faces. Dancing wild. All the colors on my eyes.

Blurbs are meant to clearly tell the audience what the story is going to be about, so I recommend straying away from this trend of vague blurbs on Wattpad. It's okay to raise mystery and questions about what the story is going to be about, but there's a fine line between being mysterious and being vague.

Grammatically, it's pretty good, though the final line is awkward and could be rearranged. Consider: Sometimes, quite literally, too. How it is right now doesn't make much sense when it comes to the word order, hence why I recommend rearranging it so it's more natural. Otherwise, the grammar is pretty good.

Overall, there is potential with the blurb with a strong opening, though there could be more specifics given to the plot.

Cover: 10/10. The cover, like the title, is very good. It has a great color scheme and is eye-catching. It's not over-the-top or throws a lot of visual components onto the cover to try and shout at the readers; it's simple yet powerful with the cool color scheme and bright title card in the elegant font. I love the font and font color and thought it was a nice contrast that also wasn't intrusive and took away my attention from the beautiful picture. It's also high quality and doesn't have any blur to it in any areas. The placement of the author's name is also good and not intrusive. For those reasons, I have no criticisms for the cover!

Cohesion: 8/10. The cohesion between the title, blurb, and cover is pretty good. The cover matches with the first sentence of the blurb very well, and the title feels right for this piece, especially when you consider all the vastly different definitions the word chimera has. The color scheme being consistent also helps make the presentation of this piece feel cohesive.

Suggestion-wise, the blurb could just be tweaked to have a more clear throughline with the title and cover. The first line definitely feels very cohesive with the cover, though without knowing much of the plot, it's a bit tough to determine much beyond that.

Overall, the cohesion is pretty good and deserves a high score!

Additional Aesthetics: 7.5/10. The additional aesthetics present throughout the story are good! Organization-wise, the chapters were well-organized and made sense. I liked the chapter titles and how they felt like a dance, which makes sense considering what the story is about. I liked the character aesthetics having the dark backgrounds. The font used for spelling out their names was great, too, and it fit in with the general aesthetic of the story. Both character aesthetics fit in well and felt cohesive, and the same applies to the general organization of the book.

Suggestion-wise, just two small things. One is as much as AI art can be useful and fun to look at, I recommend being careful about what photos are chosen, as, for example, the picture of Jimin in the first chapter has six fingers, which kind of distracted me (five general fingers and a hidden thumb; the thumb behind the pole, two on the pole, one on his lips, and two below the lip finger also on the pole, making six total). It's not a big deal, but still something worth mentioning since the chapter images are aesthetics considered in this category. In general, it could also be beneficial to use less AI art, as almost every image in the story is AI (talking about the story images and even in the character aesthetics). I've had AI art as chapter banners before too (though I've strayed from that recently), so I'm not saying don't use them, but consider downsizing on them since, to put it frankly, AI art is honestly not that nice to look at. It's way too glossy and can pull me out of stories if used too much, hence why it could be worth considering for future works.

Another thing is again small where I felt the Jimin character aesthetic could have benefitted from the eye being purple instead of gold, since the rest of the three pictures on the aesthetic are darker, and two out of the three have those cool colors, so the sudden blast of a warm color was a bit contradictory to the rest of the color scheme, in my opinion.

Overall, the additional aesthetics were a nice touch I enjoyed, and I thought everything was well-organized, too!

Total: 40.5/50.

Album Scorecard:

2nd Place

The Last Prewett by Dark_Ghostie

Review:

Title: 9/10. The title is The Last Prewett, which inspires intrigue, is spelled & capitalized correctly, and ties into the story well. It's cohesive with the blurb (will get into the cohesion more later, though) and makes perfect sense for the story. The only minor thing is I'm not a huge fan of the usage of alternative font for the title. I say this because it makes the book less accessible (it's difficult for screen readers to read) and doesn't really add much aesthetically anyway, in my opinion, so I typically recommend using standard font or using special font and having standard in brackets. Though, that said, I don't think it's worth taking off much for, especially considering that's more of a personal preference than anything, and I still like the title. All in all, it's a good title that works for this story!

Blurb: 7/10. As for the blurb, this is the blurb:

Aila Prewett is the only daughter of Fabian Prewett, born to him by a Veela during the First Wizarding War. Both her parents were killed by Voldemort, leaving her in the care of the Weasleys.

As the Triwizard Tournament is held once again, Aila's best friend, Cedric Diggory, is chosen as one of Hogwarts' champions. Tensions rise as rumours spread and their love story takes a darker turn as a second war threatens the fragile peace in the Wizarding World.

The blurb is, for the most part, grammatically correct. The only thing is I would recommend a comma after "spread" and before "and" since you're introducing a new subject in the second clause, so a comma could be beneficial for the flow and grammatical structure. But otherwise, the grammar is very good. Everything is spelled correctly, making for an easy to understand read!

Suggestion-wise, just two things. One is consider tweaking the wording of "is held" in the second paragraph simply because it's passive. Nothing inherently wrong with passive language, though in a blurb, I recommend using as little of it as you can to amp up the stakes and feel more direct/exciting. Consider another, stronger verb, like "commences" to eliminate this passivity.

The second thing is the blurb could benefit from being more dramatic. Everything is stated to us rather matter-of-factly, and some more adjectives and adrenaline in the blurb could be beneficial. You do a good job establishing who the two main characters will be, the timeline within the Harry Potter universe, and the general plot albeit a bit loosely, though some more flair and cinematic sentences could make it stand out more.

Overall, the core elements of the narrative are established through this blurb, and the SPAG is very solid, though there could be more excitement added to the blurb.

Cover: 8/10. This is a great cover! I love the background image and how it so clearly establishes Harry Potter vibes, but even beyond that, there's something about that image that's comforting and warm, and it caught my eye immediately. I love the art style and how you take it up a notch by adding other little elements to the picture, like the red wand in your banners being on the cover behind the title card. The little splashes of red on this cover were a great touch to make the cover feel well-rounded and interesting to look at without becoming too much. I also thought it was a good choice to make the text gold and white, as it provided a small contrast without being too conflicting with the established color scheme.

Suggestion-wise, only two things. One is I felt the positioning of the title and subtitle could be tweaked since the title and subtitle feel very spaced out from each other. Increasing the font size of The Last Prewett might do the trick without any additional movements needing to be made (since the title is a tad small on the cover). Another thing is I felt the font for the title could have been played with a little more. The Harry Potter book covers are known for their unique art style and, more specifically, font style. The fonts used there became iconic and recognizable to most people, even those not too familiar with the franchise. Playing around with the font more could be beneficial to further capture that Harry Potter feel.

Overall, the cover is very good and does a great job establishing the atmosphere of the Harry Potter universe!

Cohesion: 10/10. The title, blurb, and cover are all very cohesive and feel like they bounce off each other well. The cover perfectly captures the Hogwarts feel and puts the reader in a Harry Potter mood. The title feels Harry Potter-esque, if that makes sense. Maybe it's just me, but The Last Prewett kinda just feels Harry Potter, y'know? But that aside, those two elements bounce off each other well and lead into the blurb, which ties it all together. Everything feels cohesive and like they're converging to tell the tale of The Last Prewett, so for those reasons, I have no critiques for the story's cohesion!

Additional Aesthetics: 7.5/10. When it comes to the aesthetics and organization, I'd say they're both pretty good! I liked the way the chapters were organized and felt you did a good job making them stand out. I don't mind alternative font for chapter titles, really just book titles, so I didn't mind seeing that here, too. The way it's organized in the chapter list is fun to look at, so good job with that.

The aesthetics themselves are also good! I liked the banners and the addition of the character aesthetics. I like the red theme you have going on with the banners, and I felt they had a nice charm to them. The pictures you chose for all the character aesthetics were high quality, making them feel cohesive.

Suggestion-wise, not too much. I liked the character aesthetics a lot, so this is a small thing, but it could be interesting if instead of the white slab and black text to say their names, it matched the color scheme you had, so maybe just blue for Ravenclaw and the black (or white, depending on which one stands out more) font color. For example, Viktor's was great! I loved how it stayed black like the border of the aesthetic and had white font. So that's just a small thing, but otherwise, the character aesthetics were great.

The banners I also enjoy, so this is just another small thing and nothing crazy. It could be beneficial to increase the size of the wand on the banners (with just the wand) by a bit. Maybe it looks bigger on phone, though on laptop and tablet, it looks a bit small and hard to see at times. Not a big deal since I still like the wand banners and think they're a nice touch, but still something worth mentioning.

Overall, the additional aesthetics are great and were well-made, and the chapters were all well-organized.

Total: 41.5/50.

Album Scorecard:

1st Place

Blissful Misery by HollyShmit

Review:

Title: 10/10. The title is Blissful Misery, which is a great title! It's two words, which works perfectly for what the story is about. It's cohesive with the blurb, cover, and general story idea, but I'll get into that more later. It's spelled & capitalized correctly according to Chicago guidelines, which is, of course, a very good trait. It's also an interesting title that rolls off the tongue well and is eye-catching. For those reasons, I have no critiques of the title!

