Book: Blood, Money, Tears in The Pub
Author: pavleklecin
Reviewer: Iamjustasapien
Chapters read: 14

Cover:
I have to agree, the cover is well-made. The colour contrast of yellow to green, on the title is just amazing. And the fact you have made it look 3D, just enhances the cover altogether. In short, cover is absolutely perfect, no changes are needed. Good job!

Title:
"Blood, Money, Tears in The Pub" is a good title choice. Although a bit long, it really fits the storyline well. It gives the reader a glimpse, of the fun yet chaotic ride this book holds. Although the title is straightforward, the originality here captures the reader's attention. Excellent job!

Blurb:
"Rex "Rocket" Ryan: An energetic and arrogant snooker player..."

Is a good start. Now, I for one, rarely find stories with snooker players on this platform. Due to this reason, this immediately caught my attention. The blurb is simple, but does summarize the story well and ignites curiosity in readers, to explore more. It is perfect.

But I have a small recommendation; you could add dialogues, to attract more readers. For example:

"Come on, Rex, you've been here for 8 hours playing. Don't you think it's enough? You'll drive me customers away,"

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"I'm sick and tired of you two plonkers acting so high and mighty. Who the f*** do you think you are to invade my place?! In here, I am a king!"

"And I'm God," replied Julian coldly and seriously as he stood up, towering over Rex.

***

"The Rocket has been eliminated! He loses his tour card! The rusty Rocket has now exploded! The newcomer destroyed his career!

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"I can't believe I lost my cool like that," he said as he sat on the couch and saw the smashed TV. "Rex, you need to fix the TV."

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"Well...we rob Cornelius."...

Just mashup lines and continue further. This gives the reader a insight to the story and makes them more prone to explore the book further.

Plot:
Well, I have to agree, the plot was...quite unexpected, in a good way. It was quite chaotic and fun, I personally loved it. The pacing is good as well. Not too fast, not to slow. However, some errors ruin the flow and mood. Here are a few errors and there corrections:

Error: "....the air is covered in smoke, ash of cigarettes everywhere the...."

Correction: "...the air is covered in smoke, ashes of cigarettes everywhere the..."

Error: "...and nearly balding, is playing fast, as lighting on the table in the left corner."

Correction: "....and nearly balding, is playing, fast as lighting on the table in the left corner.

Error: "Come on, Rex, you've been here for 8 hours playing. Don't you think it's enough? You'll drive me customers away,"

Correction: "Come on, Rex, you've been here for 8 hours, playing. Don't you think it's enough? You'll drive my customers away,"

(I have underlined the mistakes AND corrections)

And there are many such minute mistakes. I really ruins the flow of the sentence and ruins the mood of the readers. I recommend correcting them. Since, I as a reader, you drop the book mid-way, if I spot such errors. I am sorry if I am sounding a bit harsh, but this is the reality.

Additionally, I would like to add another important thing. You MUST mention in your blurb or chapters about the triggering topics. As a writer, it is your responsibility to do this, asap. Some may get triggered due to the violence or something else, so please, add disclaimers at the start or just in the blurb of your book.

Add, please do add a disclaimer about drinking and smoking. You can add this to your blurb or the first chapter:

Disclaimer: Intake of alcohol and smoking is mentioned. Please do NOT replicate this in real life, as it is dangerous to your life and health.

Character development:
Well, I personally like Rex and Angnus. I have to admit, Rex does not have that "perfect" MC attitude, but his flaws make him unique and even relatable to some. His realistic personality really got me hooked! I have not read till the end of your book, due to my busy schedule, but I personally love the characters in your book. Their unique personalities is really fun to read. Although, robbing someone just because of recession is wrong, this book is a fun and chaotic ride. Overall, the characters are well-written and can be distinguished well. Good job!

Grammer and Vocabulary:
As mentioned in the 'plot' section, there are minute errors of punctuation and misplacement of letters. Although, they are not that noticeable, I still recommend the author to correct them.

Improvements needed to be done:
Your book is absolutely perfect, it's originality and chaotic (in a good way) plot line is just awesome. Apart from some minute errors, nothing else has to be changed. Excellent work! Keep writing!

Overall Enjoyment:
This book is really enjoyable! The plotline is well-thought and well-written, if you discard some mistakes. It is a unexpected ride filled with plot twists, humor, suspense, and many more! It was a totally new topic to me personally, and your book opened a new and chaotic world filled with something so unique and interesting! Never stop writing your masterpiece! Good luck!

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