Name: Leafpounce
I, personally, like this! Good job!
Age: 14 Moons
Ooch, pretty young. It's okay, he can still be warrior (duh). But you haven't written the rest of the book, so that's fine.
Clan: DewClan
NONONONONONONONO ABSOLUTELY NOT! TOO OVERUSED
Rank: Warrior
:D
Appearance: Brown tom with green eyes
This is short, so I don't really get anything to rate on. Green eyes are overused, make them like a Blue-green shade, a Yellow-green shade, or a mix. Brown? Just brown? Chocolate brown, light brown, brown tabby, fluffy, skinny, fat, spots, stripes, slick, I need to know! Two points taken.
Personality: He still got underfoot with senior warriors as he was made a warrior he's quiet most of the time and really snappy. But he did come up with a hunting skill based of a fighting skill. It's a sort of leap, and that's how he got his warrior name.
This is great, but change one thing. How can you be quiet, and snappy at the same time? Maybe a little snappy when he gets annoyed, as in make it so that he is "uneasily annoyed"
Backstory: After his sister was born dead, his mother though she could raise him. So Spottedbelly did. He did normal kit stuff, then when he was made an apprentice his mentor was formerly of MeanClan (SlateClan). There was a big war between DewClan and SlateClan, DewClan won, and he just had to come up with a hunting move to get his warrior name.
Short, and not much, but I like the name Spottedbelly. It's beautiful. But what about his apprentice-hood? Where is that?
Mate: NONE YET but in future books his mate is Gemheart (white with Amber-red eyes) and daughters are Birchkit and Honeykit
Gem- is okay. Personally, I don't like when two-legs (lol) use Gem- or Shappire- or any kind of gem. Half a point. OH! And the 'red' eyes is not really working, even if it is amber red. Amber+red=orange
Parents: Redstar (black tom with red front paw and leg) Brambletail/Spottedbelly (Calico she-cat, mainly white/ Calico, mainly tawny)
Ugh, the cliche thing where the main character is related to the leader of the Clan. One point.
Siblings: Dead sister named Skykit, white she-kit
:( Breaks my heart. She is perfect.
Other: Because the nursery was so empty when he was born, Gemheart's mother and Spottedbelly tried to get them as close as possible. And they became mates when warriors.
Mkay

OVERALL, I give a 5 1/2. All of my rants up there.

-Sharp