Blurb: 10/10. This is exactly what a blurb should be. Not only is it free of SPAG errors, but it also actually makes me want to read the story. I'm so tired of this trend of having extremely vague blurbs or just one lines as blurbs, as I read blurbs so I can know what the story is about, not to be even more confused than when I first initially clicked on the work. Here, you're clear about where the book is going to go without being over-the-top or spoiling too much. The language is clear (and, again, error-free) and does its job to amp up the stakes and answer the most important question: why should we care? You give us plenty of reasons to care/read. I actually want to read the story after looking at the blurb, which is rare for me since so many blurbs are just one or two vague lines and/or are confusing.

This blurb is polished, unique, and sets the stakes without giving too much away. It has a nice opening line that hooks the reader right away, too. I also appreciated that you included the tropes afterward, as that was a great touch that gave the blurb another layer. All in all, it's a great blurb I can tell you put time in to, and I appreciate the effort you took to not only make this blurb interesting but also to keep it grammatically clean.

Cover: 10/10. The cover, like the title and blurb, is polished. I'll say it again in the additional aesthetics section, but I love the font you've chosen for this story, especially the red text with that specific font. I like how the cover doesn't show the woman's eyes, and also how high-quality the image is. There's not a single visible pixel on that image, and the font is the same way where it's all crystal clear and matches the tone of the story. I also think the font size works well. So many covers on Wattpad feel like the font size is too small (though, to be fair, that could also be attributed to the fact that covers are smaller on Wattpad than on physical books), so it was good to see a clear, large enough font. All in all, this is a great cover that sets the tone for the story while also having clear font and high quality materials.

Cohesion: 10/10. There is clear cohesion between the title, blurb, and cover. Every element blends together to make one coherent book. I can tell what the story is going to be about clearly from the blurb, and the title and cover reinforce that. Nothing feels out of place or like it contradicts anything. Every element shows me more and more about what I'm about to experience, making for great presentation that hooked me in. It's also the cherry on top that the grammatical quality of everything is high, making the sentences in the blurb feel cohesive to each other. All in all, this work had amazing presentation that made me interested in reading the book!

Additional Aesthetics: 8.5/10. The additional aesthetics in here are awesome, same with the organization of everything! The chapters are organized well and don't have any obvious formatting issues. The sentences and paragraphs look to flow smoothly and be easy on the eyes, making for high readability.

As for the aesthetics, they match with the cover's style, making everything feel cohesive. I loved the banners and how they were simplistic with no crazy visuals, yet they fit so well. I thought the polaroids were interesting, too, and like with everything, I loved the font you used to bring those photos to life.

The pictures in the chapters themselves were also great, and I particularly liked chapter 2's picture with the knife going through the 2. I can tell you put a lot of thought into each image, and I appreciate how you changed the images up and put a crap ton of effort into them. I respect the effort and enjoyed all of them!

The only suggestion I have is while the anime aesthetic was nicely made, it felt a bit inconsistent with the rest of the art style. It's a very drastically different art style, so seeing that shocked me a little, at least when compared to the rest of the art style you had going. They're still nice, just didn't feel as cohesive as the rest, that's all. That's not a big deal, though, and that, of course, could also just be a personal preference.

Overall, the additional aesthetics were amazing, and I thought the book was well-organized from a technical standpoint as well!

Total: 48.5/50.

Album Scorecard:

Honorable Mention

Golden Sunlight by Naume07

Review:

Title: 10/10. The title is Golden Sunlight, which is a good title. It caught my eye and is capitalized & spelled correctly. Sunlight is golden, so it's quite literal, but that when combined with the intriguing gold and black color scheme of the cover made the title pop and feel like there's a deeper meaning hiding beneath the surface. Golden Sunlight... what else could that mean? It inspires intrigue because it feels like there's more to the story, and it's also cohesive with the cover, which I'll go over in the cohesion section. Overall, this is a good title that caught my eye!

Blurb: 6/10. The blurb is as follows:

Static Noise.
Click.
"Is it on?
Okay, umm this is Naomi. Hi, I guess. For some reason I was voted as the one who had to welcome you. To be honest, I think fraud was at play but who am I to make such claims. Anywho, welcome to messed up Earth! I mean, future Earth! What was that saying again? The future is great? ...Yeah they should update it.

Oh and before you come in, I just have one question for you: Are you scared of becoming a slave to freedom?"

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As a 17 year old girl whose mother abused her, Naomi has never known what freedom is, only dreamt of it. But now it's her only constant thought. For her, freedom slowly becomes a drug, something she only gets a taste of when she fights for it.

When acting freely and showing even the slightest bit of defiance makes you a target and having dreams and willpower lands you in a white lab room to be experimented on, you might just find yourself clawing at the feet of sanity.

Naomi lives in Sector One of the Terra Alliance. A place created after the Earth became unstable due to the numerous wars between Alliances.

Although it's meant to be a haven it quickly becomes the beginning of a nightmare for Naomi. As she is taken from the clutches of her mother and thrown into a cold new Sector. An unknown Sector. And she's not the only one. A large number of other teenagers are thrown into this undocumented place.

Needles. Classrooms. Weapons. Violence. Laughing. Teasing. Blood.

A weird combination. But when some teens become deranged, while others disappear, a couple go into coma & a handful experience their eyes changing colour. You'd also describe the new sector with a handful of weird words.

With all of this happening in the new Sector, the rest of the world is forced into an evolution. The already unstable Earth becomes catastrophic.

And Naomis' already messed up story becomes a catastrophe for the history books.

The blurb is pretty clear about who the main character is (Naomi) and what the story is going to be about, which is good. Many blurbs on Wattpad are vague and don't provide any plot information, so I'm glad you gave this blurb clarity with what the plot is going to be about! It's also an interesting plot, so that naturally elevates the blurb, too.

Suggestion-wise, my main suggestion is to consider trimming this blurb, as it's very long. As a general rule of thumb, I would recommend making your blurbs no more than a max of 250 words. This one is 336. 150-250 words is the recommended range for blurbs, and here, we're getting a lot of information. When you're writing a blurb, consider the information that the readers have to know in order to want to read the story and trim anything else not 100% needed.

For example: When acting freely and showing even the slightest bit of defiance makes you a target and having dreams and willpower lands you in a white lab room to be experimented on, you might just find yourself clawing at the feet of sanity.

Do we need this part? It's pretty clear based on the excerpt and beginning of the blurb that freedom is restricted. It's a fine enough paragraph that says a lot about the world, but is it absolutely needed? I don't know the answer to that question. Only you as the author can know that answer, though I bring it up to challenge you to see if there are any areas where the blurb can be trimmed.

Another example: A large number of other teenagers are thrown into this undocumented place. Since the line prior to this is "And she's not the only one," and teens are mentioned again later, do we need to be told here that more teens are thrown into the place when the "And she's not the only one" already establishes this, and the teens are mentioned again later? Again, I don't know the answer to this, but it's something worth thinking about.

Do you need the entire excerpt, or can you just have one line? Maybe consider downsizing on the excerpt and just having this: "Are you scared of becoming a slave to freedom?"

All of these changes would bring the word count down to 197 words, yet the blurb remains very similar to the one before. Not saying all of these changes are necessary, but they're worth considering.

My other main suggestion is to consider reworking some of the blurb since there are frequent grammar errors. There are incomplete sentences along with punctuation errors.

With all of these changes, a potential rewrite of the blurb would be:

"Are you scared of becoming a slave to freedom?"

_

As a 17-year-old girl whose mother abused her, Naomi has never known what freedom is, only dreamt of it. Freedom slowly becomes a drug, something she only gets a taste of when she fights for it.

Naomi lives in Sector One of the Terra Alliance—a place created after the Earth became unstable due to the numerous wars between Alliances.
Although it's meant to be a haven, it quickly becomes the beginning of a nightmare for Naomi when she is taken from the clutches of her mother and thrown into a cold, unknown Sector.

And she's not the only one.

Needles. Classrooms. Weapons. Violence. Laughing. Teasing. Blood. Some teens become deranged, others disappear, some fall into comas, and a handful experience their eyes changing colour.

With all of this happening in the new Sector, the rest of the world is forced into an evolution. The already unstable Earth becomes catastrophic.

And Naomis' already messed up story becomes a catastrophe for the history books.

This brings the blurb down to 172 words while keeping all the core elements of it. Most of what I did was rewording some sentences and breaking up the paragraphs to flow a bit smoother. That's just one alternative, and there are plenty of ways to take this blurb, but I hope seeing the alternative is helpful.

Overall, the blurb clearly establishes the plot and main character, though it could benefit from being trimmed and having grammar tweaks.

Cover: 8.5/10. The cover is very nice! I love the black and gold color scheme and think it works perfectly for your work. The title being Golden Sunlight makes it feel like this book needs gold, y'know? The black and gold choice was a good one, and I think the cover is visually interesting as a result. I love the symbol that takes up the majority of the cover. I don't know if there's an official name for the symbol used, but it's beautiful. The entire cover is elegant and looks awesome.

The only very minor suggestion I have is I wasn't sure of the purpose of the leaf behind the text Golden Sunlight, since no further plant-like imagery is on the cover, and it could look smoother without it, but only "could," not definitely. I'm no graphic designer, so it could look not as fun without the leaf, or maybe it'll look great without the leaf, I'm not sure, but I thought I'd throw that suggestion out there regardless. I hope that makes sense!

Overall, this is a very nice cover that caught my eye right off the bat, and I loved the color scheme!

Cohesion: 8/10. The cohesion between the title, blurb, and cover is pretty good. The title fits perfectly with the cover, with the title being Golden Sunlight and the cover being gold and black with a symbol that is bright like the sun. It's great cohesion in that regard, which makes the presentation look smoother and more engaging. I really loved how the title flowed into the cover, and I know I've been saying that quite a bit, but I truly can't gush over it enough.

The only suggestion I have is to consider trimming the blurb and making that part of the presentation a bit stronger. It's not a bad blurb by any means, but trimming it and making some grammar tweaks could be beneficial.

Overall, the cohesion is very good, particularly between the title and cover, which have a seamless connection.

Additional Aesthetics: 7.5/10. I like how you give each chapter banners as well as images up top to set the mood for what the readers are about to see. I liked that you went the extra mile and included additional aesthetics within your work, as it's ambitious to do so, and I encourage you to keep including aesthetics in all your future works!

Organization-wise, I would recommend letting the prologue have its own space to breathe and making an introduction with the disclaimer, aesthetics, etc., as the prologue is sandwiched between a lot of information, not giving the audience as much space to process such impactful events. Otherwise, the organization of the chapters looks all good. There are no obvious formatting errors with the paragraphs and sentences.

The other suggestion I have is the individual chapter banners are nice, though I felt they didn't fit in with the gold, white, and black color scheme you had going on for the rest of the story, especially considering the title. Having a more consistent color scheme with the banners could be beneficial. They were all nice banners, don't get me wrong, but it could be interesting to see, say, black and gold banners, or continue with the gold and white banners you had going on with other banners. I hope that makes sense.

Overall, the additional aesthetics are good, same with the organization.

Total: 40/50.

Album Scorecard:

Honorable Mention

Silent Vows : A Tale Of Passionate Love by Kaoriwritess

Review:

Title: 8.5/10. The title is Silent Vows : A Tale Of Passionate Love, and this is a nice title! I've had the pleasure of reading quite a bit of the story, and I can speak from experience when I say the title fits in with the book well! Grammatically, I would recommend: Silent Vows : A Tale of Passionate Love. All I did was lowercase the o in of. Since of isn't an important word, it doesn't need to be capitalized. I judge based on CMOS, or simply Chicago for short, as that's one of the main manuscript writing formats, and the of should be lowercase according to Chicago (and according to APA, AP, MLA, BB, and AMA; I ran it through all of the writing styles I have access to). If you go based on another writing style where it does get capitalized, that's fine, though I'm sharing Chicago's capitalization. Otherwise, I like the title and think it works well with the story!

Blurb: 6/10. The blurb is as follows:

"𝗧𝗵𝗲 𝗵𝗲𝗮𝗿𝘁 𝗱𝗼𝗲𝘀𝗻'𝘁 𝗮𝗹𝘄𝗮𝘆𝘀 𝗰𝗵𝗼𝗼𝘀𝗲 𝘄𝗵𝗮𝘁'𝘀 𝗿𝗶𝗴𝗵𝘁. 𝗜𝘁 𝗰𝗵𝗼𝗼𝘀𝗲𝘀 𝘄𝗵𝗮𝘁 𝗶𝘁 𝗰𝗮𝗻𝗻𝗼𝘁 𝗹𝗶𝘃𝗲 𝘄𝗶𝘁𝗵𝗼𝘂𝘁."

Vivaan Oberoi is a spoiled rich brat and MBA student. Known for his uncontrollable anger. 𝘏𝘪𝘴 𝘢𝘯𝘨𝘦𝘳 𝘪𝘴 𝘩𝘪𝘴 𝘮𝘢𝘪𝘯 𝘱𝘳𝘰𝘣𝘭𝘦𝘮.

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"𝗜 𝗹𝗼𝘃𝗲𝗱 𝗵𝗶𝗺 𝘄𝗶𝘁𝗵 𝗮𝗹𝗹 𝗜 𝗵𝗮𝗱, 𝗲𝘃𝗲𝗻 𝘄𝗵𝗲𝗻 𝗵𝗲 𝗰𝗼𝘂𝗹𝗱𝗻'𝘁 𝗹𝗼𝘃𝗲 𝗺𝗲 𝗯𝗮𝗰𝗸."

Reet Malhotra is a sweet and shy BA student and childhood friend of Vivaan. 𝘛𝘰 𝘮𝘦, 𝘭𝘰𝘷𝘦 𝘪𝘴 𝘢 𝘤𝘩𝘦𝘳𝘪𝘴𝘩𝘦𝘥 𝘧𝘢𝘯𝘵𝘢𝘴𝘺.

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"𝗘𝘃𝗲𝗿𝘆 𝗹𝗶𝗲 𝗜 𝘁𝗼𝗹𝗱 𝘄𝗮𝘀 𝗮 𝘀𝗶𝗹𝗲𝗻𝘁 𝗰𝗼𝗻𝗳𝗲𝘀𝘀𝗶𝗼𝗻 𝗼𝗳 𝗵𝗼𝘄 𝗺𝘂𝗰𝗵 𝗜 𝗵𝘂𝗿𝘁 𝗶𝗻𝘀𝗶𝗱𝗲."

Prisha Singhania Adopted into her family. Educated at prestigious schools and colleges in America. 𝘜𝘯𝘭𝘪𝘬𝘦 𝘰𝘵𝘩𝘦𝘳𝘴, 𝘐 𝘴𝘢𝘸 𝘭𝘰𝘷𝘦 𝘢𝘴 𝘢 𝘳𝘦𝘢𝘭𝘪𝘵𝘺 𝘯𝘰𝘵 𝘢 𝘧𝘢𝘯𝘵𝘢𝘴𝘺.

Here, this blurb clearly establishes who the main characters are going to be, which is a high priority for blurbs. We need to know who we're going to be following, so good job establishing the three main characters and some of their traits without spoiling too much about them. It gives us a a sneak peek without being over-the-top.

Suggestion-wise, before I get into anything grammatical, I have some creative suggestions. My main creative suggestion would be to consider not having two different alternative fonts. Screen readers can't read alternative fonts (in most cases), so by having two different ones, it makes the book less accessible, but it also gets a bit distracting. Consider having the quotes in normal font and separated like you already do, and then the second alternative font is fine. I'm not saying don't use alternative fonts since that's a personal choice for your aesthetics, though consider downsizing, is what I'm saying.

Another thing is the "𝘏𝘪𝘴 𝘢𝘯𝘨𝘦𝘳 𝘪𝘴 𝘩𝘪𝘴 𝘮𝘢𝘪𝘯 𝘱𝘳𝘰𝘣𝘭𝘦𝘮" felt a little unnecessary since the previous sentence is "Known for his uncontrollable anger." Maybe if there was another, more hooking line to describe him, that could be beneficial.

Lastly, I would recommend considering revamping the blurb to introduce the plot, as there is no mention of what the plot is here, just the characters. Due to that, we as readers don't know what we're about to read. You tell us the characters, but why should we read? Why should we care about these characters? What journey are you about to take us on? So this is all to say consider focusing on what is going to happen in the story, not just who is going to be in the story. The characters are important and should be introduced, but we want to know what the point of reading your work is, and that point is going to be the plot. I hope that makes sense.

Grammatically, it's good, though there are some errors with some punctuation, and there are sentences that could be combined.

Consider:

"The heart doesn't always choose what's right. It chooses what it cannot live without."

Vivaan Oberoi is a spoiled rich brat and MBA student known for his uncontrollable anger. His anger is his main problem.

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"I loved him with all I had, even when he couldn't love me back."

Reet Malhotra is a sweet and shy BA student and childhood friend of Vivaan. To me, love is a cherished fantasy.

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"Every lie I told was a silent confession of how much I hurt inside."

Prisha Singhania was adopted into her family and educated at prestigious schools [and colleges] in America. Unlike others, I saw love as a reality, not a fantasy.

*Note that I only didn't include the alternative font because grammar checkers cannot check alternative fonts, so I switched everything to normal font for sake of grammar checking

For the most part, I just merged the sentences and tweaked some general punctation things, so nothing too major. I put the "and colleges" in brackets since it isn't needed. Saying "prestigious schools in America" is basically the same as saying colleges, so it can be one or the other.

Overall, the blurb clearly establishes the characters and has potential, though it could be more plot-focused since there is no mention of the plot.

Cover: 8.5/10. The cover is pretty nice! I love the cute, lovely vibes it gives off. Having read much of the story, I can say for sure that the cover matches the vibes of the story and has a welcoming feel to it. I like the font of the title, too. I love the atmosphere you created with this cover, and I liked the picture you chose! It definitely caught my eye and made me feel like I should click to see more of what the story would be about, which is, of course, the goal of a cover.

Suggestion-wise, the main suggestion I have is the subtitles are a bit hard to read, especially the one on bottom. It could be beneficial to increase the font size of the subtitle since I couldn't read it until I zoomed in all the way, though the more you zoom in, the blurrier the picture becomes, hence why I recommend considering making the subtitle a bit bigger. The A Tale Of Passionate Love is a bit better and more readable, though if you feel it could benefit from being increased in size too, it could work, but only could since I do like how it's organized on the cover otherwise.

Overall, the cover is very nice and has a great warm atmosphere that reflects the story's plot/tone well!

Cohesion: 8/10. The title is very cohesive with the cover, with the two of them both having a warm feel to them. The cover feels like a tale of passionate love with the hand holding and the font, so those two elements are very cohesive and feel easy to understand and appealing to first time readers.

The only suggestion I have is it could be very beneficial to state the plot of the book more clearly in the blurb, that way we can see more connection between the title and cover with the blurb, though the overall presentation is pretty cohesive and organized.

Additional Aesthetics: 8.5/10. The additional aesthetics are quite nice! They reflect the warm atmosphere of the story that you've set up with the title, blurb, and cover, and all of them reflect the characters well. I like the little banners you have and think they're a great size and feature a good font.

Organization-wise, the chapters are organized well and are consistent. You put hearts around each chapter number, and the hearts are always there and consistently spaced throughout the chapter list. There are also no obvious formatting errors within the text, like spacing errors or issues with the paragraphs. For those reasons, I have no critiques for the organization of the book.

Suggestion-wise, not much, as you can probably tell based on the very high score. The only suggestion I have is Prisha is the main character (and I love her), so her character aesthetic is the first one we see. Nothing wrong with that; if anything, that's expected. My suggestion is her name placement on the character aesthetic feels a bit too low, especially when compared to all the others, and Reet's name might benefit from being a tad larger since his name is closer to the white parts of the aesthetic than the others are, and that when combined with the white font color makes it just a bit hard to see at first, but neither of those things are big deals since I overall like the character aesthetics and think you did a good job with them. They're very creative and unique from most aesthetics I see.

Overall, the additional aesthetics are good, and the story is well-organized!

Total: 39.5/50.

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Honorable Mention

You BETcha by SageSabastian

Review:

Title: 10/10. I love the title! The title is You BETcha, which is an awesome title, and it also fits in well with the story, which I'll say again in the cohesion section. It's only two words, which works in this case since it doesn't need to be an overly long title or anything. I like the capitalization of the "bet" and thought that was a nice, humorous touch. It's also all spelled and capitalized correctly in general. For those reasons, I have no critiques of the title!

Blurb: 6.5/10. As for the blurb, this is the blurb:

Max Turner is the high school's star quarterback, making him very popular. When Max's rival, Xander catches him cheating he blackmails him into a bet: date the most unpopular girl at school for the rest of the school year or else he will tell the principal that Max has been cheating. Both of which will ruin his reputation. But he chooses the first option and will have to date Sally McDonaldson.

Sally McDonaldson is a nerdy theater girl. She is an outcast at the high school and gets bullied a lot. But when the star quarterback, her biggest crush since freshman, asks her out she feels wanted for the first time ever. She thinks it is an official relationship. Little did she know it was all a bet in the first place.

As Max gets to know Sally the more time he hangs out with her, he discovers there is more to her than what meets the eye. Sally discovers under all of Max's ego, there is vulnerability.

This blurb clearly establishes what the plot is going to be, which is very good. Many blurbs are very vague and don't establish the plot, so you have an advantage here since so many others are vague with their blurbs or just use excerpts. You also clearly establish who the main characters are going to be, which is another awesome thing. The spelling is pretty clean, too, and while I have some grammar suggestions for punctuation, the general syntax is good.

Suggestion-wise, the grammar could be tweaked to be more fluid, as there are a few errors. Before I show an alternative, though, another suggestion I have is to remove the line "making him very popular." I say that because it's implied by the first line marking Max as the "star" quarterback, therefore showing his popularity and how beloved he is, which makes the "popular" line become filler.

I'll show two examples of grammar errors, and then I'll give a potential alternative within the blurb. Here are two examples:

When Max's rival, Xander catches him cheating he blackmails him into a bet: date the most unpopular girl at school for the rest of the school year or else he will tell the principal that Max has been cheating. In this sentence, there are punctuation errors, and I will correct them in the alternative.

But when the star quarterback, her biggest crush since freshman, asks her out she feels wanted for the first time ever. Here, there are also comma errors, and it needs to be "freshman year," not just freshman.

Consider:

Max Turner is the high school's star quarterback. When Max's rival, Xander, catches him cheating, he blackmails him into a bet: date the most unpopular girl at school for the rest of the school year, or else he will tell the principal that Max has been cheating. Both will ruin his reputation, but he chooses the first option.

Sally McDonaldson is a nerdy theater girl who gets bullied. When the star quarterback, her biggest crush since freshman year, asks her out, she feels wanted for the first time. She thinks it is an official relationship.

If only she knew the ugly truth.

As Max gets to know Sally, he discovers there is more to her than what meets the eye. Sally discovers under all of Max's ego, there is vulnerability.

Here, I trimmed the blurb a bit and reworded some sentences to flow more smoothly, but the main thing I changed was the punctuation, as I added a lot of commas.

Let's look at the ending now:

She thinks it is an official relationship. Little did she know it was all a bet in the first place.

As Max gets to know Sally the more time he hangs out with her, he discovers there is more to her than what meets the eye. Sally discovers under all of Max's ego, there is vulnerability.

Here, I feel like it could have ended with the "Little did she know" part since the rest feels a bit like filler and anti-climatic. In my alternative, I have "If only she knew the ugly truth" separated from the other paragraph since it's dramatic and hints at what's to come. That's another place the blurb could be stopped. So it could be worth considering tweaking the ending to be more climatic, and there are many ways you can take the blurb to have that climatic final line.

Overall, the blurb establishes what the plot is going to be about and who the characters are, which is great, though there could be some tweaks to the grammar and the ending.

Cover: 7.5/10. The cover is simple: a faceless man and a faceless woman embracing in front of what appears to be water and a building. It shows bright red hair (redhead nation, rise up) that gives it a pop of color, and there's a football the male character is holding behind her back, hinting at what's to come. It's a subtle way to show the truth being hidden behind her back, which I appreciated. It's all in all a nice cover that hints at what's to come.

Suggestion-wise, the title could be repositioned and resized, as it's covering a lot of the football and very small. I actually didn't realize that was a football at first due to the title blocking a decent chunk of it, so showing more of the football could be beneficial since I like the football element and think that should be emphasized, seeing as the story is about a football player.

The other suggestion I have is I'm not sure how I feel about the art style. It's not a bad art style by any means—if anything, it's pretty satisfying—though I'm unsure if it fits in with the setting and atmosphere of the story. I feel a more upbeat, maybe even anime/Persona-like art style could match the tone of the story more cohesively. I'm not sure exactly how to describe it, though this art style, to me, seems more like GTA or something like that, and I feel it could be interesting to explore other art styles or something more dramatic since this is about a theater student. I'm not sure if that makes sense, but I hope it makes at least a little sense.

And just as a side note, I'm not sure if it's because there was a username change or anything, but the author's name is spelled incorrectly. The name is SageSabastian but is spelled as SageSabstian on the cover, so it's missing the a after Sab. Not a big deal, but something I thought I would mention.

Overall, the cover works for the story and has interesting elements that make it nice.

Cohesion: 7.5/10. The title is awesome and fits in perfectly with the story, but it also fits in with the blurb well. Those two elements in particular work nicely and tell a coherent story about... well, the story! If we can guess what the story is going to be about just based on the title and cover, then you're doing something right, and I was able to take a pretty good guess based on the title, which really perfectly matches the story and is also eye-catching. It ties into the blurb awesomely, and both of those elements elevate each other.

Suggestion-wise, mostly the things I've said before where the blurb could be tweaked a tad to be a hair cleaner, and the cover could be tweaked so the football connection is more visible, as the football is a bit hard to see on the cover right now. An art style for the cover that feels more school-esque and vibrant could also be beneficial.

Overall, it's a pretty cohesive story in terms of how its presentation comes together to tell a story, so it's all in all good!

Additional Aesthetics: 8/10. There isn't much in terms of additional aesthetics here, but that's fine. There are images of the characters in the chapters, and a nice gif in chapter one of Sally, which works for the book, and they provide the reader with a nice visual!

Organization-wise, the book looks good. It's cleanly written and doesn't have any obvious issues with formatting. The paragraphs and sentences all look neat and easy to read!

The only suggestion I have is while I do like the images of the characters, it could be interesting to do character aesthetics since now you have face claims for everyone anyway. Another thing is it could be interesting to see more images in the chapter banners to set the tone for the chapters, but that's a small thing and not a must by any means. I'm not personally a huge fan of adding images to my chapters, so that's not a big deal, but it could set the tone and add another layer to the chapters depending on which images are chosen.

Overall, the aesthetical quality of this work is high, and the organization is also clean and easy to read!

Total: 39.5/50.

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ALL REVIEWS:

Wishlist by Seong_Grace

Review:

Title: 10/10. The title is Wishlist, which is capitalized as needed and is a one-word title that works. Sometimes one-word titles can be too vague, but here, it works. It's spelled correctly, too, which is good and essential to making a presentable title. It sums up what the story is going to be about without dragging on too long, so the shortness of the title fits, in my opinion. For those reasons, I have no criticisms of the title!

Blurb: 4/10. The blurb is as follows:

Kim Taehyung waiting for his beloved on his special day....

This blurb gives a hint at what's to come and does have a connection with the cover due to the cake and the "special day" here, though there isn't much story detail or reason to click on the story. I would recommend having a more concrete blurb that summarizes what the story is going to be about so readers can better understand what they're getting in to, and it can also spark more interest within the readers to click on the story. If readers don't know what they're clicking on, they likely won't want to click on it, hence why I recommend having a plot summary. This is an ongoing story, so I'm not sure how long it will end up being, but so far there is a 31 minute read time, which is a lot of content that could be transferred to a blurb, which is another reason I recommend it. For things like short oneshots or flash fictions, it can be more understandable why blurbs are very short or on the vague side, but for full stories, I would strongly recommend having a more detailed blurb.

Cover: 9/10. The cover is very nice! It has a nice color scheme that sets the tone for the story. I especially like the font of the title and thought it stood out/was eye-catching. I don't know if I've seen this font used often before, so that also makes it unique. I like the picture of Taehyung used since it fits in with the environment behind him, and the little cake on bottom was a nice touch to reflect what the story would be about!

The only suggestion I have is the subtitle underneath the title. I didn't notice it upon my first three looks at the cover and don't know fully what it says even after zooming in. I can see the "written by Seong_Grace," but only after zooming in all the way, and I can't make out what the subtitle above it says. Increasing its size or finding a way to make it more readable could be beneficial.

Overall, this is a good cover that caught my eye and fits the story, and I especially liked the font.

Cohesion: 7/10. The cohesion of the three core elements is good. The cover is somber and reflects the mood of the story, and the cake on the cover is subtle but present enough that you can draw conclusions about the story and make the assumption that this story takes place on his birthday. The title and cover in particular feel cohesive with one another, and the tone of the cover especially is what makes everything feel well put-together.

The main suggestion I have is to consider tweaking the blurb so we as readers can get a better sense at what the story is going to be about, that way we can also see how all the elements (title, blurb, cover) come together to tell their own story. As is, I'm not entirely sure how the title connects to the blurb. I can make an assumption that maybe he makes a wish or has a wishlist on his birthday, but that's about the most I can think of, as it's unclear otherwise. In short, some more clarity in how the title and cover relate to the blurb could be beneficial.

Overall, the cohesion is good, especially with the title and cover, though the blurb could connect more to the title and cover.

Additional Aesthetics: 7.5/10. There are no other graphics or banners inside the story, so I will be judging this based on the other side of this criteria, which is how the text and chapters are organized. The chapters are organized well and are easy to follow. There are no obvious spacing or formatting issues with the paragraphs and sentences that make it hard to read, and the chapters are organized as needed to flow through the story easily. There are only three chapters prior to the start of the story, being an intro, achievements chapter, and trailer, so it also flows into the first chapter overall well, making for good organization within the work.

My main critique is to consider tweaking the spelling from prokogue to prologue, as it can bring readers out of the text if it's not spelled correctly. It may not seem like a big deal, but this is the first impression readers are getting of your work. It's one thing to make a spelling error within the text since that's not a huge deal by any means, but an error with the titles is more impactful since that's our first impression of your work, hence why I recommend tweaking it to the correct spelling of prologue.

This is also just a small thing, but I'd recommend having more tags. The max is 25, and it's recommended to use as many as possible, preferably all 25, for max visibility, and bonus points if you're choosing tags with less than 5k stories. That's not a must by any means, but I just thought I'd recommend it to you since it could help with visibility and giving the readers more of a clue of what the story will be about, especially if you plan to return to this story and continue writing it at some point in the near future.

Overall, the organization is pretty good, though I would recommend tweaking the spelling, adding more tags, and considering additional aesthetics like a banner as a header/ender. That's not a must by any means, but it could be beneficial and a chance to further show off your graphic design work!

Total: 37.5/50.

Album Scorecard:

Self-love Symphony by bangtanrewinds

Review:

Title: 8/10. The title is Self-love Symphony, which is a good title that's cohesive with the cover (I'll talk about this more later, though). It's a cute title that sets up what's to come without dragging on too long, so good job with that! I would recommend spelling it as Self-Love Symphony. I know it's hyphenated, but after running it through every writing style I know of (APA, Chicago, MLA, AMA, etc.), all of them recommend spelling it with a capital L, and it could also tie in to the themes of the story if the love were capitalized. But that's a minor thing. Another minor thing is I would advise against using alternative fonts for titles, or at least putting it normally in ( ) after the alternative. I say this because it makes the book less accessible (it's difficult for screen readers to read) and doesn't really add much aesthetically anyway, in my opinion. Though, again, that's a minor thing in an otherwise really nice title!

Blurb: 4/10. The blurb is as follows:

❛❛Loving someone isn't an entirety,❜❜ contradicted Jungkook, ogling at an adolescent couple having their little Valentine's celebration a few steps away from his house.

The words spoken weren't out of loneliness but the experience and sequence of love-withering moments of his life. For him, he had been enlightened by another and the most undefiable phrase of love and he was determined to lead his life with his discovered philosophy- for now, at least.

A ting of notification drew his raven gapes to the phone whose screen flashed- ❛Who is your valentine?❜

And the intense scene was punctuated by his smug smile.

What would he reply?

This blurb could benefit from being tweaked, as there are grammar errors and confusing sentences I'll go over below, and another thing is this isn't really a blurb but rather an excerpt from the story (as far as I can tell), so I would recommend revamping it to be a blurb instead of an excerpt.

This sentence in particular was confusing: For him, he had been enlightened by another and the most undefiable phrase of love and he was determined to lead his life with his discovered philosophy- for now, at least.

If you read that out loud, you may notice how it feels confusing. I don't know what this sentence is saying, so I cannot think of any ways to rephrase it to show a clearer way to display the meaning. Are you saying there was a phase in his life that changed him? Or are you saying an actual phrase of love, like I love you, is what changed him? Or something else entirely? That's why I'd recommend considering rewriting that sentence so the meaning is more clear.

I would also recommend not using the word "undefiable." I say this because it's not really a word (according to Merriam-Webster and Oxford), it's marked as a spelling error on all my spell checkers, and I can't find any credible sources listing a solid definition for this word (I see some sites defining it, but none of them are credible, is what I mean). I know what you mean when you say it, but I still recommend not using it. Maybe undeniable instead, depending on your intended meaning behind the sentence?

But moving more generally, when it comes to blurb writing, I recommend straying from this writing style where it's more mysterious, a bit purple prose-y, and more like an excerpt. The actual story being written like this is perfectly fine, but a blurb is not your story: it is the advertisement for your story. When writing a blurb, I recommend being clear, using more simplistic language, and making sure to always read your blurbs out loud to make sure they flow and make sense. There's no need (in fact, I strongly advise against it) for the sentences to be very long and more prose-y.

The reason I say all of that is because the number 1 goal of a blurb is to tell the readers what they're about to read, but after reading the blurb, I don't know what the story is about. I have a vague guess, and I know it takes place during Valentine's Day, but what is the actual story about? What are the stakes? Why should I care about Jungkook? And, most importantly, why should I read? The #1 question you should answer when writing a blurb is why should the readers care and read? What journey are you going to take them on? What are the characters like? What's at stake if the characters fail? These questions don't need to be directly answered, but giving solid ideas for what we're about to read could get more readers reading. This doesn't seem like a blurb but rather an excerpt, and I strongly advise against using solely an excerpt as a blurb. If you want an excerpt, I'd recommend a line or maybe a paragraph and then an actual blurb underneath, but too long of an excerpt could turn readers off.

So, general suggestions aside, let's go through the last two parts of the blurb.

Third part: A ting of notification drew his raven gapes to the phone whose screen flashed- ❛Who is your valentine?❜

This sentence can simply be: A ting brought (or another verb) his raven (Jungkook's eyes are brown. Is there a narrative reason for his eyes being pitch black? If not, raven isn't right here; his eyes are dark, but they're still brown, and raven typically means pitch black) eyes to the phone, whose screen flashed with, "Who is your valentine?"

Gapes doesn't make sense here, as the word is primarily used to describe an opening, typically of the mouth, not the eyes, so I would recommend reworking the word choice here. In a blurb especially, there's no need to overcomplicate it, so here, it can simply be something like "brown eyes."

"A ting of notification" is a bit awkward without an article, as you're using "notification" as a noun, so it'd be more appropriate as "A ting of a notification," though either way you can shorten it to either a ting like I showed in the potential rewrite (onomatopoeia), or simply a notification. "A ting of a notification" is a bit of a long-winded way to say he got a notification, hence why I recommend considering downsizing.

I believe I may have given this feedback in my review for Epoch: when you're writing your sentences, consider challenging yourself to cut your sentences down by 25 to 50%. The main reason you have frequent syntax errors is because you're overstuffing your sentences, but remember the #1 goal of writing, at least in my opinion, is not showing over telling, though that would be #2—the #1 goal is brevity. AKA: say as much as you can with as few words as possible (without overwhelming the audience). Remember it's about how you're using words and sentence structures, not how long or complex they are, hence why I recommend reading your work out loud to catch when sentences are starting to sound confusing.

Final segment: And the intense scene was punctuated by his smug smile.

My immediate thought is: intense? How is the scene intense? He's looking at his phone and a couple, which doesn't make the word "intense" feel like an accurate descriptor here. Maybe there's more context to the scene that shows the intensity, but we as readers can only go based on what was shown, and there's nothing there to show or tell us there's something intense happening, so it feels like we're missing major context that would make this line make more sense. The other thing is the "and" isn't needed. I'm actually not opposed to starting sentences with and, or, and but, though here, it felt a bit unnecessary.

Overall, the blurb could use a rework since it is not a blurb but rather an excerpt, and I would recommend having a summary of the book.

Cover: 10/10. The cover is awesome! It has a great color scheme with the red and black, and the way it's a neon red that glows is a nice touch. I like the picture of Jungkook used and the way text is organized. The font chosen was also good, and I liked the Valentine's Day behind Jungkook's head. Since the text hierarchy is good, the colors are aesthetically pleasing, and the cover overall looks great, I have no critiques for the cover!

Cohesion: 7/10. The cohesion of the three core elements is overall good. The title and cover in particular have great cohesion that feel fluid and like they work together to elevate the idea of the narrative. The red color scheme of the title reflects the feeling of love and Valentine's Day perfectly, making it feel like the cover was made for the title and vice versa. There's no other cover I can imagine fitting this story, so great job with that! It's a beautiful cover, too, so that's just the cherry on top.

Suggestion-wise, the blurb could be tweaked to make it more cohesive since the blurb is confusing and could benefit from a rewrite. Like I mentioned in the blurb section, it's not really a blurb, making it a bit tough to judge. It does bring up the concept of love, which helps connect it to the title and cover, though with it being an excerpt and not a blurb, it makes it feel not as cohesive as it could be.

Overall, the cohesion is pretty good, especially with the title and cover, though the blurb could use tweaks to help it feel connected to the rest of the story.

Additional Aesthetics: 10/10. The additional aesthetics are good! The chapters are organized well and are easy on the eyes. I don't mind alternative fonts for chapter titles, just the overall title, so the alternative fonts are fine for me here, too.

As for the graphics, the banners are nice. They match the cover and feel cohesive with the tone of the story. They're visually appealing but also don't take up so much of the screen that they become distracting. For those reasons, I have no criticisms for the organization and additional aesthetics of this story.

Overall, the organization and aesthetics are good, making for a smooth and visually pleasing read!

Total: 39/50.

Album Scorecard:

Games Boys Play by LAJoyner

Review:

Title: 10/10. The title is Games Boys Play, which fits in with what the story is about. It's also spelled & capitalized correctly according to Chicago guidelines, so that's yet another good trait of the title. It flows off the tongue well and makes sense, so for those reasons, I have no critiques for the title!

Blurb: 6/10. The blurb is as follows:

They're just boys being boys, agree Jin and Namjoon, and know if they try to stop them, the boys may become even more competitive till someone gets hurt.

Yoongi wants to avoid getting involved because it concerns love. Hobi believes they will grow out of it, hopefully soon, very soon.

You, Izzie, and Sindy are upset with the Maknae line. You lock Jk out of the bathroom, Izzie locks Tae out of their bedroom, and Sindy knees Jimin in his manly bits.

But does the Maknae line take the Games Boys Play too far this time? Who will live and who will die as the stakes rise in this game of competition between Jimin, Taehyung, and Jungkook?

When the competitiveness gets out of control, there are no winners, only losers. Who will lose in Games Boys Play?

The blurb defines who the characters are and the general vibe of the story in terms of its tone, which is good. This is a proper blurb, and thank you for not making the blurb just one sentence since I think that's not a good trend on Wattpad. All of the characters are clear, and the SPAG is pretty good, too.

Just a small thing, but you don't need to capitalize maknae. It's just like how you wouldn't capitalize general terms like brother. There are rare cases where it can be capitalized, like when referring to specific titles (i.e., Golden Maknae to specifically refer to Jungkook makes it fine to capitalize), but in general, you can lowercase it. This is especially recommended since you lowercase it as maknaes within the story, so some more consistency could be beneficial. Just think of it like this: if you wouldn't capitalize the English definition of a Korean word, then you shouldn't capitalize it. Maknae, to put it simply, of course means youngest. "This is our youngest line." Same applies to maknae line, hence why it doesn't need to be capitalized. But that's just a small thing, so let's get into the meat of the blurb now.

When it comes to creative suggestions, the story idea could be clearer. It's unclear what exactly the games being played are. Like literal games? Or are we talking playboy/f boy games? I'm all for inspiring mystery and questions within the blurb, but when it comes to the general plot, I recommend considering being a bit clearer about it.

This first sentence could also benefit from being clearer: They're just boys being boys, agree Jin and Namjoon, and know if they try to stop them, the boys may become even more competitive till someone gets hurt.

Here, I would recommend restructuring this since the "agree Jin and Namjoon" is a bit awkwardly placed. Consider: Jin and Namjoon agree the maknaes are just boys being boys, and stopping them may make them become more competitive until someone gets hurt. It slightly shortens the sentence and makes the subjects and their verbs clearer. I also just tweaked it to until instead of till simply because I think it flows better, but I don't think there's anything wrong with till there either if that's what you prefer.

Overall, the blurb clearly states who the characters are and gives a good idea of what the tone of the story will be, though there could be some tweaks and some more clarity to what the plot is.

Cover: 4/10. The cover has nice pictures of the maknae line that are of pretty good quality, and I also like the font chosen for the author's name along with the placement of the author's name. The text is placed pretty well in general, and I liked the choice to make the title have a curve to it since that fit in nice on the cover and looked nice curved over the three pictures of the maknae line.

Suggestion-wise, the main suggestion I have for the cover is it could be more story-specific, as this book seems to be pretty chaotic, which sounds fun! But the cover feels very general with the three boys and a background outside. I struggle to see what the competition is or what the vibe of the book will be. Is this like a playboy kind of boy game? Or is it more Run BTS kind of games? Reflecting that on the cover more clearly could be beneficial and hook in more readers.

Another suggestion is you may want to reconsider the background image, as if you look closely, you'll see there's an extra hand on the stop sign that doesn't line up with any of the three maknaes. Taehyung is the only possible one who could be holding the stop sign, but even then, the length is too far for his arm without drastically changing his posture, and his arm is pointed downwards anyway, so geographically, it's impossible for him to be the one holding it, but it's also impossible for it to be Jikook either since we can see Jimin's hands, and we can see Jungkook's hands in his pockets, meaning there's a fourth person on the cover, we just can't see who. But that's a small thing I just wanted to mention, so let's move into other stuff now.

There's also a lot going on with the cover text-wise, so the text hierarchy could be tweaked. I, in general, liked the placement, though since there's a lot of text, it can be a bit much to follow, is what I mean. There's the author's name up top, the title card, the "a maknae line story," and then the long subtitle at the bottom. I'll talk about the subtitle below.

Subtitles should never be longer than two lines, and this one is three lines long, and they should really try to stick within three to seven words, not full sentences, as subtitles are meant to be quick, bite-sized phrases to get readers hooked. Maybe the subtitle could be something like "This competition/contest has no winners" or something of the sort to still capture the essence of the story but keep it at one line and only five words as opposed to twelve (I put contest/competition since I think contest flows better, but competition can work, too). It could also give more space to the cover so you can play around with the key elements (the images) more.

Moving more generally, I don't think the "a maknae line story" is needed either since that's already in the blurb and implied based on the fact that the maknae line is on the cover, so repeating that information is unneeded, in my opinion.

The last suggestion is it could be interesting to play around with the font of the title. I liked the curve of the text along with the color, though I've seen you use this font quite often. It's nice to have a certain style, don't get me wrong, though something more book-specific that can reflect the chaos of the book's competition could be interesting to see. This isn't a book category, so I don't read the book, which, by extension, means I don't fully know what the competition/plot is, so I can't really give specific font examples since I don't know the plot, but it's something worth playing around with, if you're interested in font changes.

Overall, the cover has high quality pictures and a unique idea with the curve of the title (and the colors are nice, too), though I recommend some tweaks to bring out the story idea a bit stronger.

Cohesion: 6/10. The title makes perfect sense and ties in with the story well. There is also a correlation between the title and blurb, where you can see the influence the title has over the blurb, making those two elements feel more connected and interesting!

Suggestion-wise, like I mentioned in the previous section, the cover could have more relevance to the story. I feel like if it were like them partying or showing rambunctious behavior, it could be more cohesive, though since I explained that earlier, I won't talk your ear off about it again here other than to mention it since it factors into the cohesion.

The blurb could also use some editing to be more clear about what the story is about and what these games are, as that part is a tad vague. The title is connected to the blurb okay, though there could just be some more details about the plot to give it that extra bit of cohesion.

Overall, the cohesion is good and makes sense for your goal with this story.

Additional Aesthetics: 10/10. There are no additional graphic aesthetics, but that's fine. It could be interesting to see some, but it's not a big deal. So, aesthetically, we'll look at the general organization and structure of the chapters. The chapters are organized clearly. There are only two chapters out so far, but both of them look fine in the chapter list, and the actual chapters themselves don't have any obvious issues with the paragraph and sentence structures. I didn't notice any spacing errors or causes for concern. For those reasons, I have no critiques for the general aesthetical quality of the work!

Total: 36/50.

Album Scorecard:

So Homeschool by ellbooksxx

Review:

Title: 10/10. The title is So Homeschool, which is capitalized correctly according to Chicago guidelines, therefore making it grammatically correct! On the creative side of things, it's a cute title that caught my eye and matches the tone of the story you're setting up. I like how it's only two words and sets the reader up for the plot. All in all, this title works well for the story, and I have no suggestions for it!

Blurb: 6.5/10. The blurb is as follows:

Olivia is a girl who is homeschooled but joins her bestfriends Evie's school basketball team

Finn is Evie's brother who is starting to see Olivia as more than just Evie's annoying best friend

Finn's life gets changed completely when an injury means that he can no longer do his dream, playing basketball professionally. No one knows except for his parents and sister Evie who hates him for his injury and what she thinks is a wasted opportunity.

When Finn and Olivia end up dating, Evie isn't happy and will do anything to break them up, fueled by jealousy and hurt.

Here, the blurb says what the story is going to be about and states who the main characters are, which is good since many stories don't have clear blurbs, giving you an advantage in this category. I clearly understand what the book is going to be about after reading your blurb, so good job with that.

Suggestion-wise, my main suggestion is the blurb could benefit from some revisions since there are frequent grammar errors. There are punctuation errors and general syntax errors. I will write a revision of the blurb with some grammar tweaks below.

Consider:

Olivia is a homeschooled girl who joins her best friend Evie's school basketball team.

Finn is Evie's brother, who is starting to see Olivia as more than just Evie's annoying best friend.

Finn's life changes completely when an injury forces him to give up his dream of playing basketball professionally. No one knows except for his parents and Evie, who hates him for his injury and what she thinks is a wasted opportunity.

When Finn and Olivia end up dating, Evie will do anything to break them up, fueled by jealousy and hurt.

Here, I changed a lot of the punctuation and tweaked some of the sentences to have stronger syntax, but I overall tried my best to keep the ideas and word choice mostly the same.

The other suggestion I have is the ending could be a bit more climatic and dramatic. For example, maybe:

When Finn and Olivia end up dating, Evie will do anything to break them up.

Anything.

I'm not saying that's what you have to go with, but ending on that one word of "anything" could be beneficial to having more of a dun dun dunnnn moment, if you know what I mean. The blurb ends a bit anti-climatically, hence why I recommend considering tweaking the ending to have more of a final moment like that.

Overall, the blurb clearly defines what the story is going to be about and who the main characters are, though there could be some tweaks to the grammar.

Cover: 6.5/10. The cover is simple: two girls—one blonde, one brunette—looking out at nature with a purple banner and black text spelling out the title up top. It's simple, but it does what it needs to to show the audience who the story is going to be about: Olivia and Evie. We can assume those two girls are them based on the blurb, which makes the cover and blurb connect well.

Suggestion-wise, my main suggestion is the cover could be revamped to be more story-specific. Since this is a story about hatred, jealousy, and Olivia dating Evie's brother, there could be more on the cover to reflect that, such as maybe a hint of the basketball theme you have going on since Finn and Olivia meet via basketball, or maybe Finn is on the cover as well, and/or maybe we can see the facial expressions of these people, like Evie being all angry while Olivia is staring at Finn with love. There are many ways you can take this cover, so I'm not saying any of those things are things you have to do, but they're worth considering to make the cover feel more story-specific, if that makes sense.

Overall, the cover is fine and does its job to show the two main characters.

Cohesion: 8/10. The cohesion between the title, blurb, and cover is pretty good! The title matches with the blurb especially, with the title matching exactly what the blurb says about the story. It's the perfect title for this work, so you did a great job with that! The cover also shows two women who we can assume are Olivia and Evie, so the cover ties into the blurb as well.

The only suggestion I have is while the cover has the two characters on it, it could be more story-specific since it's a bit general like I mentioned in the cover section, and the blurb could be tweaked grammatically a bit to feel more cohesive. Otherwise, the cohesion is very well done!

Overall, the cohesion is pretty good and makes the presentation of the story feel fluid and interesting.

Additional Aesthetics: 7/10. There are character aesthetics in this story, which was a nice touch to give additional graphics to everyone! I liked the character aesthetics and thought they did a good job presenting who the characters are and some of their interests. They're cute aesthetics that I think readers will love!

The organization with the chapters is pretty good. The chapters are labeled in numbers from one to twenty at the time of writing this, and that works and looks neat. Suggestion-wise, the paragraphs could benefit from being split up as they are grammatically incorrect. By that I mean you put everyone's dialogue in one paragraph, but every time a new person is speaking, there needs to be a paragraph break.

Here's an example from the text:

"Why do I have to carry these roller-skates?" Evie complained. "You're lucky I'm here" Olivia reminded her as she pushed the door open.

Here, Evie is speaking and Olivia is speaking, but they're speaking in the same paragraph. Every new person speaking needs their own space to speak (except in rare cases, like if characters are speaking at the same time, like: "Yeah," Olivia and Evie said in sync; these are rare cases, though). So, with that in mind, consider:

"Why do I have to carry these roller-skates?" Evie complained.

"You're lucky I'm here," Olivia reminded her as she pushed the door open.

Another random example of how to format a conversation:

"Hey," Dan said, waving to Billy. "How are you?"

"Good." Billy grinned. "What about you?"

"Great. What are your plans today?"

Billy shrugged. "Not much. Just gonna watch the game. You wanna watch with me?"

"Sure, I'd love to. What time?"

"Noon sound good?"

"Noon's great," Dan said with a smile. "I'll see you then."

That's a random example I pulled out of nowhere, but it was mostly to show how every time a new person is speaking, they need a new space to speak. I hope that makes sense!

The only other suggestion I have has to do with the character aesthetics. It could be interesting if the character names were more consistently placed on the aesthetics. By that I mean for Olivia and Evie, the text is aligned in the center and basically put in the same position, though for others, like Mila and Ryder, the positioning of the text is much different. Having more visual consistency by having more consistent text alignment could be beneficial.

Overall, the additional aesthetics are nice and add a good visual to the story, and the organization is pretty good, though there could be some tweaks to how the paragraphs are formatted.

Total: 38/50.

Album Scorecard:

The Barbarians by Kristy24cannel

Review:

Title: 10/10. The title is The Barbarians, which is capitalized & spelled correctly according to Chicago guidelines, so good job since that's, of course, imperative to a good title. It also sums up what the story is going to be about without dragging it out or trying to get fancy with it. You're direct and say what the story is about. That also means it ties in well with the blurb, which I'll talk about more in the cohesion section but still wanted to mention since it does impact how good the title is. All in all, the title works well, and I have no critiques!

Blurb: 5/10. The blurb is as follows:

In another world, there are kingdoms filled with royals, thieves, and mystical beings, forced to tolerate one another. In the midst of it all, Azeira; a barbaric girl who lives away from prying eyes, is constantly dangling on the line between life and death. To survive; she steals and bargains, not caring about her appearance within this society. She's a Barbarian after all.

She despises the Ruler of the land, a heartless woman who proudly sits upon her throne even as the world crumbles below her. With her own prejudice against the higher class infiltrating her emotions, Azeira wishes for her to be overthrown.

If only someone had the power and leadership to do so...

Azeira has her own closeted skeletons as she traverses the land. Although rough around the edges; she has a soft heart and a soul that aches for love. However, she must keep her emotions intact, even as seven men try to wander into her fiery spirit. And those very same men join her in the midst of her adventures, influencing her to change her Barbaric ways in exchange for leadership.

A stubborn one she is, despite that, the seven glorious men end up being the ones to change the course of her doomed destiny.

The blurb defines what the plot is and who the main character is, and it also hints at BTS' involvement. This is a good outline of what's to come within the story, and unlike many other blurbs, it isn't vague, so thank you for not being vague about it. Too many blurbs rely on just one line or an excerpt, but that's not really what a blurb is, so I appreciate that you gave a real blurb and broke down what the plot was going to be about.

Suggestion-wise, before I get into the creative suggestions, I have some grammatical suggestions I'll leave below.

In the midst of it all, Azeira; a barbaric girl who lives away from prying eyes, is constantly dangling on the line between life and death. Here, I would recommend removing the semicolon since it is unnecessary and grammatically incorrect, and the other two semicolons after this are also incorrect, but I'll go over them next.

To focus on this sentence first, this sentence could be tweaked to say: In the midst of it all, Azeira, a barbaric girl who lives away from prying eyes, is constantly dangling on the line between life and death. It's the same sentence only with a comma instead of the semicolon.

Semicolons are fine to use, though I suggest using them lightly in blurbs especially since semicolons have a tendency to overcomplicate sentences (and blurbs are meant to be more simplistic summaries of stories), and since they're more advanced punctuation, most writers on Wattpad have a tendency to use them as comma replacements, which is incorrect.

Before I get into the other semicolons, when it comes to semicolon rules, they are not interchangeable with commas. Semicolons connect two similar independent clauses, so they have a tendency to naturally not be used that often. Let's look at the other two semicolons now.

To survive; she steals and bargains, not caring about her appearance within this society. Here, just like the previous example, all you need is to switch the semicolon with a comma, and then the sentence becomes grammatically correct. So: To survive, she steals and bargains, not caring about her appearance within this society.

Although rough around the edges; she has a soft heart and a soul that aches for love. Here, same thing. All you need is to replace the semicolon with a comma since they're not interchangeable, and this sentence requires a comma. So: Although rough around the edges, she has a soft heart and a soul that aches for love.

Moving away from semicolons, there's this sentence: A stubborn one she is, despite that, the seven glorious men end up being the ones to change the course of her doomed destiny. The "A stubborn one she is, despite that" is the issue here since it's not grammatically correct, and it's a bit awkward and could be rephrased. One alternative could be: "Despite her stubbornness, the seven glorious men end up being the ones to change her doomed destiny." I removed "the course of" because those are fluff/filler words that are unnecessary. If you can remove words from a sentence and the sentence & your intended meaning would be the same, then the words more likely than not can be removed. There are other ways that sentence could be rewritten, though it would need a conjunction (i.e., but despite that), a semicolon, or a sentence break between "she is" and "despite that."

Creatively, I would recommend removing one usage of "in the midst of it all," as you use this phrase twice. I recommend in blurbs never repeating phrases like that since it's such a short word pool that it risks becoming repetitive.

I would also recommend considering trimming this blurb. There are many sentences that could be trimmed or combined to help with flow. A small revision of the first part could be:

In another world, there are kingdoms filled with royals, thieves, and mystical beings, all forced to coexist. In the midst of it all, Azeira is a barbaric girl who lives away from prying eyes and constantly dangles between life and death, only surviving by stealing and bargaining.

She's a Barbarian, after all.

I separated the "She's a Barbarian" line to give it more dramatic effect. Not a necessary change by any means, but if you wanted to add extra drama to it, that is one way to do so. The "not caring about her appearance within this society" line felt a bit like filler, hence why I condensed it. When writing a blurb, consider only including the information the audience absolutely has to know. It's clear she doesn't care about her standing in society based on that opening paragraph, so that's why I removed that line and why I considered it information that didn't need to be told.

Let's look at the second part: She despises the Ruler of the land, a heartless woman who proudly sits upon her throne even as the world crumbles below her. With her own prejudice against the higher class infiltrating her emotions, Azeira wishes for her to be overthrown.

Here, it starts to get a bit confusing since there are a lot of pronouns, and downsizing could be beneficial.

There are several ways to take this, so this is just one general alternative: The Ruler of the land is a heartless woman who proudly sits upon her throne, even as the world crumbles beneath her. Azeria would do anything to watch her burn.

It's drastically different, though the language is more direct, using less intro clauses and focusing on the emotions rather than the additional information. Do we need to know Azeria has prejudice right now? Can that be something instead shown in the story instead of told to us before we start it? I don't know the answers to those questions—only you as the creator can know the answers. If you feel it is necessary, then okay, I say go for it and keep it in, but if it's something you feel the audience can do without knowing, then it may be worth it to downsize here.

Where I'm ultimately going with this is we're told everything about Azeria in this blurb, and some more focus and downsizing to raise more mystery about the depths of this character could be beneficial. I hope everything I said made sense.

Overall, the blurb clearly establishes who the main characters are and hints at what's to come, giving us a basic rundown of the plot, though it could have some grammatical fixes and some trimming to condense it further.

Cover: 7.5/10. I really, really love the concept of this cover. The way the members are split up on the cover makes it look super aesthetically pleasing. I also think the individual images chosen were of high quality. It's hard to fit all seven members of BTS on a cover without it looking awkward, so I appreciate the creativity here and how you spun it to fit all your characters on the cover without it feeling overwhelming. Every character has their space to shine, and I love that! It's a great concept that's executed well, too. It definitely matches the vibes of the story.

Suggestion-wise, not much. The only major suggestion I have is I wasn't a huge fan of the font of the title and author's name. For me, it felt a little out-of-place and like a more intense font could have fit in more with the concept of the book. I like how you gave it a flame-like color, so the color is good, it's just the font didn't attract me. I also wasn't a huge fan of the sword since the background images are already visually-satisfying and take up a lot of the screen, so having the additional visual was a bit much for me, but both of those things could totally just be a me thing and something everyone else loves. Graphics are pretty subjective, after all. Still, I thought I would mention them and share my thoughts.

Overall, the cover is interesting and has a great concept, and I loved the pictures chosen!

Cohesion: 8/10. The cohesion between the title and cover especially is good. The title perfectly fits in with the cover, as all the images selected on the cover are great and fit in with the barbarian theme you have going on here. The blurb also lays the groundwork for creating cohesion between all three elements and making for good cohesion all around.

My only suggestion is the blurb could be cleaned up grammatically to have it flow stronger and feel more cohesive from a reader's perspective, as some of the sentences are hard to follow due to the organization and grammar. Though since I already went over that in the blurb section, I won't talk your ear off about it here other than to mention it.

Overall, the cohesion is pretty solid and does a nice job executing good presentation that I think will hook readers in!

Additional Aesthetics: 7.5/10. When it comes to banners and other graphics, there aren't any unless I missed some, but there are songs at the start of every chapter, which I found to be a nice touch to set the mood and get readers invested. It's not a big deal to not have custom banners or anything, so that doesn't factor into the score at all. The general aesthetical quality of the work is good, and I liked the addition of the songs and pictures to show the environments (without over-relying on them).

Organization-wise, it's pretty organized, and there are no obvious formatting errors within the paragraphs and sentences. Some of the chapters prior to chapter one could be condensed, as there are five chapters prior to the prologue, and I feel the disclaimer and trigger warning could have been combined, and the covers & awards potentially moved to the back of the book since that's more back of the book material, but when it comes to the general organization, it's good, and the text appears clear and easy to read.

Suggestion-wise, just two things. One is the same image is used twice back-to-back in chapter 2. It's not a big deal, but I would recommend removing the second usage of it since you already established the location with it being the starting image for that chapter.

The second thing is it could be interesting to play around more with the images and what you use at the starts and ends of chapters, as it's a bit inconsistent. Sometimes you'll have images important to the story to start off the chapters, like chapters 1 and 2, and other times there isn't one, like chapter 3 despite it having Seokjin in the title (and chapter 1 had Jimin in the title and featured an image of Jimin). So it could be interesting to see more image play, though that's also not a big deal.

Overall, the additional aesthetics are good, featuring unique songs per chapter and good organization that makes for good presentation.

Total: 38/50.

Album Scorecard:

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Thank you for joining me for yet another set of results. We're making great progress and are nearly done with the specialized categories, with there being only two left, though SOTY will be saved for last. I'll be focusing hard on the standard categories now and hope to get quite a few out as soon as possible.

Obligatory Jimin is hot phrase here cause everyone will freak out if I don't have one, so: Jimin is hot. Gustave is hot. I have red hair.

Alright, that should do it. I'll see you soon for most likely the Experimental category, depending on how things go since I've also made great progress on the Rock category, but there are fewer participants in Disco, so it may be smarter to do that one first...

Long story short, we'll see what comes next, and I'll keep y'all updated.